Grief brings Relief
Free verse17 total reviews
Comment from tedanytime
These words express deep heartache...like a burning fire within, that rages uncontrolled. Mind numbing, unable to discern, trying to escape...
Giving way to tears and shuddering sobs, uttering sounds no one can understand...crying out...trying to comprehend...waves of unknown emotion...waning...
Was that a soft touch across the soul...some one to understand...perhaps one that consoles...
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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These words express deep heartache...like a burning fire within, that rages uncontrolled. Mind numbing, unable to discern, trying to escape...
Giving way to tears and shuddering sobs, uttering sounds no one can understand...crying out...trying to comprehend...waves of unknown emotion...waning...
Was that a soft touch across the soul...some one to understand...perhaps one that consoles...
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your insightful review~Debbie
Comment from turtledove
Debbie, so true burying the pain does more harm in the long run. When I worked with people I found many in a state of denial, lack of reality where they would choose the positive, forget to deal with the negative and hence not heal...never moving forward. Love the poem:) Beautiful colours and diagram:) take care td:)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Debbie, so true burying the pain does more harm in the long run. When I worked with people I found many in a state of denial, lack of reality where they would choose the positive, forget to deal with the negative and hence not heal...never moving forward. Love the poem:) Beautiful colours and diagram:) take care td:)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your understanding and insightful review~Debbie
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You're welcome! td:)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
once again I relate to your words like they were my own... My favorite saying was; Pain is my friend, in the same attempt to kid myself that I could handle what it delivered... You have hit the nail perfectly on the head... Self-honesty does allow the grieving process, it all has a cycle which will play out no matter how we try to hide it... I loved this poem, it was written in clarity from a higher place.
If you get a chance one time go in and read my 'Can't be your friend anymore' no need to review or anything like that just goes with this write... I know you would understand it.
Take care my friend and I am relieved to see you name appearing in my message box.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Hi Debbie,
once again I relate to your words like they were my own... My favorite saying was; Pain is my friend, in the same attempt to kid myself that I could handle what it delivered... You have hit the nail perfectly on the head... Self-honesty does allow the grieving process, it all has a cycle which will play out no matter how we try to hide it... I loved this poem, it was written in clarity from a higher place.
If you get a chance one time go in and read my 'Can't be your friend anymore' no need to review or anything like that just goes with this write... I know you would understand it.
Take care my friend and I am relieved to see you name appearing in my message box.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, my friend~Debbie xx
Love yours too!
Comment from deb552
I feel as though you somehow got into my head before writing this, cos it rings so true for me, and probably many others. Free verse for me, is a difficult write, but I think you've pulled it off in a 6 star way. It has an even flow to it, that allows each line to follow the next without any question of where your thoughts are going. It's a thought provoking piece, written in a concise way, and your chosen words help to get your message across. At some point along the line, we have to admit to ourselves the grief we're feeling, and face it, because the pain won't go away till we do so. Much easier said than done, but 'tis the only way to move forward! GREAT JOB Debbie; I thank you for sharing! OX deb
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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I feel as though you somehow got into my head before writing this, cos it rings so true for me, and probably many others. Free verse for me, is a difficult write, but I think you've pulled it off in a 6 star way. It has an even flow to it, that allows each line to follow the next without any question of where your thoughts are going. It's a thought provoking piece, written in a concise way, and your chosen words help to get your message across. At some point along the line, we have to admit to ourselves the grief we're feeling, and face it, because the pain won't go away till we do so. Much easier said than done, but 'tis the only way to move forward! GREAT JOB Debbie; I thank you for sharing! OX deb
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thanks again, Deb. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Selina Stambi
Deliberately deceiving myself
Denying ... the alliteration is very effective in reinforcing the mood of the piece.
the harm done
By denial of true feelings .... a powerful observation. It's such a pity that so many people don't understand how important it is to acknowledge and give vent to one's feelings.
I hope she/he comes to that place of healing and peace.
I don't think I've read any of your work before, Debbie. This is very well done.
Love the rhyme in the title - grief/relief
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Deliberately deceiving myself
Denying ... the alliteration is very effective in reinforcing the mood of the piece.
the harm done
By denial of true feelings .... a powerful observation. It's such a pity that so many people don't understand how important it is to acknowledge and give vent to one's feelings.
I hope she/he comes to that place of healing and peace.
I don't think I've read any of your work before, Debbie. This is very well done.
Love the rhyme in the title - grief/relief
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your very kind and thoughtful review. Great to meet you~Debbie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is very true. Cry, grieve, let the pain flow out. In time you heal and can move on. Later you can even joke about the source of your grief, whether remembering silly things a dead loved one did or making fun of a lover who left you. Time really DOES heal all wounds, and tears are the salve that helps it along.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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This is very true. Cry, grieve, let the pain flow out. In time you heal and can move on. Later you can even joke about the source of your grief, whether remembering silly things a dead loved one did or making fun of a lover who left you. Time really DOES heal all wounds, and tears are the salve that helps it along.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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So very true isn't it. Holding on to the pain is insane. Have a wonderful evening
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written grief goes through many stages but you have to put things behind you and move on acceptance is the best way well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Yes my friend this is well written grief goes through many stages but you have to put things behind you and move on acceptance is the best way well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you so very much, Jill. Take care my fieriend~Debd
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in deliberately deceiving/denying
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good assonance in grieving/proceed
soulful expression of intense emotion throughout
Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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good alliteration in deliberately deceiving/denying
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good assonance in grieving/proceed
soulful expression of intense emotion throughout
Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you so very much, Brooke. This is about a situation I am in. This helped me figure out the way I should go with it. Have a blessed night~Debbie
Comment from JW
How much easily it usually is to deny the truth instead of having to face it.
Your poem does a good job stating this.
No doubt, this message is true. I know I have face things within my lifetime where denying truth was a lot easier than having to face it. JW
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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How much easily it usually is to deny the truth instead of having to face it.
Your poem does a good job stating this.
No doubt, this message is true. I know I have face things within my lifetime where denying truth was a lot easier than having to face it. JW
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks Jonathon. Take care,my friend~Debbie
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
You are right, if we deal with the grief it does indeed bring us an odd kind of relief and it does set us free to move forwards. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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You are right, if we deal with the grief it does indeed bring us an odd kind of relief and it does set us free to move forwards. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you so very much. Grief truly does set us free. Have a blessed day~Debbie
