Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Heca Moon"Murder Mystery
50 total reviews
Comment from jadapenn
My guess is little Darcy might not have long to live if she carries on being the little "B" she was in the last two chapters. Someone might just get the hell in with her. Nice chapter, very well written. I wanted to smack her and must say I admire Brian for not doing something to her on the spot. Lol. You're getting me all riled up here. Well done. Luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
  |
My guess is little Darcy might not have long to live if she carries on being the little "B" she was in the last two chapters. Someone might just get the hell in with her. Nice chapter, very well written. I wanted to smack her and must say I admire Brian for not doing something to her on the spot. Lol. You're getting me all riled up here. Well done. Luv jada
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
-
Quite a few reviewers expressed much of the same sentiments in regards to our greedly little niece. hehehehe
Thanks so much, Jada. Love ya, Bev
Comment from Dean Kuch
Heca (Vulture)Moon, indeed, for that is exactly how I perceived this Miss Darcy character. A wolf in sheep's clothing, if you will. She certainly opened the door and allowed Father DeShano to step in the trap she'd laid for him, didn't she? What a rude young lady, with a very rusk demeanor.
I like old Alyx already, and I've just met him for the first time. Of course, I am a big 'dog' person, so it came as no surprise to me. If there is canine companionship in any story, I'm all for it. I can't tell you how I would have responded to Miss Darcy's request to remove Alyx from the room. I wouldn't want you to think ill of me. Let me just say that I'm no priest, and my response would have been a bit more...colorful than Brian's.
This is an excellent story, with wonderfully fleshed-out characters, spot-on dialogue, and an interesting story line that keeps the reader engaged and involved in the story, it's characters, and everything that's involved with them.
Very well done, Writingfundemension...
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
|
Heca (Vulture)Moon, indeed, for that is exactly how I perceived this Miss Darcy character. A wolf in sheep's clothing, if you will. She certainly opened the door and allowed Father DeShano to step in the trap she'd laid for him, didn't she? What a rude young lady, with a very rusk demeanor.
I like old Alyx already, and I've just met him for the first time. Of course, I am a big 'dog' person, so it came as no surprise to me. If there is canine companionship in any story, I'm all for it. I can't tell you how I would have responded to Miss Darcy's request to remove Alyx from the room. I wouldn't want you to think ill of me. Let me just say that I'm no priest, and my response would have been a bit more...colorful than Brian's.
This is an excellent story, with wonderfully fleshed-out characters, spot-on dialogue, and an interesting story line that keeps the reader engaged and involved in the story, it's characters, and everything that's involved with them.
Very well done, Writingfundemension...
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
-
Hi, Dean. What a gracious review! Thank you for taking time to read my chapter and offer such supportive and encouraging insights. I'm a dog lover, too, and I think I would've have told HER to leave. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Quillian
I liked the play between Father Brian and Alyx, it read true and simple, a conversation between a solitary man and his dog. Very well done. Your introduction of Darcy as an unsympathetic character (at this time) is done with her revealing blouse, comment about the church and the sticking door, asking her host for a specific coffee, coffee too hot, room too cold, etc. May be a bit heavy handed. The one thing I do suggest you change is, 'she gushed'. Gushed is not in line with the good solid writing of the rest of your piece. I think you are a gifted writer and am looking forward to more of your story.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
|
I liked the play between Father Brian and Alyx, it read true and simple, a conversation between a solitary man and his dog. Very well done. Your introduction of Darcy as an unsympathetic character (at this time) is done with her revealing blouse, comment about the church and the sticking door, asking her host for a specific coffee, coffee too hot, room too cold, etc. May be a bit heavy handed. The one thing I do suggest you change is, 'she gushed'. Gushed is not in line with the good solid writing of the rest of your piece. I think you are a gifted writer and am looking forward to more of your story.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
-
Thanks very much, Quillian. It' generous of you to take time to review my chapter and offer your insights. I will take a look at the section you mention! Your support and encouragement are very much appreciated.
Bev
Comment from Amie Watson
Mystery and crime is where my writing and reading interests are, so I was happy to see this chapter.
It was nice of you to put the characters in the notes, but I followed just fine while I was reading because you did such a great job introducing them and you were creative with the dialogue. The Darcy character was really well done. You set us up not to like her with the dog growling, and then you made true to the promise by making her full of loathsome personality traits. She's one of those characters you want so badly to be guilty, but probably isn't.
Loved it!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
 |
Mystery and crime is where my writing and reading interests are, so I was happy to see this chapter.
It was nice of you to put the characters in the notes, but I followed just fine while I was reading because you did such a great job introducing them and you were creative with the dialogue. The Darcy character was really well done. You set us up not to like her with the dog growling, and then you made true to the promise by making her full of loathsome personality traits. She's one of those characters you want so badly to be guilty, but probably isn't.
Loved it!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
-
Amie, what a delight to come across this wonderful review this evening. I so appreciate your generous and warmly encouraging insights. Thanks for letting me know what you felt worked in this chapter, I'm always learning from other readers and writers. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from jjstar
What a little bitch! I remember I disliked her from the beginning, but now we see truly, what a self-serving, manipulative and cold person she really is. Geesh! She drive a nun to drink! :)
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
|
What a little bitch! I remember I disliked her from the beginning, but now we see truly, what a self-serving, manipulative and cold person she really is. Geesh! She drive a nun to drink! :)
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
-
Hi, JJ. Good memory! It's great to hear from you. Hope the editing 'business' is going well for you. Thanks so much for this so-generous review and the time you took from your busy schedule. I really appreciate! Hugs, Bev
Comment from wordsfromsue
What a disgusting vulture Darcy is. Though I have insulted vultures with that comparison.
How neat that the priest had a visit from Debra and Darcy had a visit from what's waiting for her!!
Nasty woman!!
reply by the author on 18-May-2013
|
What a disgusting vulture Darcy is. Though I have insulted vultures with that comparison.
How neat that the priest had a visit from Debra and Darcy had a visit from what's waiting for her!!
Nasty woman!!
Comment Written 18-May-2013
reply by the author on 18-May-2013
-
Hi, Sue. Thank you for making me laugh! You have very neatly capsulized what no one else picked up. What an awesome review! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Adri7enne
You've started using the same picture and it confused me. I assumed I'd read it. From now on I'll open it and check if my review is there at the bottom of the post.
I guess your story runs along several parallel lines. It seems many moons ago that Debra Padget was murdered but we haven't had the funeral yet. There will be many strings to bring together.
Darcy really is a piece of work! You've got her down pretty pat. She's a rude, obnoxious woman. Little wonder she beckons the shadow. LOL!
"We can set the CREMAINS on a table ..." Is that what the cremated remains are called? Brand new word for me!
Oh, I really don't like Darcy. Maybe you could arrange to drop her in the killer's path next time around.
Well done, Bev. Got me involved with your characters. Father Brian is a dear!
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
|
You've started using the same picture and it confused me. I assumed I'd read it. From now on I'll open it and check if my review is there at the bottom of the post.
I guess your story runs along several parallel lines. It seems many moons ago that Debra Padget was murdered but we haven't had the funeral yet. There will be many strings to bring together.
Darcy really is a piece of work! You've got her down pretty pat. She's a rude, obnoxious woman. Little wonder she beckons the shadow. LOL!
"We can set the CREMAINS on a table ..." Is that what the cremated remains are called? Brand new word for me!
Oh, I really don't like Darcy. Maybe you could arrange to drop her in the killer's path next time around.
Well done, Bev. Got me involved with your characters. Father Brian is a dear!
Comment Written 17-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
-
Thanks so much, Adrienne, for the gracious and generous review. I really appreciate your continued support!
:0) Bev
Comment from emjaihammond
This story has a very interesting plot and I thought your characters were developed very nicely. Even the dog shows personality. That is always a good sign for me when I'm enjoying a good story. There is a good solid foundation,
and I really enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
|
This story has a very interesting plot and I thought your characters were developed very nicely. Even the dog shows personality. That is always a good sign for me when I'm enjoying a good story. There is a good solid foundation,
and I really enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 17-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
-
Thank you so much for this gracious review, E. I sure appreciate your encouragement and support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Connie C
Hi Bev,
I'm back from vacation and playing catch up, so forgive me if this is a bit late. As always, you've written another outstanding piece full of its usual excellent dialogue. I like the way you start out with the interaction between Brian and Alyx. I'm a dog lover, so of course I really enjoyed this. You do such a great job of getting inside Brian's head and letting us see how he perceives Darcy Shaw, who comes across as quite rude and bitchy and also somewhat manipulative. I did not detect a single spag. The only thing I wasn't too crazy about is that picture of the snake--yuck! Don't like snakes. But it fits the theme of your novel quite well since there are a few snakes in the story. The fun of reading this is trying to determine who all the real snakes are. Excellent job, as always, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
|
Hi Bev,
I'm back from vacation and playing catch up, so forgive me if this is a bit late. As always, you've written another outstanding piece full of its usual excellent dialogue. I like the way you start out with the interaction between Brian and Alyx. I'm a dog lover, so of course I really enjoyed this. You do such a great job of getting inside Brian's head and letting us see how he perceives Darcy Shaw, who comes across as quite rude and bitchy and also somewhat manipulative. I did not detect a single spag. The only thing I wasn't too crazy about is that picture of the snake--yuck! Don't like snakes. But it fits the theme of your novel quite well since there are a few snakes in the story. The fun of reading this is trying to determine who all the real snakes are. Excellent job, as always, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 17-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
-
Hi, Connie. I've been missing your poetry! So glad you are back and, hopefully, freshly inspired.
Your gracious and generous review means so much, Connie. I'm glad the 'bucks' are still available as I'd hate to think you went through all the trouble with little to show for it. Your words of encouragement are pure gold, Connie. You've been so faithful from the beginning. I can't begin to convey adequately how much that has meant for me. Love ya, Bev
-
What nice things you say to me, Bev. While on my trip, I could only look at FanStory--couldn't, or at least didn't want to, attempt typing reviews on my IPhone. But I did look at your chapter and made notes to myself so that when I returned I could type them up. So--see how special you are? Love ya right back,
Connie
-
Aw, that really touches me. You're so good to me, Connie. I just a bit of a kick in the keester about all the dangling angles LOL. So, this really cheered me up.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from NicciFaye
Dacry---bad intentions, devil in blue dress. Setting him up like that I can only imagine how the Father only wanted to abide and ensure a meaningful funeral; to be put into such a bind. Excellent read. Looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
|
Dacry---bad intentions, devil in blue dress. Setting him up like that I can only imagine how the Father only wanted to abide and ensure a meaningful funeral; to be put into such a bind. Excellent read. Looking forward to more.
Comment Written 17-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
-
Hi, NicciFaye. Thanks for the great review! I really appreciate you taking time to read. Warm regards, Bev
