THICKER Skin
Pentameter Whimsy and Lament...29 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
I clicked on thinking some reviewer had irritated the muse. Looks like it is just the hubby getting under the skin. Maybe you could give us a part two from his point of view. Does my mother-in-law claws show? Hugs to both author and villian.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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I clicked on thinking some reviewer had irritated the muse. Looks like it is just the hubby getting under the skin. Maybe you could give us a part two from his point of view. Does my mother-in-law claws show? Hugs to both author and villian.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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LOL Yep, just the hubby. No one else...he gets under my skin a lot and I need about 50 extra layers to get me through the next 20 years. Wish me luck and thanks for a thoughtful review.
Cheers P
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Comment from rhymelord
Dear Diane,
At first I thought this was directed at the nasty types on FS and was pleased to see it. Then I realised it was more personal. Whatever, it is not only eloquent but lively in its use of colloquialisms, although I am not sure that our American cousins will relate to "in like Flynn"....love it!!!
You are a true master of rhythm and metre and not in the sing song style of many writing in iambs. All in all a meritorious Sixer. Go to the top of the class.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Dear Diane,
At first I thought this was directed at the nasty types on FS and was pleased to see it. Then I realised it was more personal. Whatever, it is not only eloquent but lively in its use of colloquialisms, although I am not sure that our American cousins will relate to "in like Flynn"....love it!!!
You are a true master of rhythm and metre and not in the sing song style of many writing in iambs. All in all a meritorious Sixer. Go to the top of the class.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Um...Diane?
LOL...No...Phillippa - but if her rap sheets good I'll take it! LOL
Thanks for the sixer...I know you know I'm from Oz so I'll assume you have RIGHT face and WRONG name...LOL It's okay...most people either remember me or forget me. Loved your review and sixer and can only hope this was meant for ME and NOT Diane...haha Well anyway, it's too late now! It's locked in Eddie...whoops, I mean Reg!
Cheers P
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Mea Culpa. Oops. So Sorry. Grovel, grovel but, at least I got the Sixer right. It was intended for you ...er...err...
Regards
Reg
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Hahaha.
As long as it was meant for THIS face Reggy, then you are forgiven...
Hey, what's in a name?
Although mine shouldn't be that easy to forget...your grovelling just cancelled everything out but NOT necessary.
I'm really crap at names. Thanks again for the sixer. The slightly thicker skin ALSO thanks you...you are a wonderful rhymer yourself and one of very few here that is funny.
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P
Comment from JM daSilva
But you know, they have discovered that EQ is as important as IQ. When a person is insensitive, they make many mistakes because they don't suffer enough to try to avoid them. Of course, there are people who attack you even when you have made no mistake, but by suffering you can avoid them in the future, and maybe you'll suffer less in life.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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But you know, they have discovered that EQ is as important as IQ. When a person is insensitive, they make many mistakes because they don't suffer enough to try to avoid them. Of course, there are people who attack you even when you have made no mistake, but by suffering you can avoid them in the future, and maybe you'll suffer less in life.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hey, great analysis...hard to avoid them when you are married to them. LOL I keep thinking he is way too sensitive, but maybe its that he is INsensitive. Thing is, he can dole it out but doesn't like receiving the same back and is also highly unreasonable over some things which baffles me.
Anyhow thanks for the review. Much appreciated.
Cheers P
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Great pleasure reading it. Welcome.
Comment from FLutterodt
I think I need to grow a thicker skin
To weather all the hurt that gets inside
Apparently my cover's way too thin
To buffer any brunt of wounded pride
Yes once in a while we all feel like growing a thicker skin to fend off the ugly arrows that fly our way. Lovely poem technically. A sonnet? Hmmm
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I think I need to grow a thicker skin
To weather all the hurt that gets inside
Apparently my cover's way too thin
To buffer any brunt of wounded pride
Yes once in a while we all feel like growing a thicker skin to fend off the ugly arrows that fly our way. Lovely poem technically. A sonnet? Hmmm
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL A sonnet? NO...just pentameter with quatrains and a closing couplet similar. Many thanks for your review.
Cheers P
Comment from Spitfire
Reference to violin had me going for a moment. But now I see the metaphor --heartstings or perhaps the old joke about the tiniest violin playing hearts and flowers when someone is looking for sympathy. Certain images lead me to believe this is about a verbally abusive relationship:
My arse just can't compete with your chagrin
As acid spits and spews, I'm battered, fried
I let you lather up and soak right in
It didn't change when I became your bride
Definitely time to grow a thicker skin if you want to stay in the game.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Reference to violin had me going for a moment. But now I see the metaphor --heartstings or perhaps the old joke about the tiniest violin playing hearts and flowers when someone is looking for sympathy. Certain images lead me to believe this is about a verbally abusive relationship:
My arse just can't compete with your chagrin
As acid spits and spews, I'm battered, fried
I let you lather up and soak right in
It didn't change when I became your bride
Definitely time to grow a thicker skin if you want to stay in the game.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Haha...I wondered should I have exchanged the f-bomb for the wor "tiny"...then it perhaps would have made more instant sense.
Thanks for your comments. Its not verbally abusive in the sense of name calling...but caustic digs I put in the same category...he is rarely wrong of course and HIGHLY unreasonable.
Can't say I'm a bed of roses either though...haha
Cheers and thanks a bunch Spitty.
P
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Comment from Rondeno
The fourth stanza is a bit sticky. Can we be "bereft" of tears? I have a personal horror of "'twere". Is "tin" there for the sake of the rhyme?
For someone who reserves the right to be
acerbic, acid, acrimonious, this
resembles major taking of the piss -
a public plaint of vulnerability?
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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The fourth stanza is a bit sticky. Can we be "bereft" of tears? I have a personal horror of "'twere". Is "tin" there for the sake of the rhyme?
For someone who reserves the right to be
acerbic, acid, acrimonious, this
resembles major taking of the piss -
a public plaint of vulnerability?
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Yes to all that. THANKS
Comment from dmt1967
I think for most people to survive in this world we all need a thicker skin to stop the pain penetrating and getting in thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I think for most people to survive in this world we all need a thicker skin to stop the pain penetrating and getting in thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Thanks dmt. You are right, we are all a sensitive lot and quite possible all need another layer or two on the epidermis.
Cheers P
Comment from ravenblack
" crushed that fucking violin".. Of course you mean the world's smallest violin playing just for you. Or maybe thicker skin also causes a Godzilla growth spurt and it's a huge violin you stomp to toothpicks. " epidermisuicide"- hah!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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" crushed that fucking violin".. Of course you mean the world's smallest violin playing just for you. Or maybe thicker skin also causes a Godzilla growth spurt and it's a huge violin you stomp to toothpicks. " epidermisuicide"- hah!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Yes, thats what I meant...LOL I never looked at the violin that way...but hey, I AM larger than life most times! So your comments have some credence...hahaha
Thanks friend
Cheers P
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PS I could have all so replaced the epi thingy with "epidermihomicide"...both actually worked. LOL Shit, thats disturbing. Haha
Comment from Earl of Oxford
I think all us writers are over-sensitive and need thicker skins, P, but we are what we are and as a result often feel and appreciate what the THICK-skinners don't.
'shit-stocks' LOL - throw them back with interest!
I had trouble pronouncing 'HES-I-AN' as two syllables, but us Poms do speak funny. LOL.
LMAO at the last line romantic metaphor - blimey, you do have some strange sex toys. MWAHA!
Excellent as ever.
Cheers, Ray x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I think all us writers are over-sensitive and need thicker skins, P, but we are what we are and as a result often feel and appreciate what the THICK-skinners don't.
'shit-stocks' LOL - throw them back with interest!
I had trouble pronouncing 'HES-I-AN' as two syllables, but us Poms do speak funny. LOL.
LMAO at the last line romantic metaphor - blimey, you do have some strange sex toys. MWAHA!
Excellent as ever.
Cheers, Ray x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL No trouble this end honey pie...HEH-SHUN and yeah you DO speak funny LOL
Re: The sex toy...I CRUSHED it before I could use it. LMAO
You naughty boy
Excearllent AS ever. Thanks Rayby baby.
Cheers P
Comment from amada
I think you are the master of rhyming! It seems so effortlessly and well done, nothing superfluous. Your last line is fun...everyone want to F that F...ing violin once in a while.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I think you are the master of rhyming! It seems so effortlessly and well done, nothing superfluous. Your last line is fun...everyone want to F that F...ing violin once in a while.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL Not the master but thankyou and yes there is NO hope for the violin now. Guess its up to me.
Cheers and thanks so much
P
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