Emergency Room
Poem about what is seen too many times in the ER17 total reviews
Comment from Just Alyx
Reality is undeniable, isn't it. No deflections, and especially in your job. The straightforward delivery was the only way to go, the same for reporting abuse. It is the silence that's the loudest. Lucky people like you are there listening; when writers, even more the poignant and thoughtful read, I reckon. Strong entry and all the best in the site comp. Alyx.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Reality is undeniable, isn't it. No deflections, and especially in your job. The straightforward delivery was the only way to go, the same for reporting abuse. It is the silence that's the loudest. Lucky people like you are there listening; when writers, even more the poignant and thoughtful read, I reckon. Strong entry and all the best in the site comp. Alyx.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thanks Alyx for your kind review.
Comment from hifein
and the dads have the audacity to bring them to the e r -- mind boggling. sometimes everything seems so sick. you expressed your appeal well -- we must stay alert and not ignore the signs, which sometimes are clear as day.
nice poetic expression of your care, well written. unfortunately, we are only able to save a few. but even a few are better than none. you may relate to my 'tearful tale' posted on fanstory. this piece reminded me of it. best to you, hi
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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and the dads have the audacity to bring them to the e r -- mind boggling. sometimes everything seems so sick. you expressed your appeal well -- we must stay alert and not ignore the signs, which sometimes are clear as day.
nice poetic expression of your care, well written. unfortunately, we are only able to save a few. but even a few are better than none. you may relate to my 'tearful tale' posted on fanstory. this piece reminded me of it. best to you, hi
Comment Written 09-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review of my poem.
Comment from MelissaBickel
What a sad situation to find yourself in. I can't imagine how you endure it. Still it probably helps those babes to see a friendly face.
A broken spirit so young, should never be. Your poem truly allows us to see what you're feeling.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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What a sad situation to find yourself in. I can't imagine how you endure it. Still it probably helps those babes to see a friendly face.
A broken spirit so young, should never be. Your poem truly allows us to see what you're feeling.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you Melissa for reviewing and commenting so kindly on my poem.
Comment from josieg521
Very direct and well said story of abused children. I can feel your pain and love for these children. I hope your message is heard. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Very direct and well said story of abused children. I can feel your pain and love for these children. I hope your message is heard. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you josieg for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Bobby Jo
Oh my gosh, this brought me to tears. This is so sad that children can be hurt so bad, they learn not to physically be hurt. Sad, but true. good poem. I hope you really didn't have to witness this.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Oh my gosh, this brought me to tears. This is so sad that children can be hurt so bad, they learn not to physically be hurt. Sad, but true. good poem. I hope you really didn't have to witness this.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you Bobby Jo for the great review. I really appreciate the stars. Yes, sadly I did many times and still do.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Justjo,
This is so sad when children are abused. A poem that makes one pause and wonder why oh why.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Dear Justjo,
This is so sad when children are abused. A poem that makes one pause and wonder why oh why.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you Winslow for your kind review of my poem.
Comment from kentuckywoman53
Excellent writing. The rhyming is good and your poem is easily read both silent and aloud. Each sentence progresses your poem and your wording brings a visual into my mind. A sad poem and unfortunately a very accurate one about child abuse. Continued success.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Excellent writing. The rhyming is good and your poem is easily read both silent and aloud. Each sentence progresses your poem and your wording brings a visual into my mind. A sad poem and unfortunately a very accurate one about child abuse. Continued success.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review and the six stars.
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You are welcome. You did all the hard work and it was excellent.
Comment from ravenblack
thanks for the reminder on what goes on. and thanks for reporting on 'dad'. it is chilling that the poor child sat there tearless despite a broken arm. it's the power of fear that hopefully, by reporting it, you have dispelled.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thanks for the reminder on what goes on. and thanks for reporting on 'dad'. it is chilling that the poor child sat there tearless despite a broken arm. it's the power of fear that hopefully, by reporting it, you have dispelled.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you ravenblack for your kind review.
Comment from 9999pool
Parents should exercise caution and safety for their children.
Imagine a child tearless and silent.
It is going to be a poignant affair one day if we neglect our children.
We have to protect them at all costs.
A child's joy and life can be taken away so easily for just a moment of neglect or mistake.
They are fragile like our porcelain wares.
Take care of them and love them, not hurt them
Excellent plea to parents to never leave their children out of sight into harm's way.
Enjoyable and truthful read.
Cheers, Rithcie.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Parents should exercise caution and safety for their children.
Imagine a child tearless and silent.
It is going to be a poignant affair one day if we neglect our children.
We have to protect them at all costs.
A child's joy and life can be taken away so easily for just a moment of neglect or mistake.
They are fragile like our porcelain wares.
Take care of them and love them, not hurt them
Excellent plea to parents to never leave their children out of sight into harm's way.
Enjoyable and truthful read.
Cheers, Rithcie.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Rithcie for your kind review and words.
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Actually working in the hospital needs a lot of courage and strength in the things we see inside. No one likes to go to a hospital.
Ritchie.
Comment from Misrael
What a sad poem but it has a lot of truth to it unfortunately. I cringe at the thought of that sort of thing happening.Good read and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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What a sad poem but it has a lot of truth to it unfortunately. I cringe at the thought of that sort of thing happening.Good read and keep on writing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Misrael for your kind review.
