A Gnome's New Home
I should have been smarter!46 total reviews
Comment from violet11
i love the story you have told within this poem
i like how you have expressed speech in this poem between a human and a gnome
its also a fun poem and I like the rhyming within this poem
it also flows very well and is easy to read
im not sure you need the line about gnomes being really very small maybe you could re word this or change this line to say something about the gnome that stands out more
but very good poem and interesting to
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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i love the story you have told within this poem
i like how you have expressed speech in this poem between a human and a gnome
its also a fun poem and I like the rhyming within this poem
it also flows very well and is easy to read
im not sure you need the line about gnomes being really very small maybe you could re word this or change this line to say something about the gnome that stands out more
but very good poem and interesting to
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little poem. I'll have to take another look at that line.
Comment from FREEFEE
I thought it was a well told little story. A lot of humor in it. The flow and rhymes of this poem are witty, and fitting. Good write. I don't see any corrections that could be made except for maybe finding a picture that might help stimulate the imagination a bit more.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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I thought it was a well told little story. A lot of humor in it. The flow and rhymes of this poem are witty, and fitting. Good write. I don't see any corrections that could be made except for maybe finding a picture that might help stimulate the imagination a bit more.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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I'm glad you liked my little gnome poem. All the gnome pictures looked like ads for travelocity. I couldn't find a good one. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Cindy,
A fun poem with sage advice. I never will invite a gnome home. Excellent rhyming and flow. If I want to see a gnome where should I look.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Dear Cindy,
A fun poem with sage advice. I never will invite a gnome home. Excellent rhyming and flow. If I want to see a gnome where should I look.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Wow, thanks for the six! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much.
Comment from amahra
LOL, this is precious. I loved the story and it was fun to read. I loved the rhymes and they weren't forced like so many on here. And I liked the rhythm and the flow. Great job my friend.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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LOL, this is precious. I loved the story and it was fun to read. I loved the rhymes and they weren't forced like so many on here. And I liked the rhythm and the flow. Great job my friend.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from words
Great fun.
Love your ending:My woeful words you must believe,
He never, ever wants to leave.
He had me fooled, I think it's plain,
We never did get that rain.
Gnomes are imps, and imps can curse;
I wouldn't want to make things worse.
So should you chance to meet a gnome,
Never, never take him home!
I must admit, I have taken home a gnome or two in my life. LOL
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Great fun.
Love your ending:My woeful words you must believe,
He never, ever wants to leave.
He had me fooled, I think it's plain,
We never did get that rain.
Gnomes are imps, and imps can curse;
I wouldn't want to make things worse.
So should you chance to meet a gnome,
Never, never take him home!
I must admit, I have taken home a gnome or two in my life. LOL
Hugs, d
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Yes, there are a few people who could have been turned into gnomes for this poem. I didn't think of it at the time, but the reviewers caught it. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Cindy,
this is so good. It's like saying don't invinte a straanger in you home they always plan to over stay thier welome
Best to you in this contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Cindy,
this is so good. It's like saying don't invinte a straanger in you home they always plan to over stay thier welome
Best to you in this contest.
Gert
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Thanks. I didn't really mean to send that message, but it's amazing how many people got it. Glad you enjoyed.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Macsween
I loved this. Charming, intelligent and funny. The title caught my attention and the work shows great imagination. Great comedic ryhming. I laughed all the way through.
I'm going to read this to my five year old nephew when he comes to visit, he'll love it. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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I loved this. Charming, intelligent and funny. The title caught my attention and the work shows great imagination. Great comedic ryhming. I laughed all the way through.
I'm going to read this to my five year old nephew when he comes to visit, he'll love it. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thanks for the six! I'm thrilled you liked my little gnome poem so much. Hope you and your little nephew have fun with it.
Comment from juliaSjames
A story with a moral in this engaging write.
Good end rhyme and a rollicking if uneven meter; but it's the amusing, whimsical story that impresses.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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A story with a moral in this engaging write.
Good end rhyme and a rollicking if uneven meter; but it's the amusing, whimsical story that impresses.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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I'm surprised how many people have mentioned a moral. It wasn't intentional; it just sort of snuck in. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
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LOL
The moral is in your final lines - there are many "gnomes" lurking around trying to guilt someone into taking them home.
peace and blessings, julia
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Yes, I suppose there are a few people who could have been turned into gnomes for this poem. I wasn't thinking about that when I wrote it.
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:-))
Comment from beccabootie123
delightful piece enjoyed all about it the message the color palate and picture all works well to tell a full story. thank you for this write
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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delightful piece enjoyed all about it the message the color palate and picture all works well to tell a full story. thank you for this write
Comment Written 01-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from dmt1967
This gnome in my home story made me laugh they are as sly as leprechauns and some relatives once you invite them in they never want to leave lol good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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This gnome in my home story made me laugh they are as sly as leprechauns and some relatives once you invite them in they never want to leave lol good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Yep, there are a few people who easily could have been turned into a gnome for this poem. You have to be careful who you invite in. Thanks for the great review.
