Hands of Man
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Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
YOU HAVE AN AMAZING WRITE HERE
I WOULD HAVE SO GIVEN YOU A SIX
BUT I'M ALL OUT OF THEM HOPE TO DEE MORE
OF YOUR WRITING WELL DONE MY FRIEND
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
YOU HAVE AN AMAZING WRITE HERE
I WOULD HAVE SO GIVEN YOU A SIX
BUT I'M ALL OUT OF THEM HOPE TO DEE MORE
OF YOUR WRITING WELL DONE MY FRIEND
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you!
Curt
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Amazing truthful lines and a worthy entry for Poem of the month, I wish you luck, I particularly liked the line: 'of liberty for all to see inside a soulless shell', love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
Amazing truthful lines and a worthy entry for Poem of the month, I wish you luck, I particularly liked the line: 'of liberty for all to see inside a soulless shell', love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thanks Dolly!
Curt
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi;
the message within the words of your poem are illuminating. It is oftentimes easy to forget all of the things we pass through.
I'm not sure where the 'alliteration' is, as I do not see repeating consonant sounds.
You changed tense within the first stanza, and several of your rhyming words aren't true rhymes - for example; 'about' and 'shouts.' The ending 's' changes the syllable accent.
If you go back and edit, please let me know and I will re-review,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
Hi;
the message within the words of your poem are illuminating. It is oftentimes easy to forget all of the things we pass through.
I'm not sure where the 'alliteration' is, as I do not see repeating consonant sounds.
You changed tense within the first stanza, and several of your rhyming words aren't true rhymes - for example; 'about' and 'shouts.' The ending 's' changes the syllable accent.
If you go back and edit, please let me know and I will re-review,
~patty~
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your thoughts,
Curt
Comment from pipersfancy
Your use of the term "the killing fields" had me envisioning the Cambodian blood bath of the Khmer Rouge in the 70's. Then again, there have been many blood baths perpetrated upon many people, always under the hands of man...
Compelling and thought provoking,
pf
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
Your use of the term "the killing fields" had me envisioning the Cambodian blood bath of the Khmer Rouge in the 70's. Then again, there have been many blood baths perpetrated upon many people, always under the hands of man...
Compelling and thought provoking,
pf
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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So true my friend, so true. And as long as the powers that be can send someone else's sons out to die, it will continue.
Thanks for your thoughts,
Curt
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. By the hands of man much sufferings start to become a daily norm. We want to play God and that is when we ruin our lives as well as other's whose lives we try to run.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
A very well-written poem. By the hands of man much sufferings start to become a daily norm. We want to play God and that is when we ruin our lives as well as other's whose lives we try to run.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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I agree Sandra. Thank you for your thoughts.
Curt
Comment from nbonner
Very well written. We as people seem to always have something to fight about which usually draws blood. But in the end it was nothing to squabble over. Pointless acts. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
Very well written. We as people seem to always have something to fight about which usually draws blood. But in the end it was nothing to squabble over. Pointless acts. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you,
Curt
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Poem tends to mix present and past tenses.
For example:
The first line is present tense, and the use of the word "saw" makes the second line past tense. To keep them the same should probably use the word "see".
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
Poem tends to mix present and past tenses.
For example:
The first line is present tense, and the use of the word "saw" makes the second line past tense. To keep them the same should probably use the word "see".
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the thoughts, I'll look at that.
Curt
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
As a Christian, this poem moved me deeply, Curt -
the story it tells and the message it gives all cleverly included -
and good internal rhyme: died with pride - begotten had forgotten.....
all in all, most impressive.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
As a Christian, this poem moved me deeply, Curt -
the story it tells and the message it gives all cleverly included -
and good internal rhyme: died with pride - begotten had forgotten.....
all in all, most impressive.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you Margaret,
I'm so glad you could see the message. For those who have ears, let them hear.
Your words and rating mean so much, coming from one I respect and admire.
Curt
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Curt
I like poems which are down to the interpretation of the reader and this one said to me that the wars and evils of the world can always be overcome with ones faith.
Really enjoyed this poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and lines throughout, stitched together fantastically well
which enables your words to sell themselves to the reader.
I particularly enjoyed the imagery shown which paints such a vivid picture in the mind......an excellent poem, that was a pleasure to read.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
Hi Curt
I like poems which are down to the interpretation of the reader and this one said to me that the wars and evils of the world can always be overcome with ones faith.
Really enjoyed this poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and lines throughout, stitched together fantastically well
which enables your words to sell themselves to the reader.
I particularly enjoyed the imagery shown which paints such a vivid picture in the mind......an excellent poem, that was a pleasure to read.
Mitchell
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much Mitchell,
Your thoughts are definitely appreciated.
Curt
Comment from NadineM
I must've read this ages ago when first written. A thought that crossed my mind while I was reading is... I wonder how many of the people I know personally, who have had similar horrific experiences as you, know each other in real life... Now wouldn't that be interesting to reunite under healthier circumstances? Interesting, however frightening for many reasons too. I appreciate your honest messages of sharing some painful details of a past nobody should have to endure. Your courage and strength is honored. You write vividly, drawing this reader in with your words and evoking strong emotions. Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
I must've read this ages ago when first written. A thought that crossed my mind while I was reading is... I wonder how many of the people I know personally, who have had similar horrific experiences as you, know each other in real life... Now wouldn't that be interesting to reunite under healthier circumstances? Interesting, however frightening for many reasons too. I appreciate your honest messages of sharing some painful details of a past nobody should have to endure. Your courage and strength is honored. You write vividly, drawing this reader in with your words and evoking strong emotions. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Hi Nadine,
Yes, this is from years ago, when I was still a sprout in my 40's. I revived it because it still has a lot of meaning for me in this present time.
Thanks so much for your thoughts my friend,
Curt