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Loving the muffled moment31 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello amada,
I enjoyed reading your poem. It reads and flows well. I especially liked the following:
I like the way it clasps the totality of who I am
It pauses me into the muffled moment
And cast dreams of pink springs
In wan winter nights.
And yet some people would say
it's just a piece of yarn!
(Thought provoking ~ perspective is in the eye of the beholder, e.g. is it just an egg or the beginning of life.)
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Hello amada,
I enjoyed reading your poem. It reads and flows well. I especially liked the following:
I like the way it clasps the totality of who I am
It pauses me into the muffled moment
And cast dreams of pink springs
In wan winter nights.
And yet some people would say
it's just a piece of yarn!
(Thought provoking ~ perspective is in the eye of the beholder, e.g. is it just an egg or the beginning of life.)
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you, thank you dear friend for looking into my portfolio and reading this one. This is truly, an honor.
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amada, due to time restrictions, 99% of the time, I only read poetry. perhaps, one day when I no longer have to earn real world money, I can sit and enjoy reading FS stories all day long and into the early morning. Smiles, just sharing and trying to explain why I only read poetry. Sincerely, LateBloomer
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
I bet you are dangerous if you walk into a fabric/yarn store with any money in your pocket.... I am too. :) I like this piece a lot. Thank you for sharing it. :)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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I bet you are dangerous if you walk into a fabric/yarn store with any money in your pocket.... I am too. :) I like this piece a lot. Thank you for sharing it. :)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Gypsy! That's a new name for me. I will check you out.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Who would think to see a poem about a ball of yarn? I like being surprised. You did a wonderful job with this poem. You have aptly described what wool is. Really love the first stanza re ball of yarn and calm. How true! Very nice Free Verse poem. Good choice of accompanying picture to go along with your poem too. Good luck with the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Who would think to see a poem about a ball of yarn? I like being surprised. You did a wonderful job with this poem. You have aptly described what wool is. Really love the first stanza re ball of yarn and calm. How true! Very nice Free Verse poem. Good choice of accompanying picture to go along with your poem too. Good luck with the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you Connie for commenting in my work, specially when you mention that you like to be surprised and my work did that. At the same time very welcome to fanstory.
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Thank you. I'm really enjoying FanStory. It's a ton of fun!
Comment from David Flynn
What we've all thought throughout life but never thought to mention "There is something intrinsically calm in a ball of yarn " This is the mark to true art and true poetry.. Very well done. And then there's this which puts it on another level for phrasing and word choice "I like the way it clasps the totality of who I am
It pauses me into the muffled moment
And cast dreams of pink springs
In wan winter nights. You truly have the gift or "the disease" as I like to call it.. Very impressed with this..
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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What we've all thought throughout life but never thought to mention "There is something intrinsically calm in a ball of yarn " This is the mark to true art and true poetry.. Very well done. And then there's this which puts it on another level for phrasing and word choice "I like the way it clasps the totality of who I am
It pauses me into the muffled moment
And cast dreams of pink springs
In wan winter nights. You truly have the gift or "the disease" as I like to call it.. Very impressed with this..
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you David Flynn. Yes, I love "the disease" of writing! I hope I never recover.
Comment from bayoupoet
Your poem is very well written. It truly works on the imagination, for those who have one. I enjoyed reading for you very much.
sandra
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Your poem is very well written. It truly works on the imagination, for those who have one. I enjoyed reading for you very much.
sandra
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you Sandra for reading and commenting in my work.
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You are truly welcome,Amada!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Nice in fact real nice amada
I never though ofhow a ball of yarn can feel unitl you told us in your contest poem--
Threads that cradle me in
Bonding to my core like an extra layer of skin
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Nice in fact real nice amada
I never though ofhow a ball of yarn can feel unitl you told us in your contest poem--
Threads that cradle me in
Bonding to my core like an extra layer of skin
Gert
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you Gert for this very uplifting review to my work.
Comment from jadapenn
Just a piece of yarn yet it dances into a blanket and other garments to keep you snug against the elements. Lol, hope the cat doesn't get to the ball of wool first. I liked the flow and the story. It is amazing to feel the yarn and watch it grow into a blanket. Well written. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Just a piece of yarn yet it dances into a blanket and other garments to keep you snug against the elements. Lol, hope the cat doesn't get to the ball of wool first. I liked the flow and the story. It is amazing to feel the yarn and watch it grow into a blanket. Well written. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading my work, dear and faithful friend.
Comment from tedanytime
Entrancing thoughts spin this "yarn."
It never gets tangled by shredded thought, but warms the mind with it's gentle threads. Very nice flow to conclusion.
Liked it much.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Entrancing thoughts spin this "yarn."
It never gets tangled by shredded thought, but warms the mind with it's gentle threads. Very nice flow to conclusion.
Liked it much.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much, tedantyme. Your comments are music to my ears.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Although this piece doesn't rhyme, it still flows well. The message is clear and has a cute topic. My attention is held from beginning to end as the writer does a good job of describing the topic. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Although this piece doesn't rhyme, it still flows well. The message is clear and has a cute topic. My attention is held from beginning to end as the writer does a good job of describing the topic. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for giving me a chance, even if my work doesn't rhyme. Best wishes, and again, thank you. :-)
Comment from Black_Oxygen
And yet some people would say
it's just a piece of yarn!
This poetry is glowing example of your wonderful
poetic mind. The flow is fluid and it holds the
reader's interest from start to finish. The images
that it creates are beautiful and profound. And,
all of this from just a of yarn. Thank You for
your creation.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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And yet some people would say
it's just a piece of yarn!
This poetry is glowing example of your wonderful
poetic mind. The flow is fluid and it holds the
reader's interest from start to finish. The images
that it creates are beautiful and profound. And,
all of this from just a of yarn. Thank You for
your creation.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the great read and faultless examination to this work.
