Letter to a Young Lady
Thoughts on Growing Up17 total reviews
Comment from deb552
Hi Debbie, I know I'm so behind in reading all your works, but I'm glad I took the time to read this. Your advice is written in a way that I believe a young person would understand. Everything you mention here is true. Kids are so much more perceptive than we give them credit for, and your point about a father becoming ill and for the mother to put raising a sibling, on another sibling, because the mother can't cope, is just wrong. If the mom can't handle it, she needs to get professional help and stand up to the plate. Also where you say, "Even at your young age, you can tell she needs help.....," right on the mark. The sad part of what your letter is saying is, this situation happens all too often and I'm thinking you have based this on personal experience. I think your opening catches the reader's attention and holds it throughout which to me, is the sign of a well written piece. Your ending couldn't have been said better. As I've said before, when it comes to writing prose, I've lost the ability to really comment on all the technical stuff, but if there are any grammatical errors, they're probably insignificant. I think this is deserving of six stars, because you have written a clear, & concise letter that has an important message all parents, and even school teachers should read. If a teacher has a student who is in a difficult home situation, this letter would help the teacher, help the student. GREAT JOB Debbie! deb
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Hi Debbie, I know I'm so behind in reading all your works, but I'm glad I took the time to read this. Your advice is written in a way that I believe a young person would understand. Everything you mention here is true. Kids are so much more perceptive than we give them credit for, and your point about a father becoming ill and for the mother to put raising a sibling, on another sibling, because the mother can't cope, is just wrong. If the mom can't handle it, she needs to get professional help and stand up to the plate. Also where you say, "Even at your young age, you can tell she needs help.....," right on the mark. The sad part of what your letter is saying is, this situation happens all too often and I'm thinking you have based this on personal experience. I think your opening catches the reader's attention and holds it throughout which to me, is the sign of a well written piece. Your ending couldn't have been said better. As I've said before, when it comes to writing prose, I've lost the ability to really comment on all the technical stuff, but if there are any grammatical errors, they're probably insignificant. I think this is deserving of six stars, because you have written a clear, & concise letter that has an important message all parents, and even school teachers should read. If a teacher has a student who is in a difficult home situation, this letter would help the teacher, help the student. GREAT JOB Debbie! deb
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thanks again, deb. Thanks for stopping by~Debbie
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Better late than never, right? Please know I really do have you on my mind, and worry about how you're doing. I don't really know why I've lost my passion for the site, but as for our friendship, that's a given to me. I tell people about my close friend from Iowa, and how amazing you are. I've told them about your book, and what your doing for the disabled. my older son is turning into my ex in a way. before seeing the positive he points out all the negative. so when i talk about my friends on the site, for ex: he starts in with you better be careful for all you know you're talking to a 40 pervert, who's passing themselves off as a woman...when i showed him your book, the subject got changed! 2pt.s for me, finally! deb
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
This is great advise that is often hard to understand when young.As you say, once the door is open, there is no going back, and children, young people, deserve their moments to be free, and to learn who they are.
Treating others as they wish to be treated is the starting point of that journey.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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This is great advise that is often hard to understand when young.As you say, once the door is open, there is no going back, and children, young people, deserve their moments to be free, and to learn who they are.
Treating others as they wish to be treated is the starting point of that journey.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it~Debbie
Comment from mermaids
This letter makes me feel better. I love your message to this young lady, she only has to be herself, Mom is still the adult and needs to fulfill her role as a parent. Your rewards will come later is an encouraging line.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This letter makes me feel better. I love your message to this young lady, she only has to be herself, Mom is still the adult and needs to fulfill her role as a parent. Your rewards will come later is an encouraging line.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This letter contains very good advise for a young child who is forced to perform jobs usually done by those who are older. It is very well written up to next to the last sentence.
"...coping as best you can/ with / problems that arise."
This is my suggestion for the missing word. Thanks for the read. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This letter contains very good advise for a young child who is forced to perform jobs usually done by those who are older. It is very well written up to next to the last sentence.
"...coping as best you can/ with / problems that arise."
This is my suggestion for the missing word. Thanks for the read. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you, Bob. I caught that this afternoon when I read it aloud to my writing group--how embarrassing. Thanks so much my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
This is a very well written article. It's message is very truthful.
However, I cannot help but wonder about the story behind the story. What happened to cause this story to the be written. JW
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is a very well written article. It's message is very truthful.
However, I cannot help but wonder about the story behind the story. What happened to cause this story to the be written. JW
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is about my childhood. It is an exercise from my therapeutic writing group. Thank you and take care~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a wonderful letter and many of my first graders would be able to see themselves in this. A few changes, they may never have known their father, mom is a probably a drug addict, but the six year olds must take care of mom and the younger sibblings. It's horrible.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is a wonderful letter and many of my first graders would be able to see themselves in this. A few changes, they may never have known their father, mom is a probably a drug addict, but the six year olds must take care of mom and the younger sibblings. It's horrible.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is about my childhood. It is an exercise from my therapeutic writing group. Thank you and take care~Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written my friend it is hard for young people to take the role of a parent at times they still have to have a life of there own well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is well written my friend it is hard for young people to take the role of a parent at times they still have to have a life of there own well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Jill. Take care~Debbie
Comment from gypsycaravan
Good advice for the situation described. The advice offered might need to be presented in more of a manner for an elementary school child to understand. It was beautifully written, however, but definitely for an older audience. Nice piece of writing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Good advice for the situation described. The advice offered might need to be presented in more of a manner for an elementary school child to understand. It was beautifully written, however, but definitely for an older audience. Nice piece of writing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from FLutterodt
Study, read, and enjoy life as much as able remembering you will one day be free from this situation. Do not let it make you bitter, angry or self-destructive.
Very sound advice for a young girl. This often happens to a lot of good children. I like the detail and expression
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Study, read, and enjoy life as much as able remembering you will one day be free from this situation. Do not let it make you bitter, angry or self-destructive.
Very sound advice for a young girl. This often happens to a lot of good children. I like the detail and expression
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you. This is a reflection of my childhood~Debbie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, debbie, you did an excellent job w riting this letter telling a young lady it's okay to take time for herself so she doesn't get drawn into a cycle of depression. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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this is very well written, debbie, you did an excellent job w riting this letter telling a young lady it's okay to take time for herself so she doesn't get drawn into a cycle of depression. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
