Life's Bean Stalk
OK, we are talking true love and seed here!10 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
He's walks past - He walks past
good alliteration in special soil
powerful expression of intense emotion
Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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solid use of rhyming couplets
He's walks past - He walks past
good alliteration in special soil
powerful expression of intense emotion
Brooke
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Yea, in regards to love, I am a glutton for punishment; but glad to stand up for something! Thank you so much for that correction and wonderful review. Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Never give up hope. Sometimes it takes longer for a seed to take root. Not all seeds are stolen by scavaging birds. Words, color scheme and artwork harmonize.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Never give up hope. Sometimes it takes longer for a seed to take root. Not all seeds are stolen by scavaging birds. Words, color scheme and artwork harmonize.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you, if you remember Tom Clancy's Jack Ryan, I sort of had that experience in reference to what happened to me, and there are a few more interesting twists, turns and nuisances that I only suspected. What an ending story, and do get the feeling that perhaps things will work out to a better end.
The Baltimore Poetry discussion group went though four pounds of Latkes and about six of Christmas Pudding, plus a pound of sugar plums! 21 hours of work, 3 of sleep! But what I really liked was what the birdies told me about things.
I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
You have penned a marvelous poem and my only regret is the site won't let me give you a six. I think love at first sight is very rare. I know it happens but it takes two people to make it work. Love needs time to develop but I can't imagine any woman being put off by a poem someone wrote for her. It reminds me of when I was a freshman in high school and a guy, who was a senior, wrote a poem about me. I remember being astounded and somewhat uncomfortable. You have a good rhyme, an even flow, good alliteration in risking/reality and weeds/women. Don't be disenchanted and certainly don't wish to be struck dead! Well done, chey
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Hi Mike,
You have penned a marvelous poem and my only regret is the site won't let me give you a six. I think love at first sight is very rare. I know it happens but it takes two people to make it work. Love needs time to develop but I can't imagine any woman being put off by a poem someone wrote for her. It reminds me of when I was a freshman in high school and a guy, who was a senior, wrote a poem about me. I remember being astounded and somewhat uncomfortable. You have a good rhyme, an even flow, good alliteration in risking/reality and weeds/women. Don't be disenchanted and certainly don't wish to be struck dead! Well done, chey
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Maybe the gift of the poem, is what really sent you into the poetic world. In my story, I sort of became the Jack Ryan of poetry, and when someone talks to you with seemingly more knowledge of you then you put into a voluminous biography, perhaps you should pay attention.
No, I would love to go out of this world with the feeling of total and pure love, without the quicksand of complications regarding it. I found out in a Tom Clancy way that there may be more to my banning from the museum that meets the eye, as my family name is not well liked among the Democratic politicians and a family member of Maryland's US senator is the assistant director there. Also found out the director has NSA ties, which is why I think I scared. Though not employed, I am more the CIA type as an all important word is in their name. LOL
Boy, concluding this biography is going to be an absolute trip for me. Considering half the poetry discussion group invited me to one of the museum's events and I informed them I was banned, they promised to have great fun about it all!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Misunderstandings and their results can vary from hilarious to inconsequential to tragic. I suppose yours ranks somewhere between the last two! This poem is well-written and impressive.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Misunderstandings and their results can vary from hilarious to inconsequential to tragic. I suppose yours ranks somewhere between the last two! This poem is well-written and impressive.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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No, it is more like the candle burning at both ends! I thank you for this review and the compliments! Mike
Comment from Papabearua
Interesting poem. Once I got the full story from your notes it made more sense. You say it was not unrequited love so the women must of had feelings for you at some time. Did the poem you gave her overstep the lines of the relationship at that time perhaps causing her to run? The poem is a good read and well written.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Interesting poem. Once I got the full story from your notes it made more sense. You say it was not unrequited love so the women must of had feelings for you at some time. Did the poem you gave her overstep the lines of the relationship at that time perhaps causing her to run? The poem is a good read and well written.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Ahhhh! LOL. This was at the time I feel she was told to stand up to me, she called me weird, I move too fast and the poem was over the top. I am totally tired of women feeling they need to run away form things and consider it simply a matter of faith, placing an intitial trust in people they need too, who may have their own prejudices in the forefort. Boy have I ran into that.
In her life, I feel I did my job and I realize we all need time to fit things into a perspective. I do knpw the poem would emotionally overwhelm her, but that is earned and I would love her to consider what I said about her, herself. I stuck to my guns at my own detriment; and perhaps in time things will work out, though it has never been my case. I got the greatest kick out of her lecturing me on things, but I gave another girl I fell in love in the same manner all the time in the world. The second time I said, "I love you was when she rested in a coffin, killed by a drunk driver.
In my biography I will not the book titled, Everything you wanted to know about sex, but were afraid to ask," is readily available; but the book titled, "What to do in the next step, and need to know," has yet to be wriiten. Me, I leave it all up to God.
I love this review and heartedly thank you for it! Mike
Comment from terry drake
Your poem shows and illustrates a comparison to the bad seed without dwelling on the possibility. You are not wrong to show affection when the time is right. What you did out of order was not giving her the necessary time to see you for what kind of person you truly are. Some women would appreciate a poem in their honor; others may question the intent if received from a perfect stranger. Your problem was only that she did not know you for who you truly are. It is all in the timing, make a plan, demonstrate acceptance, then attack!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Your poem shows and illustrates a comparison to the bad seed without dwelling on the possibility. You are not wrong to show affection when the time is right. What you did out of order was not giving her the necessary time to see you for what kind of person you truly are. Some women would appreciate a poem in their honor; others may question the intent if received from a perfect stranger. Your problem was only that she did not know you for who you truly are. It is all in the timing, make a plan, demonstrate acceptance, then attack!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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But when is the right time? Society's only answer seems to be at a bar and drunk with just wanting to get laid. Because of her qualities, and the spiritually that manifests itself with the museum that includes two synagogues, I felt quite at home and she was nothing but nice. To me it was the right time, but there are so many contradictory rules, you never know when you are about to step on a landmine. At least I am not blaming myself and in the end, maybe it worked out the best for me.
I enjoyed reading this review and understand it, thank you. Mike
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I have one more suggestion: I don't know how old you are but by my own mistakes I place you at 23! Be surprised or tell me true! I am 64. Now I have had similar problems unfold in my life time and found that a woman will give you a look. When she notices that you notice her stare and she looks away and tilts her head. She then looks back and stares. That is one time to introduce yourself properly. Keep in mind that even though we are in a new age find out who her friends are find common friends with them to be properly introduced.
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No, I am 48, I think. I don't worry about age and do far more then even the young people at work, because of their BS, I just have too!
I am sort of a spirit keeper of sorts, and you can blame my karma and good faith, but I poetically stand up to tell what must be told.
There are some things I like about the new age, but we will backslid if we don't take out what we should be valued throughout time.
Comment from J. D. Means
Great little poem. I like the lay out and execution of the love requited. The information at the end seems well placed to explain it better. Instead of passing from one affair to another in life, you are truly seeking a forever love.
Alas, love at first sight is rare, a long term relationship takes time to build. I truly pray that true love has found you and you are no longer bothered by lost love.
Joe
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Great little poem. I like the lay out and execution of the love requited. The information at the end seems well placed to explain it better. Instead of passing from one affair to another in life, you are truly seeking a forever love.
Alas, love at first sight is rare, a long term relationship takes time to build. I truly pray that true love has found you and you are no longer bothered by lost love.
Joe
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I'd be happy to seek a state of being where good intentions are appreciated and don't end up in crazy calamity! Right now, I enjoy my state of being alone, yet I try to leave the door open for the right person to enter in.
I enjoyed this rev iew and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Treischel
A beautifully written poem of unrequited love and ultimate rejection ultimately. The passionate emotions burn through the paged of this works. The analogy of planting seeds is realistic.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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A beautifully written poem of unrequited love and ultimate rejection ultimately. The passionate emotions burn through the paged of this works. The analogy of planting seeds is realistic.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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This wasn't unrequited love by any stretch, but severely punished love with no way left to prove myself a sincere, honest and decent person. It is also about continuing to stand up for a principle in the face of utter nonsense.
I thank you for your compliments and review.
Comment from EMB
Okay, I'm taking this as a harmless poem about love mixed with fairytale elements. Harmless and cute. However, it's kind of easy to really look at this and go, "Man! This is freaky!" LOL And the thing with the man's "seed"...What if he's sterile or worse, impotent? That makes your opening line pretty darn harsh. LOL
I liked this. This was a fun read. :)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Okay, I'm taking this as a harmless poem about love mixed with fairytale elements. Harmless and cute. However, it's kind of easy to really look at this and go, "Man! This is freaky!" LOL And the thing with the man's "seed"...What if he's sterile or worse, impotent? That makes your opening line pretty darn harsh. LOL
I liked this. This was a fun read. :)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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You have to maintain your sense of humor, and with what I was accused of, you'd a thought that what it was all about. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from 4tulips
It took me to read your poem twice before I understood it. When I started I thought maybe you were going to speak of Jack and the Beanstalk story. But I was pleasantly surprised by the words that you did speak of in your poem. I do agree with when you say that when you do develop love for someone it is a wonderful thing. But it also opens up a part of you that feels the pain if the love dies. Many want to die or run the other way. But if it is God that created the path for two people to meet and fall in love, then it will happen. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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It took me to read your poem twice before I understood it. When I started I thought maybe you were going to speak of Jack and the Beanstalk story. But I was pleasantly surprised by the words that you did speak of in your poem. I do agree with when you say that when you do develop love for someone it is a wonderful thing. But it also opens up a part of you that feels the pain if the love dies. Many want to die or run the other way. But if it is God that created the path for two people to meet and fall in love, then it will happen. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I like the element of Jack and the Beanstalk, so since everyone has read that, you don't need to write it in, only hint at it. With this story, I definitely felt that God was involved; that's why it dawned on me, perhaps he could corral two to cross the other's path, but can't manage to go much beyond that. Yet, for me, what happened to me is the perfect concluding story, more so then if things remained positive.
I thank you for your compliments and this review. Mike
