The Light of Love
No matter how one tries to avoid it, for fear of being hurt.14 total reviews
Comment from mikenbel
I really enjoyed this poem and the story behind it. I know there is more unsaid than said. Congratulations on attaining a rare place in the tome of poetry. That speaks volumes of how well this is written - which I could not hope to even come close to in words.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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I really enjoyed this poem and the story behind it. I know there is more unsaid than said. Congratulations on attaining a rare place in the tome of poetry. That speaks volumes of how well this is written - which I could not hope to even come close to in words.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Wow! I am honored by such a review and rating. I thank you for that and the compliments. Well, the origianal poem contains the details as well my biography; in the case with their series of poems in this book, it is their moment and it is best left unsaid for their benefit. Again thanks! Mike
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in subtle smile
he say's - drop the apostrophe
good strong verbs like jostle and preserve add life to your poem
I like the emotion behind the invisible trespass line
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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good alliteration in subtle smile
he say's - drop the apostrophe
good strong verbs like jostle and preserve add life to your poem
I like the emotion behind the invisible trespass line
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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I hope you read the notes on this. The invisible trespass was the poem itself and ironically my adventure of it all forms the perfect story to cap off my biography, like a crown knot.
I took my shame with a sense of humor and my imagination had Poe peeing himself laughing and Jim Morrison slapping me on the back and calling me poet. After being banned from the museum, I had to walk past the Holocaust Memorial on my trek of shame to the bus stop and boy did those words on the wall come to me with greater illumination and meaning. I did refuse to look at the bronze globe of melted people, I was afraid I would find an image of my self on one of them and I had a Jewish man just about crying with my story and poems. Took it easy on him though.
I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Apostrophe dropped.
Comment from Kingsland
Your expressions were delivered very poetically in this excellently written piece of poetic art. This poem has very good emotions presented into its phrases. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it... John
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Your expressions were delivered very poetically in this excellently written piece of poetic art. This poem has very good emotions presented into its phrases. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it... John
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed having you review it and thank you for your compliments. Mike
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
That's beautiful. Leaves the reader with a sad feeling but yet feels hope at the same time. I wonder about your closing line
to still lights heart's way
I struggle with the lights heart's, wondering if it shouldn't be light heart's
to still light heart's way
Lovely verse, my heart goes out to you for the constant heart break, perhaps some day the right one will appear in thine eyes.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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That's beautiful. Leaves the reader with a sad feeling but yet feels hope at the same time. I wonder about your closing line
to still lights heart's way
I struggle with the lights heart's, wondering if it shouldn't be light heart's
to still light heart's way
Lovely verse, my heart goes out to you for the constant heart break, perhaps some day the right one will appear in thine eyes.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Totally correct and I mad the change. It's funny, I no longer worry about the heartbreak, but making sure I did what I was supposed to. Thine eyes is the only thing I am interested in and believe me, a lot of jokes have been made about this total endeaver which will be the closing story of my biography. I was asked if I was trying to be seated at the left hand of God, I stuck my hands in the pockets and said, "No, they keep sending me to the play room!"
I love this review and thank you for it. Mike
Comment from ashimpandit
Dear writers,
"The Light of Love" is a very good general poetry.I just read it and so very enjoy.You are successful
for your presentation.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Dear writers,
"The Light of Love" is a very good general poetry.I just read it and so very enjoy.You are successful
for your presentation.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Wow! I thank you for this review. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
Since you feel dedicating this poem to the one you wrote about makes me think it may be one of our fanstory friends. Your words are lovely but somewhat melancholy. You have good alliteration sprinkled through out and excellent enjambments, as well. Each line has been crafted with care and I love the theme albeit sad. Well done...chey
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Hi Mike,
Since you feel dedicating this poem to the one you wrote about makes me think it may be one of our fanstory friends. Your words are lovely but somewhat melancholy. You have good alliteration sprinkled through out and excellent enjambments, as well. Each line has been crafted with care and I love the theme albeit sad. Well done...chey
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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No, this isn't the one. I am still working on the idea and imagery for surely you deserve one as well. This is just something local, and will become clear as I finish the bio.
Just a lovely girl I met in the grand scheme of things. I'll be honest, I enjoy my life alone and sort of pray that with my dedication that love no longer finds my heart, yet when there is someone I met that strikes me so, God himself has shown me the importance of stepping up to the plate for there is a reasoning to it. One of my biggest problems is, the other person has their own biases, fears and disbelief; not to mention an adverse reaction to things, I end up the only one hurt ... And we are talking about even if only supposed to be friends.
I love this review, and I love writing poetry so much, I haven't been able to make a study of it in my limited time, yet somehow I am able write. I don't think of diction, form or mechanics; but see it as a pallet of pigments for me to research and choose to convey the image and spirit I want, so all can understand and appreciate it.
God, I love this review and thank you for it, you generous rating as well the compliments. With love, Mike
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I know what you mean. I stay single not for getting hurt but having to care for someone again and be devasted if they die. I spent sixteen years of my life as a care taker and can't do it again. I'm glad you are writing poetry. You are most welcome for the six stars...chey
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My tragedy was, I told a woman I loved her and she was killed by a drunk driver the next day. When I saw her in the casket, it wiped my mind clean for ten years.
I hope for both of us, it somehow works out. I love poetry as I have gotten so much out of it, but want to conclude the book as I have finially been given what I needed to do that. My one person we both never lose is God!
Comment from Jean Lutz
From your lips to His ears. From your lips to her lips. In other words may God bless. Beautifully done, Mike, and I hope you find time to pen others like this one.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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From your lips to His ears. From your lips to her lips. In other words may God bless. Beautifully done, Mike, and I hope you find time to pen others like this one.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I like your first line, as if it is left up to me, I would tongue twist and blow it or scare her away. I love this review and thank you for it and the compliments.
I love this type of poetry, and all of my love people's come from the heart, but stopped because I felt the reviews didn't take them seriously. Mike
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Beautiful!! Her grace upon him as if lamp filled of endless oil, still lights heart way. This is an excellent right it has a good flow. The picture adds to the presentation well done. Deorre
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Beautiful!! Her grace upon him as if lamp filled of endless oil, still lights heart way. This is an excellent right it has a good flow. The picture adds to the presentation well done. Deorre
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I thank you for sharing a favorite line, the compliemtns and this review. Mike
Comment from DMCranfield
Very beautifully written... almost haunting... the author's notes make the poem all that much more intriguing... leaves the reader guessing as to what has happened in his life...
It is almost sad at the end ...
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Very beautifully written... almost haunting... the author's notes make the poem all that much more intriguing... leaves the reader guessing as to what has happened in his life...
It is almost sad at the end ...
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I guess I fear a sad ending. I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from LenSive
This needs some work. First, older English--which I love--must be used "properly", which only means, if it works in place, then it has been use "properly". I don't get that feeling here. I think the images are not clear to me either. Now, I am only one reviewer; you may (and probably do) disagee with me. But this is how I see the poem. You mmight try reading repeatedly Chaucer (in HIS English), Shakespeare of course, the romantic poets (JK,WW, STC, et alios), ALT, RB, MA, AH, and so on. Read them repeatedly. Let them be your instructors in the heart and mind, of the world and universe, etc. Good luck!
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This needs some work. First, older English--which I love--must be used "properly", which only means, if it works in place, then it has been use "properly". I don't get that feeling here. I think the images are not clear to me either. Now, I am only one reviewer; you may (and probably do) disagee with me. But this is how I see the poem. You mmight try reading repeatedly Chaucer (in HIS English), Shakespeare of course, the romantic poets (JK,WW, STC, et alios), ALT, RB, MA, AH, and so on. Read them repeatedly. Let them be your instructors in the heart and mind, of the world and universe, etc. Good luck!
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
