Change in the Wind
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Comment from Val Crisson
Very well written free verse poem. The passion, fear, and difficulty of the lover's decision is absolutely palatable in piece. The tension the author creates is exquisite. The rhyming and flow are very good. This should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Very well written free verse poem. The passion, fear, and difficulty of the lover's decision is absolutely palatable in piece. The tension the author creates is exquisite. The rhyming and flow are very good. This should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thanks Val. It was a very difficult decision...one that took me many years to reconcile the guilt. But as I said, the decision was the right one.
Comment from reconciled
Hey Jo...ya know i always be the exception...lol guess I was wrong. Sore point with me right now....but yes, with God all things are possible love michael
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Hey Jo...ya know i always be the exception...lol guess I was wrong. Sore point with me right now....but yes, with God all things are possible love michael
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thanks Michael for your review of my poem. It was a very hard decision to leave my first husband. He was a "good" man ...just not the right one for me. I had dated him since 9th grade and married him at 17. We were just too young.
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I waited till I was forty....lol
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Will I find redemption or will I be lost forever,without mercy or grace. Beautiful picture the colors are beautiful. You did a good job with this creative piece. Nicely done. Deorre
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Will I find redemption or will I be lost forever,without mercy or grace. Beautiful picture the colors are beautiful. You did a good job with this creative piece. Nicely done. Deorre
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Deorre for your kind review. I should have told the reader the name of the picture. It's " Ring of Fire". I don't know if you know the old Johnny Cash song but the title of the picture made me think of the song and the words rang true for my poem.
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I went on utube and listened to the song. The picture was perfect. :) Deorre
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Cool, it was written by June Carter Cash about her love affair with Johnny.
Comment from Ekim777
To me, love like life is not an ephemeral thing but it also is not infinite. It is a moving, transforming thing that goes its natural course. So you are lucky and blessed that what was sown so many years ago has matured well and slow. I envy that you have come by faith so easily. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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To me, love like life is not an ephemeral thing but it also is not infinite. It is a moving, transforming thing that goes its natural course. So you are lucky and blessed that what was sown so many years ago has matured well and slow. I envy that you have come by faith so easily. -Ekim777
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Yes, I agree with you Ekim777 I am a very blessed person to have found the true love of my life. It took breaking hearts and hurting others but I have been forgiven. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cloe Z
This is a really good poem!It's interesting because it sounds at first like the narrator is talking to a lover, but then it sounds like it might be God.
I especially like this stanza:
Will I find redemption?
In your loves' embrace
Or will I be lost forever
without mercy or grace.
Very good work!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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This is a really good poem!It's interesting because it sounds at first like the narrator is talking to a lover, but then it sounds like it might be God.
I especially like this stanza:
Will I find redemption?
In your loves' embrace
Or will I be lost forever
without mercy or grace.
Very good work!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you CloeZ for your review of my poem. I am glad you saw the dual meaning in it. It made me smile that you have become a fan. I'm hoping you will enjoy many more of my works. I will make you a friend/fan, too. :o)
Comment from Dodey
Emotional and heartfelt write my friend..I had a similar experience when scattered leaves confused him' but thank goodness I was able to bring him home again with love..
and I think this is the reason you are where you are today.
Love is a powerful force ~ Nice rhyme and flow and clear imagery..Bravo..Best of luck in the contest..Smiles and regards to you..Dee
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Emotional and heartfelt write my friend..I had a similar experience when scattered leaves confused him' but thank goodness I was able to bring him home again with love..
and I think this is the reason you are where you are today.
Love is a powerful force ~ Nice rhyme and flow and clear imagery..Bravo..Best of luck in the contest..Smiles and regards to you..Dee
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Dee for you observant review. I am glad you got your
true love home again. Yes, love is a very powerful force.
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Thank you my friend..My pleasure to read your work...Smiles..Dee
Comment from Scribbler67
A very sensitive and well-written free verse. Lots of care taken with phrasing, giving the words an easy to read flow. Most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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A very sensitive and well-written free verse. Lots of care taken with phrasing, giving the words an easy to read flow. Most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Scribbler67 for your review of my poem. I am so
glad you enjoyed the read.
Comment from visionary1234
whew! while I'm awfully glad you did because 39 years is a LONG time ... but why "redemtpion, mercy and grace?" These qualities sound more like atonement, rather than something you seem from a true love?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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whew! while I'm awfully glad you did because 39 years is a LONG time ... but why "redemtpion, mercy and grace?" These qualities sound more like atonement, rather than something you seem from a true love?
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Why redemption, mercy and grace? I didn't get them from my lover but instead from God himself. I grew up in a very religious home. To be unfaithful to my first husband was to me
a very grave sin. However, my love was so strong for the new man I threw everything away to be with him and hurt many good people including my first husband. In the long run, time has healed many things and I am friends with my first husband today. Yet, I would never encourage anyone to go looking because I spent many years with lots of guilt and pain. However,
I am still in love with my 2nd husband and God has forgiven me.
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aaah - thx for clarifying - didn't really feel that came across in the poem though ... :)
Comment from EMB
This is a terrific poem, and it's good to know that you're still together. This reminds me of the song that says it's sad to belong to someone else when the right one comes along. I guess you weren't gonna have it that way! LOL
Excellent piece, my friend. :)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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This is a terrific poem, and it's good to know that you're still together. This reminds me of the song that says it's sad to belong to someone else when the right one comes along. I guess you weren't gonna have it that way! LOL
Excellent piece, my friend. :)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Edward for you kind review of my poem. He was the right one and we have been together for all these years. Wounds are healed, scars remain as testimony.
