Ever After
Keeping vows26 total reviews
Comment from hemase
This is a very moving story. You capture the love and hardship between people like this beautifully. This is well written and holds the reader til the end. Good work here.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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This is a very moving story. You capture the love and hardship between people like this beautifully. This is well written and holds the reader til the end. Good work here.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from 1ClosetWriter
I enjoyed your story. Your dialog pulled me into the story. I could feel the pain of being torn between what was and what is. I cannot offer feedback on the situation, but think writing may be a healthy outlet. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed your story. Your dialog pulled me into the story. I could feel the pain of being torn between what was and what is. I cannot offer feedback on the situation, but think writing may be a healthy outlet. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and words.
Comment from Janeyjane
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing. I don't have much experience on writing myself, its good to be able to see others style and use of language. The words and descriptions you have used fit together well. Im looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for
sharing
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing. I don't have much experience on writing myself, its good to be able to see others style and use of language. The words and descriptions you have used fit together well. Im looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for
sharing
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Thank you. Here's some advice on writing. Listen to what's in your head. Worry less about grammar and more about the story.
Comment from Crystal Carey
Aww you know what people really want, for Lane to come out. The old Lane. ORRRR You could do another story on their next life, and how good it was. Enjoyed this story so much! Usually I do not review the stories (Some of them I start and just cannot keep reading) The fact that I finished this says something about your great skill!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Aww you know what people really want, for Lane to come out. The old Lane. ORRRR You could do another story on their next life, and how good it was. Enjoyed this story so much! Usually I do not review the stories (Some of them I start and just cannot keep reading) The fact that I finished this says something about your great skill!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Sorry but Lane is Lane. I'm glad you enjoyed and finished the story. I will definitely take it as a compliment.
Comment from Cornelius2000
I'm not in the same situation, but thought I might be a couple of years ago following my wife's heart surgery. The anesthesia caused something called Post Operative Cognitive Dysfunction, not uncommon in older folks. My wife exhibited the same kinds of behaviors that one sees in those with Alzheimer's. Fortunately the effects of POCD wear off after a while, but not until after I had a scare.
As a caregiver, you, or the wife in the story, fall into the category of modern day saints. I am of the opinion that Alzheimers is the cruelest of all diseases, affecting not only the patient but the entire family.
I find your story both sad and sweet, and well told.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I'm not in the same situation, but thought I might be a couple of years ago following my wife's heart surgery. The anesthesia caused something called Post Operative Cognitive Dysfunction, not uncommon in older folks. My wife exhibited the same kinds of behaviors that one sees in those with Alzheimer's. Fortunately the effects of POCD wear off after a while, but not until after I had a scare.
As a caregiver, you, or the wife in the story, fall into the category of modern day saints. I am of the opinion that Alzheimers is the cruelest of all diseases, affecting not only the patient but the entire family.
I find your story both sad and sweet, and well told.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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The wife in the story may be a saint, but I am not. I'm glad things worked out better for your wife and you though. Thank you for the kind words.
Comment from judiverse
This is so beautiful, GWHARGIS. You tell a straight-forward story without any embellishment. The conversation between the narrator and Lane is very compelling and moves the story along. You clearly show Lane's condition and how he now speaks. Referring to the before and after Lane is wonderful. Both the narrator and Lane show a lot of courage and optimism that they'll finish "ever after" together. It' wonderful to see the wife's care and devotion. Very touching. judiverse
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is so beautiful, GWHARGIS. You tell a straight-forward story without any embellishment. The conversation between the narrator and Lane is very compelling and moves the story along. You clearly show Lane's condition and how he now speaks. Referring to the before and after Lane is wonderful. Both the narrator and Lane show a lot of courage and optimism that they'll finish "ever after" together. It' wonderful to see the wife's care and devotion. Very touching. judiverse
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you. I do appreciate the feed back.
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You are so welcome. Such a powerful story. judiverse
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You're welcome. judiverse
Comment from Selestia
If I had them to give, I would give you six stars for this. This is such a touching story. I've never dealt with someone who's brain damaged, but I helped my mother take care of my grandfather who lost who he was because of arterial sclerosis and dementia. He slowly slipped into the past and could remember things years ago, but not know who we were. It's very difficult to take care of someone long term. We did it for two years. In this story, it appears Allie has years ahead of her. I think you have portrayed the frustration, loneliness, and helplessness of the situation very accurately. It's heartwrenching to see someone you love in that condition. Good writing. The pace flows nicely . . . dialogue moves the story . . . dialogue for Lane very believable. He is a child. A sweet, lovable child.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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If I had them to give, I would give you six stars for this. This is such a touching story. I've never dealt with someone who's brain damaged, but I helped my mother take care of my grandfather who lost who he was because of arterial sclerosis and dementia. He slowly slipped into the past and could remember things years ago, but not know who we were. It's very difficult to take care of someone long term. We did it for two years. In this story, it appears Allie has years ahead of her. I think you have portrayed the frustration, loneliness, and helplessness of the situation very accurately. It's heartwrenching to see someone you love in that condition. Good writing. The pace flows nicely . . . dialogue moves the story . . . dialogue for Lane very believable. He is a child. A sweet, lovable child.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate the feed back.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Your notes indicate this story may be based on fact. A difficult way to live, but love is love and duty is duty. It seems your protagonist has made a compromise that works for her. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Your notes indicate this story may be based on fact. A difficult way to live, but love is love and duty is duty. It seems your protagonist has made a compromise that works for her. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you. I ran with something that I saw in the heroine. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Realist101
Well, close. But my loved one came out of it. Luckily. This is beautifully written...and VERY sad. I send my best to you and your husband and I wish I could make him better for you. I thank you too, for sharing this horrendous tragedy. Hug, Susan
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Well, close. But my loved one came out of it. Luckily. This is beautifully written...and VERY sad. I send my best to you and your husband and I wish I could make him better for you. I thank you too, for sharing this horrendous tragedy. Hug, Susan
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you. I am glad things worked out for the better for you.
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Hugs to you!! S.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad story very well written and I am sorry that life threw you this curve ball but you caught it and made the most of it that kind of love will never die that kind of love is special which makes the pair of you special thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is a sad story very well written and I am sorry that life threw you this curve ball but you caught it and made the most of it that kind of love will never die that kind of love is special which makes the pair of you special thank you for sharing
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind words and review.
