Lovers Leap
A ghostly figure watches the sea.27 total reviews
Comment from The Death
Hi Nancy,
I liked the short tale you've told here. Excellent use of rhyming and consistent meter make the words flow well. I liked the strong imagery as well. Fine presentation of your work as well. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Hi Nancy,
I liked the short tale you've told here. Excellent use of rhyming and consistent meter make the words flow well. I liked the strong imagery as well. Fine presentation of your work as well. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the thoughtful review and generous stars, my friend. Nancy:)
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an excellent poem, Nancy. I'm sure this is the story of many women whose men went to sea and didn't come back. A hard life.
I think in those days, though, there'd have to be a wedding ring first or it would be a huge scandal. The image is very nice and works perfectly with your theme. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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This is an excellent poem, Nancy. I'm sure this is the story of many women whose men went to sea and didn't come back. A hard life.
I think in those days, though, there'd have to be a wedding ring first or it would be a huge scandal. The image is very nice and works perfectly with your theme. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the lovely review and generous stars, Marilyn. Nancy:)
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
~Lover's Leap~, is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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~Lover's Leap~, is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the review and stars Duchess. Nancy:)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This ballad-style poem is very well-written and moving, telling of great
tragedies and misery--ending with the taking of two lives as she threw herself into the sea.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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This ballad-style poem is very well-written and moving, telling of great
tragedies and misery--ending with the taking of two lives as she threw herself into the sea.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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So true Janice. Thanks for the review and stars my friend. Nancy:)
Comment from Patty Palmer
Very interesting poem. I loved the story behind the poem. Back then it would have been an embarrassment to be pregnant and unmarried.
The picture chosen for your poem fits perfectly for this poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Very interesting poem. I loved the story behind the poem. Back then it would have been an embarrassment to be pregnant and unmarried.
The picture chosen for your poem fits perfectly for this poem.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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She would have been a marked woman. Thanks for the review and stars Patty. Nancy:)
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Janetsue
This is an excellent posting all the way through. The photograph speaks volumes all by itself. Placed together, this is a superb posting that I wish I could rate with more stars...and would if I had any left. I can't find anything in need of correction.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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This is an excellent posting all the way through. The photograph speaks volumes all by itself. Placed together, this is a superb posting that I wish I could rate with more stars...and would if I had any left. I can't find anything in need of correction.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for the thoughtful review and stars Spangle. Nancy:)
Comment from LisaMay
You have portrayed the waiting, wondering woman so clearly for the reader... then her tragic decision to jump, with the repeat line a mournful echo. On the coastline where I live there is a headland called Lover's Leap; makes me wonder if there are tragic tales to be told.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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You have portrayed the waiting, wondering woman so clearly for the reader... then her tragic decision to jump, with the repeat line a mournful echo. On the coastline where I live there is a headland called Lover's Leap; makes me wonder if there are tragic tales to be told.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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That would make you wonder. Thanks for the review and stars LisaMay. Nancy:)
Comment from royowen
I wonder how many girls have been compelled to do that after an affair with someone who didn't keep his promise. Beautifully written in tetrametric quatrains with a concluding rhyming couplet. A superb job you've made of this dear Nancy, the writing is very smooth, a delight to read in abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I wonder how many girls have been compelled to do that after an affair with someone who didn't keep his promise. Beautifully written in tetrametric quatrains with a concluding rhyming couplet. A superb job you've made of this dear Nancy, the writing is very smooth, a delight to read in abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the uplifting review, Roy. I appreciate it. Nancy:)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Nancy. You picked a great picture for the poem but it is the words of the poem that Kerry the message. That is a haunting message and you did a fine job with rhyme and meter. I love ballads that is a great ballad poem. Robert
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Hello Nancy. You picked a great picture for the poem but it is the words of the poem that Kerry the message. That is a haunting message and you did a fine job with rhyme and meter. I love ballads that is a great ballad poem. Robert
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the splendid response, Robert. Nancy:)
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You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the girl that's waiting for her sailor to return. When she find out she has a baby on the way she could not go further without her sailor who seems not going to return then she jumops in the ocean.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the girl that's waiting for her sailor to return. When she find out she has a baby on the way she could not go further without her sailor who seems not going to return then she jumops in the ocean.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the lovely review and stars, Sandra. Nancy:)
