Temporary Insanity
A wannabe writer loses it.27 total reviews
Comment from Sandie lee
It's funny cause it's true - but I think only writers would understand how one can so easily be pushed over the edge by those few small words; thank you for your submission, however...
Love the extremism you took this to and love the ending. So funny :D
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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It's funny cause it's true - but I think only writers would understand how one can so easily be pushed over the edge by those few small words; thank you for your submission, however...
Love the extremism you took this to and love the ending. So funny :D
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thanks, Sandie for going to far back in my portfolio. I stopped writing for a long time because the rejections caused too much pain. I've finally learned to not take it personally.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was like a wild warrior woman taking revenge for not getting your book to fly:)
I loved it, fast and furious but hell it had me in stitches as well.
Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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This was like a wild warrior woman taking revenge for not getting your book to fly:)
I loved it, fast and furious but hell it had me in stitches as well.
Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks for reading, Maureen. The point was to make the reader laugh. Glad I succeeded.
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I liked it:)....I wanna be just like you....LMAO
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from Tonulak
Hi Shari,
A enjoyed the frantic pace and realistic dialog and situation. Killing yourself over a book? How FS can you get?:)
I think you have a gift for fast paced prose like this; you're a woman of action!
Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Hi Shari,
A enjoyed the frantic pace and realistic dialog and situation. Killing yourself over a book? How FS can you get?:)
I think you have a gift for fast paced prose like this; you're a woman of action!
Great job--Ted
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Oh, you're a sweetie. You know, I've changed my prose style since being on the site. More breezy. And more fun to write. Thanks again, love, for the sixie. Off to eat dinner now.
Comment from God's Writer
A very interesting story with the taste of truth in it. I can feel for the person having dealt with publishers before. Unemotional bunch of asses. Thank you for the great story and the honor of reading it.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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A very interesting story with the taste of truth in it. I can feel for the person having dealt with publishers before. Unemotional bunch of asses. Thank you for the great story and the honor of reading it.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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And thanks for the green plus, sweetheart. Taste of truth,huh. LOL
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Yea, editors will drive you nuts.
Comment from mermaids
Interesting theme of a writer gone crazy over rejections. I admire your creativity and this is a story that all of us here can relate to.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Interesting theme of a writer gone crazy over rejections. I admire your creativity and this is a story that all of us here can relate to.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Thanks, mermaids. I'm planning to extend it for another contest off site. Has to be at least one thousand words. I can imagine what might happen in a loony bin.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
What I really love is when they send me a form rejection slip stating my work "just doesn't suit our needs at this time"--and attach a request that I subscribe. I want to tell them--well, never mind.
This is hilarious--and so well written.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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What I really love is when they send me a form rejection slip stating my work "just doesn't suit our needs at this time"--and attach a request that I subscribe. I want to tell them--well, never mind.
This is hilarious--and so well written.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Janice. That's pretty nervy, turning a rejection into a sales pitch! You should have bargained: I subscribe, you buy.
Comment from Adam J Santos
HaHa, That is why you should always write what feels right. Rather than write what you think people want to read. This is an excellent write with some real world reprocussions. I thoroughly enjoyed it in content and message. Good luck in the contest Shari and take care. Adam:)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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HaHa, That is why you should always write what feels right. Rather than write what you think people want to read. This is an excellent write with some real world reprocussions. I thoroughly enjoyed it in content and message. Good luck in the contest Shari and take care. Adam:)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks, my friend. Maybe that was the novel's problem LOL
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Was that piece of flash fiction autobiographical?
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Part fact, part fiction. I've never written a novel and wouldn't last more than ten rejections. Situation too silly to explain. Let's just say, someone seriously assaulted my ego. The incident taught me a lesson I needed to learn. Hey, the food was delicious and I didn't have to cook for three days.
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HaHa, A three day vacation. We all need those sometime.
Comment from LilHippie
Very clever! Oh boy, is this where we are all headed? I didn't quit my job, but am unemployed because they moved to a location that woudl take me three buses and an almost one mile walk from the last bus stop to the office building. Cab wants $20 each way, each day. So, where will it end. Your fictional story hits home. Love calling the husband the White Knight, love the knife to the throat. This better be fiction I am running my cleverly stupid mouth about. Very entertaining if fiction, very very sad if true about someone you know. I believe it is satire for all of us, maybe a bit of a slap of realism also. Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Very clever! Oh boy, is this where we are all headed? I didn't quit my job, but am unemployed because they moved to a location that woudl take me three buses and an almost one mile walk from the last bus stop to the office building. Cab wants $20 each way, each day. So, where will it end. Your fictional story hits home. Love calling the husband the White Knight, love the knife to the throat. This better be fiction I am running my cleverly stupid mouth about. Very entertaining if fiction, very very sad if true about someone you know. I believe it is satire for all of us, maybe a bit of a slap of realism also. Very nicely written.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Spot on, sweetie. Some fact, some fiction. Satire, yes. We take life too seriously and snap. Everything ended well. Don't blame you for quitting your job! No car I take it. Hope you find another one soon.
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Thanks, did nt quit. My boss, an absolute angel is he, laid me off and is picking up my health insurance cost from November (the lay off/move) til end of May.
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How wonderful! You have an angel watching out for you.
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Dave is the kindest, most down to earth, intelligent attorney I have ever worked for. Never made anyone feel like they were an "employee" put up with all my absences due to family traumas, always reminded me that I was the best legal secretary he knew in his entire career, helped me with my personal tragedies and never asked fro a thing in return. I miss that job so much, so very much. I will NEVER find a job like that, never. or a friend and confidant like Dave, father of four boys under the age of 12, worked from 7 a.m. to 6 p.m. every day, went home, cooked, played with his sons, went to football games, etc. A true gentleman, and what a sense of humor, so funny. Good catholic, so sarcastically funny. All the attorneys there were awesome, but Dave and Evelyn were the founding partners, and my favorites.
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Never say never, Lil. But he sounds hard to beat.
Hugs, Shari
Comment from donaldww
I found the prose in this flash fiction snappy and engaging. You made me feel glad I'm not the White Knight. Won't he be pleased when "Stupid Me" shows up home and goes for a divorce. There should be a government agency designated to publish rejected works from nutty writers in an attempt to keep them sane. It would cost less in the long run than all of the hospital time and police support, not to mention divorce lawyers :)
I like the name: Death by Degrees. Great word play.
Notice some 'quick fix' typos.
1. I noticed some double spaces in the opening sentence ...do something... etc. Few others throughout you'll probably notice on your own if you check it over.
2. ...one hundred nine... should be ...one hundred and nine...
3. Stray period between ...hurt? . I'd... in 3rd from last line.
4. Last line, 1st paragraph. ...windowless room In... <-- looks like the I is capitalized where you want i, else period after room.
DW
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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I found the prose in this flash fiction snappy and engaging. You made me feel glad I'm not the White Knight. Won't he be pleased when "Stupid Me" shows up home and goes for a divorce. There should be a government agency designated to publish rejected works from nutty writers in an attempt to keep them sane. It would cost less in the long run than all of the hospital time and police support, not to mention divorce lawyers :)
I like the name: Death by Degrees. Great word play.
Notice some 'quick fix' typos.
1. I noticed some double spaces in the opening sentence ...do something... etc. Few others throughout you'll probably notice on your own if you check it over.
2. ...one hundred nine... should be ...one hundred and nine...
3. Stray period between ...hurt? . I'd... in 3rd from last line.
4. Last line, 1st paragraph. ...windowless room In... <-- looks like the I is capitalized where you want i, else period after room.
DW
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much, Donald, for catching the spags. I'm sure that could keep an entry from winning. You're the first one to mention the word play. Actually, there is a site that published bad poetry! No kidding.
Comment from ennahanid
Your Flash Fiction Writing Contest contest entry Temporary Insanity had me chuckling along with the frustration of the reject slip. It held my attention and I was with you all the way, I even spent that 72 hours with you, it was a bit of a bo9re those 72 hours but I did it anyway LOL
Thank you for entertaining me tonight...Dinah
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Your Flash Fiction Writing Contest contest entry Temporary Insanity had me chuckling along with the frustration of the reject slip. It held my attention and I was with you all the way, I even spent that 72 hours with you, it was a bit of a bo9re those 72 hours but I did it anyway LOL
Thank you for entertaining me tonight...Dinah
Comment Written 16-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Dinah. So glad you enjoyed my fantasy trip to the land of the insane. I expect the nurses would keep drugged up on meds and you'd sleep most of the time.
