Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from Mara del Mar
This is very beautiful poem. See a set of sun is a show wonderful, your poem is full of beauty and colourful. Also the dawn is cute, but i prefer the twilight.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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This is very beautiful poem. See a set of sun is a show wonderful, your poem is full of beauty and colourful. Also the dawn is cute, but i prefer the twilight.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Mara, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your poem, Day Closes Up Her Shop, is lovely. It has a wonderful rhyming scheme and a smooth and easy cadence too. I really enjoy the personification of the day and sun.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Your poem, Day Closes Up Her Shop, is lovely. It has a wonderful rhyming scheme and a smooth and easy cadence too. I really enjoy the personification of the day and sun.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Billy, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
Well, I have never heard Day personified like this before! What an interesting image.
A great image of Sun signing his name in crimson ink.
And some super alliteration, assonance and internal rhyme in the closing two lines.
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Well, I have never heard Day personified like this before! What an interesting image.
A great image of Sun signing his name in crimson ink.
And some super alliteration, assonance and internal rhyme in the closing two lines.
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Sally, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Glad you enjoyed the personification :-) Brooke
Comment from Chris Davis
Another very beautiful offering you have here... where I live I don't get to see sunsets... or sunrises even... I miss those colors in the sky.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Another very beautiful offering you have here... where I live I don't get to see sunsets... or sunrises even... I miss those colors in the sky.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Chris, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review - that is an advantage of my suburb - I'm near all kinds of stores, restaurants, etc, but I also see lots of stars and sunsets :-) Brooke
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I see... trees... and the highway...
Comment from pattipac
Your beautiful picture selection is a perfect introduction to your well worded poem. Especially like these lines:'but Sun won't waste upon some shelf before a blaze of glory,' and 'He signed his name in crimson ink until the skies are burning.'
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Your beautiful picture selection is a perfect introduction to your well worded poem. Especially like these lines:'but Sun won't waste upon some shelf before a blaze of glory,' and 'He signed his name in crimson ink until the skies are burning.'
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Patricia, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from L K Pinaire
Very nice. I enjoyed this very much. At first I didn't get the title until I read it. It flowed nicely and the imagery was clear and bright.
Good writing,
Larry
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Very nice. I enjoyed this very much. At first I didn't get the title until I read it. It flowed nicely and the imagery was clear and bright.
Good writing,
Larry
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Larry, thank you so much for your thoughtful review : -) Brooke
Comment from mgarreau
A lovely poem with a perfect picture to match. Your middle stanza is my favorite, "He signs his name in crimson ink"- very creative. Thank you for sharing:)
~Marie
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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A lovely poem with a perfect picture to match. Your middle stanza is my favorite, "He signs his name in crimson ink"- very creative. Thank you for sharing:)
~Marie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Marie, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from MAMONIA
What a gorgeous picture of a sunset and
defining words. I love just the term you
say "Day closes up shop..." How very
unique and interesting to think of it
in this way.
Wonderful imagery and flow with a beautiful
rythmn and description of the ending of the
day.
Lovely work. Regards, Marie
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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What a gorgeous picture of a sunset and
defining words. I love just the term you
say "Day closes up shop..." How very
unique and interesting to think of it
in this way.
Wonderful imagery and flow with a beautiful
rythmn and description of the ending of the
day.
Lovely work. Regards, Marie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Marie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from jfmorgan
Excellently done,Brooke. I like the personification used throughout this piece. The day being given the female 'she'. The sun given the male 'he'. This style really works for you as you have implemented very effectively in the past. Again, bravo. And yes,I am still unable to award you six stars because of house rules. Sorry. So when you see 5 stars pretend there 6. I love your poetry. Keep it going!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Excellently done,Brooke. I like the personification used throughout this piece. The day being given the female 'she'. The sun given the male 'he'. This style really works for you as you have implemented very effectively in the past. Again, bravo. And yes,I am still unable to award you six stars because of house rules. Sorry. So when you see 5 stars pretend there 6. I love your poetry. Keep it going!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, jfmorgan, for your gracious comments and you kind wish for an exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from hellion5
Wow, this is fantastic, Brooke. Unfortunately, they won't let me give you another six. I love the way you've equated a solar day with a business day. I never thought about it that way, but you're right, it's much the same.
Wonderful work!
Sue
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Wow, this is fantastic, Brooke. Unfortunately, they won't let me give you another six. I love the way you've equated a solar day with a business day. I never thought about it that way, but you're right, it's much the same.
Wonderful work!
Sue
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Sue, thanks so very much for your kind wish for an exceptional rating and your encouraging review :-) Brooke
