Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from Poetic, Just Is.
This is lovely. The personification of Day and Sun is quite touching...
I loved all the visuals it gave me... like what "Day" would look like... with its fluffy clouds... etc,
and what Sun would look like, with it's fire, and flames, and heat...
It's full of imagery unstated... but implied.
I loved it.
Well done.
Cat
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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This is lovely. The personification of Day and Sun is quite touching...
I loved all the visuals it gave me... like what "Day" would look like... with its fluffy clouds... etc,
and what Sun would look like, with it's fire, and flames, and heat...
It's full of imagery unstated... but implied.
I loved it.
Well done.
Cat
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Cat, thanks so very much -I'm thrilled you enjoyed this so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sugardog
Very fun poem about day turning to night. I enjoyed the personification-love the use of Day and that she is like a shop owner-very cute and creative way to show us this change. Very cool-Sun signing his name with the red in the sky-love that! Beautiful picture. Excellent work. Dana
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Very fun poem about day turning to night. I enjoyed the personification-love the use of Day and that she is like a shop owner-very cute and creative way to show us this change. Very cool-Sun signing his name with the red in the sky-love that! Beautiful picture. Excellent work. Dana
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Dana, thank you so much for your thoughtful review - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from acvguard11
great job!!!...this piece definitely deserves the recognized ribbon and all time best award..its well written and i love the picture that goes along with it..great job and keep writing
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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great job!!!...this piece definitely deserves the recognized ribbon and all time best award..its well written and i love the picture that goes along with it..great job and keep writing
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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acvguard, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Stunning picture and your poem is wonderful in its imagery and delightful personification. Right now I'm looking at a most glorious moon, and can't decide if I like the sun from your poem or the moon outside my patio door better.
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Stunning picture and your poem is wonderful in its imagery and delightful personification. Right now I'm looking at a most glorious moon, and can't decide if I like the sun from your poem or the moon outside my patio door better.
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Karyn, thank you, my friend. Sending smiles right back :-) Brooke
Comment from Zombie's Woof
Hi-
Yes, and after that, night opens up her
pizzeria... in fact, this poem made me quite
hungry for pizza and also thirst for a cold
beer to wash it down.
Excellent work! ZW
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi-
Yes, and after that, night opens up her
pizzeria... in fact, this poem made me quite
hungry for pizza and also thirst for a cold
beer to wash it down.
Excellent work! ZW
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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ZW, hope you got your pizza. Thanks for stopping by. Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an excellent poem about how the sun just won't stay disregarded for long. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Brooke,
This is an excellent poem about how the sun just won't stay disregarded for long. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Dave, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review. Your book arrived in the mail yesterday :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from shy1250
Okay, that was just plain sneaky, not letting me give you 6's any more--although I see your point, since ALL your work merits a 6! Color me pea-green--particularly liked your capitalization of Sun, anyone who's ever laid out to tan can figure out exactly why people used to worship it. Suggestions? Corrections? pul-eeezze!! later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Okay, that was just plain sneaky, not letting me give you 6's any more--although I see your point, since ALL your work merits a 6! Color me pea-green--particularly liked your capitalization of Sun, anyone who's ever laid out to tan can figure out exactly why people used to worship it. Suggestions? Corrections? pul-eeezze!! later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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shy, thank you so very much for your wonderfully supportive and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
And I thank God for that, for the sun is the one thing that I enjoy always. I am not a sun worshiper, but I do recognize how precious a gift it really is.
Your poem is wonderful, the rhythm and flow is just about perfect. As I read it I did not have to stop and search for the beat or the flow, it was always on point right till the end. Great job.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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And I thank God for that, for the sun is the one thing that I enjoy always. I am not a sun worshiper, but I do recognize how precious a gift it really is.
Your poem is wonderful, the rhythm and flow is just about perfect. As I read it I did not have to stop and search for the beat or the flow, it was always on point right till the end. Great job.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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nomi, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rushingwater
Hi Brooke again! Very very beautiful and my gawd let me in your brain will you please. LOL... I read this one to my husband cause it was just so amazing in my opinion. You have such strong images that without effort the mind instantly creates the scene play by play. Well done Brooke. You truly are an inspiration, and sometimes I get so discouraged too, thinking I will never be able to write like that.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hi Brooke again! Very very beautiful and my gawd let me in your brain will you please. LOL... I read this one to my husband cause it was just so amazing in my opinion. You have such strong images that without effort the mind instantly creates the scene play by play. Well done Brooke. You truly are an inspiration, and sometimes I get so discouraged too, thinking I will never be able to write like that.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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rushingwater, thank you so very much - I'm honored you shared this with your husband :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
I liek the theme here of the sun returning. You have created the sun and night as characters that return each day. Excellent flow and use of words.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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I liek the theme here of the sun returning. You have created the sun and night as characters that return each day. Excellent flow and use of words.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Elaine, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
