Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
Very nice. One can almost picture 'Day' running around closing up shop and getting ready for bed. Nice imagery. Elizabeth Daniels.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Very nice. One can almost picture 'Day' running around closing up shop and getting ready for bed. Nice imagery. Elizabeth Daniels.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Elizabeth, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Carrie Carson
Perfect metaphor and photo for this poem. Some things just are not made to be away.
Small wonder this is an All Time Best.
Great pace and rhyme scheme, well suited to the message. Great job, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Perfect metaphor and photo for this poem. Some things just are not made to be away.
Small wonder this is an All Time Best.
Great pace and rhyme scheme, well suited to the message. Great job, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Carrie, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from teresa.b
Six stars, of course. You are so talented and so accomplished, you really should self publish a book of poems. Unless you already have, I just didn't see it posted. You have so many fans, I'm sure it would do well. As for this poem, I love the personification. The description makes me want to sit by the lake w a cup of coffee and watch the sunrise/sunset.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Six stars, of course. You are so talented and so accomplished, you really should self publish a book of poems. Unless you already have, I just didn't see it posted. You have so many fans, I'm sure it would do well. As for this poem, I love the personification. The description makes me want to sit by the lake w a cup of coffee and watch the sunrise/sunset.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you so very much, teresa, for your thoughtful review. I truly appreciate your encouragement and your gracious exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke
This is a fascinating poem, suitable for both children and adults, with the wonderful image of day as a shop.
You certainly found the ideal picture to go with your poetry.
Ron x
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi Brooke
This is a fascinating poem, suitable for both children and adults, with the wonderful image of day as a shop.
You certainly found the ideal picture to go with your poetry.
Ron x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Ron, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dezyne1966
Were you writing inpart about the coming of the Lord?
How the sun have to shine? You wrote a very nice piece. Is it published? It's very good.
God Bless
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Were you writing inpart about the coming of the Lord?
How the sun have to shine? You wrote a very nice piece. Is it published? It's very good.
God Bless
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I was not really writing with a religious meaning, but you are not the first to see one :-) Thanks so very much for your thoughtful reading of this poem and for your graciously generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
You have the happy knack of combining the common place with something grand. So we see golden shafts of sunlight piercing the dusty air of some dull room. Maybe eternity can be trapped in a dusty room. Not satisfied with that, under your deft fingers, he personifies one of God's creatures putting signature to a covenant, written across the sky. And the day-long hours stoops like an old shop keeper confining the restless sun to its shelf, throughout the interminable night. Could this be a definition of Hell? Maybe hell is as being, confined to a sleepless night.
-Ekim
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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You have the happy knack of combining the common place with something grand. So we see golden shafts of sunlight piercing the dusty air of some dull room. Maybe eternity can be trapped in a dusty room. Not satisfied with that, under your deft fingers, he personifies one of God's creatures putting signature to a covenant, written across the sky. And the day-long hours stoops like an old shop keeper confining the restless sun to its shelf, throughout the interminable night. Could this be a definition of Hell? Maybe hell is as being, confined to a sleepless night.
-Ekim
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I definitely did not have Hell in mind as I wrote - I don't even believe in Hell so I never write about it. Thank you, Ekim, for your thoughtful review. :-)
Comment from bowls
How you always come up with such delightfully original ideas for poems I'll never know. Your personification of Day with her little shop is ingenious and Sun, well, you have him pegged here. He's no one to be stuck on a shelf for very long - a bit too bold and brash for that. You've employed a nice, mellow rhyme scheme which certainly is well suited to the sunset hour.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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How you always come up with such delightfully original ideas for poems I'll never know. Your personification of Day with her little shop is ingenious and Sun, well, you have him pegged here. He's no one to be stuck on a shelf for very long - a bit too bold and brash for that. You've employed a nice, mellow rhyme scheme which certainly is well suited to the sunset hour.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Bowls, thank you so very much for such wonderful comments :-) B rooke
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Oh, that's just so damn good.
Beautiful visuals that complement each word in the poem.
Loved the rhyme and the bounce in each verse, but especially loved the end. How very clever!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Oh, that's just so damn good.
Beautiful visuals that complement each word in the poem.
Loved the rhyme and the bounce in each verse, but especially loved the end. How very clever!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Spiritual Echo, thank you so very much for this gracious review and generous exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from Late_Bloomer
I really enjoyed this poem. The title was intriguing and it was beautifully written. I absolutely love the idea of 'Day closing up her shop' and the imagery that you conjure up. One of my favourites on the site and you definitely deserve the all time best certificate!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I really enjoyed this poem. The title was intriguing and it was beautifully written. I absolutely love the idea of 'Day closing up her shop' and the imagery that you conjure up. One of my favourites on the site and you definitely deserve the all time best certificate!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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LateBloomer, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
The day does close up shop each night. An interesting thought - even the day must close and prepare for the next day's opening. The poem made me think that the world is sort of like a huge shopping centre - Everyone goes home for the night, but somewhere inside the mall, workers are busy getting ready for tomorrow's activities. Rose.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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The day does close up shop each night. An interesting thought - even the day must close and prepare for the next day's opening. The poem made me think that the world is sort of like a huge shopping centre - Everyone goes home for the night, but somewhere inside the mall, workers are busy getting ready for tomorrow's activities. Rose.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Rose, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
