Serpentine Lights
the Northern Lights22 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Helvi, your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the nonet
I also like your night/light/night rhyme
Lovely descriptive detail
nice alliterative pairing of serpentine/slide/stars/sky
Brooke
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Helvi, your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the nonet
I also like your night/light/night rhyme
Lovely descriptive detail
nice alliterative pairing of serpentine/slide/stars/sky
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Serpentine pathways <<< love the words AND the picture
Slide through the stars
When sky waves
Rule the
Night
You made this as visually pleasing as it reads. Total art!
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Serpentine pathways <<< love the words AND the picture
Slide through the stars
When sky waves
Rule the
Night
You made this as visually pleasing as it reads. Total art!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
Comment from Sissy
Hey Helvi2,
I've been coming across a lot of nonets on FS these days. I have to say, this is one of my favorites! Even with the parameters you are required to follow, this has a really nice flow and reads beautifully.
I loved the lines:
Serpentine pathways
Slide through the stars
I love the imagery here - visually this really works.
This is an excellent contest entry. I loved it!
Take care,
Sissy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2012
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Hey Helvi2,
I've been coming across a lot of nonets on FS these days. I have to say, this is one of my favorites! Even with the parameters you are required to follow, this has a really nice flow and reads beautifully.
I loved the lines:
Serpentine pathways
Slide through the stars
I love the imagery here - visually this really works.
This is an excellent contest entry. I loved it!
Take care,
Sissy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2012
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WOW! Thank you SO much for the wonderful compliments and six star rating Sissy! I am truly honored and thrilled you liked this Nonet SO much! :o) Helvi
Comment from Mastery
You are a great poet, Helvi! I just love this from beginning to end. My fave lines are:
"Serpentine pathways
Slide through the stars"
This is what poetry...real Poetry should look and sound like. Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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You are a great poet, Helvi! I just love this from beginning to end. My fave lines are:
"Serpentine pathways
Slide through the stars"
This is what poetry...real Poetry should look and sound like. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Bob, You have NO idea how honored I am to receive a six star sating from YOU! Thank you SO much for the lovely compliments.! MY smile is a mile long. SMiles and Hugs, Helvi
Comment from J. P. Egry
This poem is a lovely recollection of the beauty of the Northern Lights. Where I grew up, I saw them quite a few times---some were unbelievably colorful and bright. It's a sight one never forgets and always hopes to see again.
The nonet captures the quiet beauty and emotion that this wondrous natural event creates. I especially like "serpentine pathways slide through the stars"---nice alliteration that adds to the sliding effect and the phrase creates such a beautiful visual in the mind's eye. A perfect contest entry.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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This poem is a lovely recollection of the beauty of the Northern Lights. Where I grew up, I saw them quite a few times---some were unbelievably colorful and bright. It's a sight one never forgets and always hopes to see again.
The nonet captures the quiet beauty and emotion that this wondrous natural event creates. I especially like "serpentine pathways slide through the stars"---nice alliteration that adds to the sliding effect and the phrase creates such a beautiful visual in the mind's eye. A perfect contest entry.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Hi JP, I'm SO glad you enjoyed this and a little envious of your seeing the Northern Lights so many times. I've seen them twice in my life. They were faint, but still beautiful lights. I'm thrilled you felt I captured some of the lights essence.Thank you SO much for the lovely review. :o) Helvi
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You're fvery welcome!
Comment from Alan K Pease
You have picked your Nonet's timing right for NASA has just launched 5 rockets at the same time to study the winds at the edge of space where the Northern Lights play with the jet stream.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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You have picked your Nonet's timing right for NASA has just launched 5 rockets at the same time to study the winds at the edge of space where the Northern Lights play with the jet stream.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Hi Alan. Thanks for sharing your knowledge about Nasa and the rockets they sent up to study the Northern Lights. I wasn't aware they were doing that. :o) I'm glad you enjoyed my nonet about them. Thank you for the wondeful review ! :o) Helvi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Helvi,
love your thought of how you vision the Northern light . Nicely done in the nonet format
(so I take it you viewed the speculator sight)
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Hello Helvi,
love your thought of how you vision the Northern light . Nicely done in the nonet format
(so I take it you viewed the speculator sight)
Gert
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Hi Gert, I have seen the Northern Lights twice in my life ,but they were pretty faint. I did enjoy them though! Living in Vermont you must have seen quite a few of them. I'm very happy you enjoyed my thoughts on those lovely lights. Thank you for the wonderful review. :o) Helvi
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You are so welcome Helvi
Gert
Comment from jshep
Your imagery in this nonet must be right on, Helvi, because I never read author notes til after I read a poem, and my first thought after reading your words was she has written about the aurora borealis. Bravo. I especially like thinking of ribbons in the sky and the vision of sky waves ruling the night. Very well done poem. Joycexx
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Your imagery in this nonet must be right on, Helvi, because I never read author notes til after I read a poem, and my first thought after reading your words was she has written about the aurora borealis. Bravo. I especially like thinking of ribbons in the sky and the vision of sky waves ruling the night. Very well done poem. Joycexx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from tinams
Your wonderful and brightly coloured nonet paints a beautiful picture. I wish you every success in the competition. Great job :)
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Your wonderful and brightly coloured nonet paints a beautiful picture. I wish you every success in the competition. Great job :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from Anisa-
They really are beautiful. Where I grew up, we saw them all the time. They are truly one of the most amazing things on earth.
Great job with this poem and capturing them with your words. Looks like your syllable count is spot-on.
Anisa
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They really are beautiful. Where I grew up, we saw them all the time. They are truly one of the most amazing things on earth.
Great job with this poem and capturing them with your words. Looks like your syllable count is spot-on.
Anisa
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
