Sunshine in My Basket
All the things we never say...25 total reviews
Comment from Anisa-
Well, very nice. This poem really expresses strong emotions and holds a good message. It's nice to hear that you have someone like that in your life.
I thought this was written well and was easy to follow. For me, it was an enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing.
Anisa
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Well, very nice. This poem really expresses strong emotions and holds a good message. It's nice to hear that you have someone like that in your life.
I thought this was written well and was easy to follow. For me, it was an enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing.
Anisa
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hello Anisa
I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your thoughts.
cheers
Grant
Comment from patsypats
This is uniquely written. Your style and descriptive word choices are mellow and yet intense with emotion. Good imagery.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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This is uniquely written. Your style and descriptive word choices are mellow and yet intense with emotion. Good imagery.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hi patsypats,
thanks for the great thoughts, I realy appreciate your time.
cheers
Grant
Comment from TammyGail
mrgrunty this was such a endearing verse
very well written and expressed
Creative and so very heartfelt
Thanks for sharing this is was a pleasure
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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mrgrunty this was such a endearing verse
very well written and expressed
Creative and so very heartfelt
Thanks for sharing this is was a pleasure
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hey there again TammyGail,
I'm glad you liked it and hope you can find my other works equally as enjoyable.
Thanks for dropping in!
cheers
Grant
Comment from Bobbi22
This is a beautiful, nice free-flowing poem. The rhyming fourth line in each stanza serves as a nice transition and connector from one stanza to the next. Very well written.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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This is a beautiful, nice free-flowing poem. The rhyming fourth line in each stanza serves as a nice transition and connector from one stanza to the next. Very well written.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hello RightPics,
I appreciate you reading and also leaving your thoughts. I hope you can find my other work equally as enjoyable.
cheers
Grant
Comment from HPicasso
An easy read, capturing the reader's attention from the first line.
I lovethe line about jumping on the bed. (smile)
Your writing is invariably much more than pleasant. The poem has perfect choice of words and makes a lovely read.
A love poem from your heart; each stanza speaks of your love for your lady. What a wonderfully romantic love song. A beautiful refrain of gratitude. thank you so much for sharing your creativity. Well done indeed with this splendid work.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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An easy read, capturing the reader's attention from the first line.
I lovethe line about jumping on the bed. (smile)
Your writing is invariably much more than pleasant. The poem has perfect choice of words and makes a lovely read.
A love poem from your heart; each stanza speaks of your love for your lady. What a wonderfully romantic love song. A beautiful refrain of gratitude. thank you so much for sharing your creativity. Well done indeed with this splendid work.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi HPicasso,
Glad you enjoyed the read and really appreciate that you left your thoughts too!
cheers
Grant
Comment from rightforyou
I enjoyed this flow of poetic talent and the way that you have penned this...Different and effective ..Loved the message that this poem sends along with the words that send it along as it was read...Well Done..Ron
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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I enjoyed this flow of poetic talent and the way that you have penned this...Different and effective ..Loved the message that this poem sends along with the words that send it along as it was read...Well Done..Ron
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi there Ron,
thanks for the cool thoughts and I hope you enjoy more of my work.
cheers
Grant
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Awwww Grant, that's absolutely beautiful. I think any woman would be lucky to hear you singing those words to her. What a wonderful flowing song. Now all you have to do is record it so I can hear it. LOL Very, very nice to start my Monday with. Thank you so much.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Awwww Grant, that's absolutely beautiful. I think any woman would be lucky to hear you singing those words to her. What a wonderful flowing song. Now all you have to do is record it so I can hear it. LOL Very, very nice to start my Monday with. Thank you so much.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hello there sweetness!!
Now I just need a girl to sing it to!!
Thanks sooo much for being there hon!
xx
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Do you have any music written for it? My husband is quite the musician, I'd love to hear it.
Comment from L K Pinaire
Oh, well hell. This is beautiful. Sorry it took me so long to get to this, but YOU put the sunshine in MY day. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this very much.
Good writing,
Larry
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Oh, well hell. This is beautiful. Sorry it took me so long to get to this, but YOU put the sunshine in MY day. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this very much.
Good writing,
Larry
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Gday Larry,
I'm glad I could be of assistance!
cheers
grant :)
Comment from DeannaRoss
This is really nice.
Your first line is great (the porridge) -- it's relaxed, tender, kind of down-home, and imaginative. Who doesn't want to feel like that?!
Also the second stanza is good -- the juxtaposition of these images says a surprising amount about how someone can fill you with ebullient joy and excitement, and courage.
Judging just by this piece, I'd say you have a skill for offering simple images that are creative and impactful.
Best wishes to you and more happy writing,
Deanna
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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This is really nice.
Your first line is great (the porridge) -- it's relaxed, tender, kind of down-home, and imaginative. Who doesn't want to feel like that?!
Also the second stanza is good -- the juxtaposition of these images says a surprising amount about how someone can fill you with ebullient joy and excitement, and courage.
Judging just by this piece, I'd say you have a skill for offering simple images that are creative and impactful.
Best wishes to you and more happy writing,
Deanna
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi there DeannaRoss,
Thank you for taking the time to read and leave your thoughts on my post.
"Judging just by this piece, I'd say you have a skill for offering simple images that are creative and impactful."
Yes that is kinda my MO as a poet, with the only addition being maybe 'evoking real emotions'
Again I thank you and you will find a smorgasboard within my portfolio should you venture in!
lol
cheers
grant
Comment from rhymelord
Dear mrgrunty,
This is quite delightful writing. The splitting of an iambic heptameter line into two, followed by your iambic pentameter is brilliant and produces a series of bite sized chunks of verse, which are so easy to read and look so much better. I have one query, however,
I believe that the line:
"You give me hope on which I
can aspire."
should read:
"You give me hope TO which I
can aspire."
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Dear mrgrunty,
This is quite delightful writing. The splitting of an iambic heptameter line into two, followed by your iambic pentameter is brilliant and produces a series of bite sized chunks of verse, which are so easy to read and look so much better. I have one query, however,
I believe that the line:
"You give me hope on which I
can aspire."
should read:
"You give me hope TO which I
can aspire."
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi there Reg,
thankyou again for checking in on my postings and also leaving a thorough, well constructed review.
I have wrestled with myself in thought over your suggestion and I do concur. Thanks mate for highlighting that for me and I will now tweak it.
cheers
grant
