Her Song of Love Turned Dark
the power of love18 total reviews
Comment from Maxine Kendall
A beautiful sonnet, Mike.
I love the use of baritone and soprano to describe the couple here, and the musical element that runs throughout. Very creative, my friend.
Perfectly written with excellent rhyme and meter.
Well done and best wishes for the contest.
Maxine x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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A beautiful sonnet, Mike.
I love the use of baritone and soprano to describe the couple here, and the musical element that runs throughout. Very creative, my friend.
Perfectly written with excellent rhyme and meter.
Well done and best wishes for the contest.
Maxine x
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much, Maxine :-). I love writing sonnets, and I was particularly pleased with this one. I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wish I had your gift of word ussage. Your descriptions are extremely emotional and vivid. Your sonnet flows well and has a good rhyming scheme. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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I wish I had your gift of word ussage. Your descriptions are extremely emotional and vivid. Your sonnet flows well and has a good rhyming scheme. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the fantastic rating and review, Barbara :-). I love to break out the big words, especially when I'm writing in meter. I'm so glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from James crofoot
Darker, of course, but I think there are definitely darker aspects to love and this poem does an excellent job of telling that. All eclipsed by love. The heart chokes.
Love is very powerful "and tears our world apart." I liked the way you expressed the pain that can be felt. Personal experience?
Thanks for paying me to read this and sing praises. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Darker, of course, but I think there are definitely darker aspects to love and this poem does an excellent job of telling that. All eclipsed by love. The heart chokes.
Love is very powerful "and tears our world apart." I liked the way you expressed the pain that can be felt. Personal experience?
Thanks for paying me to read this and sing praises. :-)
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Thank you, James! Not quite personal experience, but a postulation on where personal experience could lead. Anything can become a trap, if we let it.
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
WOW! Now that is how one should write a sonnet, unbelievable mate, I wish I had your gift of words, the things I could write :) I just love reading the creativity that is you. Good Luck, winner all the way.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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WOW! Now that is how one should write a sonnet, unbelievable mate, I wish I had your gift of words, the things I could write :) I just love reading the creativity that is you. Good Luck, winner all the way.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much, Hitch. I was definitely feeling this one, so the words pretty much arranged themselves. So glad you liked it mate!
Mike
Comment from Skyangel02
An excellent sonnet which is illustrated so beautifully if I do say so myself. LOL.
Thank you for enhancing my art work with such a wonderful sonnet which beats to the rhythm of the heart.
I love it.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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An excellent sonnet which is illustrated so beautifully if I do say so myself. LOL.
Thank you for enhancing my art work with such a wonderful sonnet which beats to the rhythm of the heart.
I love it.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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lol, thank you Sky, and thanks for the use of that awesome animated image of yours :-).
Mike
Comment from pigwit
Fleedleflump,
The stanza below was my favorite.
Within, she deafens, chokes my ailing heart;
with love she kills, and tears our world apart.
Pigwit
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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Fleedleflump,
The stanza below was my favorite.
Within, she deafens, chokes my ailing heart;
with love she kills, and tears our world apart.
Pigwit
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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Thanks, Pigwit! Really glad you enjoyed it :-)
Mike
Comment from Sasha
This is superb. So beautifully written and a marvelous entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best too. As you may notice, I have avoided commented on the style...that's because I failed poetry style and can only comment on what the poem says to me. This one spoke quite loudly and came across so sad. Beautiful work with this one.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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This is superb. So beautifully written and a marvelous entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best too. As you may notice, I have avoided commented on the style...that's because I failed poetry style and can only comment on what the poem says to me. This one spoke quite loudly and came across so sad. Beautiful work with this one.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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I'm more interested in your response to the poem, my friend, because I can fix the technical aspects myself. The interpretation and reaction are where the magic lies, and they are all down to you as a reader. Thank you so much :-).
Mike
Comment from mumsyone
Within, she deafens, chokes my ailing heart;
with love she kills, and tears our world apart.
Wow! This one's pretty dark, and sad. It is well presented though, and well written.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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Within, she deafens, chokes my ailing heart;
with love she kills, and tears our world apart.
Wow! This one's pretty dark, and sad. It is well presented though, and well written.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Mumsy :-). I wanted to show how even the most beautiful things can be threatening. We're very delecately balanced, us humans!
Mike
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Well I was thinking of entering this contest but I think not now, LOL That was very well done. Great word usage in this piece. Nice job with the enjambment and alliteration, just overall very well constructed piece. That was a great poem of Judes to be inspired from.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Well I was thinking of entering this contest but I think not now, LOL That was very well done. Great word usage in this piece. Nice job with the enjambment and alliteration, just overall very well constructed piece. That was a great poem of Judes to be inspired from.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Thank you, DoT :-). I do love writing sonnets, and Jude's poem really sparked a flame inside.
Mike
Comment from Judian James
How can I NOT give you six stars for this masterpiece. I think I also need to send you a bill for inspiring you in such a way to produce such a SUPERB piece of writing. One of the best sonnets I have read in a very, VERY long time, Mike!! I love the turn this took to obsession and your wonderful choice of multi-syllable words and enjambment throughout. A more PERFECT sonnet I'll be hard-pressed to find. BRAVO and thanks once again for the compliment!!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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How can I NOT give you six stars for this masterpiece. I think I also need to send you a bill for inspiring you in such a way to produce such a SUPERB piece of writing. One of the best sonnets I have read in a very, VERY long time, Mike!! I love the turn this took to obsession and your wonderful choice of multi-syllable words and enjambment throughout. A more PERFECT sonnet I'll be hard-pressed to find. BRAVO and thanks once again for the compliment!!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, JJ :-). I think I would pay you happily - without your poetry, mine would be far less prolific. I liked being able to effect the turn without breaking the sentence - I'd been thinking about it as I wrote the first two quatrains, wondering if I'd be able to do it, and then it just happened naturally with the words. Most of all, I'm happy you like it.
Mike
