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Enchantment


Shakespearean Sonnet

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SaM-PO
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WOW for a 2 cent to review, this should cost a million dollars to read. This is marvel majesty. SHAKESPEARE like in my opinion. I have read just a little shakespeare so far, but I have come to know greatness when I read it. I'm praising as one who is fulfilled to endeavor and wield his own talent. Im inspired by you keep writing Briliance.

This I'm sure had to have competed for poem of the month. THANK YOU for sharing.


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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2014


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Definitely a splendid poem you've written there.

The title really captured my attention (haha really does say something about enchantment)..the magical attraction.

The rhythm is definitely strong and the rhyme scheme goes well with the flow.

"To dream of you is yet a life fulfilled --" blunt and honest

"a bud upon the willow not yet bloomed."- a beautiful metaphor..a bud that has not yet blossomed..happiness is still absent, along with love.

"Forever caught in Spring's enchantment, stilled,
I wait to tender love lest I'm consumed."-

Very lovely

the symbolic meaning of "Spring" is significant.

the time of rebirth and renewal
Forever living in the world of undying love.

Love your last lines:

"Young silver willow, come grow old with me
in winter's sleep where dreams will set us free."

Time is a crucial element throughout your poem

"young" to "old"

the transition of "spring" to "winter"

Very beautiful

Amanda


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013



reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
    I'm very sorry for the delay in replying. I'm rarely on FS these days. Thank you so much for the wonderful and thorough review.
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Congratulations on your contest win.
It is an excellent example to study.
You deserve an applause. Imagine loud sound effects coming up....CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP.


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
    LOL Thank you very much, Skyangel. *bows*
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A well-deserved win - and of course, a great sonnet with absolutely drop-dead lovely imagery; enhanced by Ms Van Buren.
Catkins bring back memories of my schoolmate - age 5, telling me - age 4 that catkins were caterpillars that had been hanged. Gruesome.


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
    LOL Sounds like kids being kids. Hope you didn't have nightmares over it. Thanks for the kind words, al.
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What a gorgeous piece of writing Bellydanser. You have given life to the ultimate emotion when you dream in verse of love. Congrats on the win ... Well deserved! xoxo deborah


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
    Thank you very much, Deborah. Dreaming, not living it at this point. *sigh*
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
    Thank you very much for this wonderful honor.
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Beautiful and most fitting picture choice. Your descriptive word choice brings out the imagery of your work. Your rhyming scheme was really nice.


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
    Thank you, patsypats, for the nice review.
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This is beautiful, and it was one of the many reasons I liked Shakespear so well. I got into him in HIghschool and read his plays and sonnets for several years thereafter.


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
    Thank you, uniqueauthor. I've written sonnets, but only now have paid closer attention to the internal form of argument that sets this apart. I'm glad it works. :)

reply by uniqueauthor on 08-Mar-2012
    You're welcome. Those who can write a true sonnet are so few, I would not deign to sit with them. Peace and luck to you.
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A wonderful poem with depth of feeling and thought, reads aloud well, looks well, and I find no errors. I believe that the Sonnet allows the poet to truly shine. The confinement of the meter & rhyme make the poet ever aware that what he/she is writing is for prosperity a masterpiece in art.


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
    Thank you very much for this generous review, giovannimariatommaso. I know some balk at poetry with too many rules, but I think it makes me work a little smarter having to find a flow that overrides the form. It has even made my free verse better in the long run. :)

reply by giovannimariatommaso on 08-Mar-2012
    I believe it! Free Verse has its hidden rules that must be followed too.
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This is a well-crafted sonnet--meets all the guidelines for rhyme and meter. You've movingly conveyed the theme (I think) that one can wait too long while hoping for perfection. Then winter of life comes. If I'm way off, let me know!


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2012



reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
    You are exactly right, Janice. Thanks for the thoughtful reading and for the kind review.
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