As Berries Burst With Juice
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
This delightful poem uses the berry (perhaps ?) to symbolize all those sweet, beautiful things God gives us through nature. This WOULD make a great song. Good job
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This delightful poem uses the berry (perhaps ?) to symbolize all those sweet, beautiful things God gives us through nature. This WOULD make a great song. Good job
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Janice, thanks so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your poem, As Berries Burst With Juice, is such a lovely poem. It has a lovely rhyming scheme and the cadence is smooth and easy, too.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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Your poem, As Berries Burst With Juice, is such a lovely poem. It has a lovely rhyming scheme and the cadence is smooth and easy, too.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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Billy, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from SamuelClemens
Never before have a appreciated miniamalism in poetry as I do after having read this piece. You can say so much in so few words. It's very impressive.
Great job!
-Samuel Clemens
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Never before have a appreciated miniamalism in poetry as I do after having read this piece. You can say so much in so few words. It's very impressive.
Great job!
-Samuel Clemens
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Samuel, thanks so very much for your gracious response to this poem : -) Brooke
Comment from October21
This is beautiful, Brooke.
I am hungry for berries
the description and vividness of the fruit are so lively and full
the ending is perfect, mentioning God, creator of all
I like the rhyme scheme, too.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This is beautiful, Brooke.
I am hungry for berries
the description and vividness of the fruit are so lively and full
the ending is perfect, mentioning God, creator of all
I like the rhyme scheme, too.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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October, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from JW
In reading your well written poem, I could not help but smile. How delicious fresh berries are. I can easily recall the taste and wish I have a fresh berry pie right now. :-) JW
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In reading your well written poem, I could not help but smile. How delicious fresh berries are. I can easily recall the taste and wish I have a fresh berry pie right now. :-) JW
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
Comment from uniqueauthor
This is well written and provides sage advise for all who must ear to live, and this means everyone.
I thank the brook and the sun,
I thank the gracious vine,
And then I thank the Lord,
Who made Creation Mine.
I am thankful for every day
I am thankful in every way
I am most greatful of all
To the Spirit
Of the Awesome One
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This is well written and provides sage advise for all who must ear to live, and this means everyone.
I thank the brook and the sun,
I thank the gracious vine,
And then I thank the Lord,
Who made Creation Mine.
I am thankful for every day
I am thankful in every way
I am most greatful of all
To the Spirit
Of the Awesome One
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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uniqueauthor, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review.
Brooke :-)
Comment from LadyCosgrove
I can literally taste the wonderfully flavoured berries and feel the juice on my tongue. That, right there, is an image sent direct to my senses.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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I can literally taste the wonderfully flavoured berries and feel the juice on my tongue. That, right there, is an image sent direct to my senses.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Lady Cosgrove, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It's amazing to me that you can here a meter, identify it, and then figure out how to write a poem that matches it. WOW!!!!! I get stuck with the identifing the meter. Then on top of it all you write not only a poem, but a great poem.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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It's amazing to me that you can here a meter, identify it, and then figure out how to write a poem that matches it. WOW!!!!! I get stuck with the identifing the meter. Then on top of it all you write not only a poem, but a great poem.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Barbara, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from pigwit
Brooke,
What a nice poem for a wintry day. it has been snowing here the last couple of days, but this poem reminded me of the blackberry and raspberry patches we have out back.
Made me long for summer (and I'm a fall/winter lover too).
Pigwit
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I LIKED THIS SET OF LINES
No chef could proffer more
than this on which I'm dining,
a prime al fresco meal
of nature's fine designing.
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Brooke,
What a nice poem for a wintry day. it has been snowing here the last couple of days, but this poem reminded me of the blackberry and raspberry patches we have out back.
Made me long for summer (and I'm a fall/winter lover too).
Pigwit
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I LIKED THIS SET OF LINES
No chef could proffer more
than this on which I'm dining,
a prime al fresco meal
of nature's fine designing.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
Comment from wordsfromsue
This is humble and gorgeous. Taking time to observe nature's bounty, then being wise enough to partake of it. The picture is restful and appetizing. :-)
Your words always make the ordinary seem extraordinary. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This is humble and gorgeous. Taking time to observe nature's bounty, then being wise enough to partake of it. The picture is restful and appetizing. :-)
Your words always make the ordinary seem extraordinary. :-)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Sue, thanks so very much :-) Brooke
