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As Berries Burst With Juice

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Comment from skye
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Truly remarkable, the gifts He so generously gives us all.
Your words are blended nicely, to form a picture of abundance and nourishment.
Well done, with super word choices....plump, proffer, burbles. Great.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Skye, thank you so very much for your lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dustybones
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Very nice with the fresh berries being plucked.

I like this

a prime al fresco meal
of nature's fine designing

How do you think of the very best description? Talent, I think. :-)

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Dusty, thanks so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
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The berry deserves a poem and I love them all. You pay tribute to this life saving fruit and its yummy taste."No chef could profer more" is my favorite line, berries are truly nature's best food.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Elaine, thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I do appreciate your comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Lovely bright artwork of the berries about to be picked, they look so real, and you too paint a lovely peaceful scene with your words of the burbling brooke the berries and the sun. Nature at its best. A lovely read.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Pearl, thanks so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
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As always creative excelence in writing. Me would like to be so bold to write of berries in poems untold, yet with the juice that dibbles down my shirt, I can't find a writing worth the weight of gold in dirt. Mike

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Mike, thank you, my friend. I have all the pages you've sent so far ready to mail tomorrow. Send more any time you're ready :-) Brooke
reply by mstad55 on 20-Feb-2012
    Okay. I'm up to page 181. I want to finish book 7 and then I'll send some more. Thanks Mike
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    sounds like a plan to me :-)
Comment from kenzi'spoems
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beautiful beautiful beautiful! thank you for sharing this piece of work with me. it is thoroughly appreciated. keep up the amazing work you are doing and may your light shine bright in His time. Blessings unto you and your house.
Forever and Truly,
Kenzi

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Thanks so very much, Kenzi - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
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Hi Brooke,
The first line, 'as berries burst with juice' creates a vivid image that pulls the reader n.
I like the lilting easy tempo to this poem, there is an element of saying grace, woven into the fabric of the words.
..a prime al fresco meal of Nature's fine designing..' is a wonderful phrase.
Great poem.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Karen, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from mgarreau
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Makes me hungry! This reads so smoothly, great job on following iambic meter. I like how in the first stanza you describe all that goes in to making each berry, and in the last stanza when you thank the Lord "Who made creation mine."
~Marie

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Marie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
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I enjoyed this poem very much. You say so much with this one. I especially like these lines:

I thank the brook and sun,
I thank the gracious vine,
and then I thank the Lord,
Who made Creation mine...

How lovely this is. Beautiful work with this lovely poem.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Valerie, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
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Very nice poem with a good rhyming scheme and flows well. It also made hungry for fruit. LOL Nice picture to go along with the poem.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2012

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
    Elizabeth, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke