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As Berries Burst With Juice


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Hi Brooke,

Mmmmm! Now you're talking, berries plucked warm from the vine or hedgerow ...

Lovely poem it certainly fits the hymn you named! Nun danket al uns Gott! Great hymn.

Patrick



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    Patrick, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
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This reminded me of 'the raspberry, ripe for the gatherer,
springs' Among other things, I picked up on the bits of feminine endings. You serve a succulent sample...
Ever your friend


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    Thanks so much, oozer, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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I enjoyed reading this. To taste fresh fruit right off the vine is wonderful. I like the rhythm of your poem and could hear it being sung. Thank you.


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    Carolyn, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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A beautiful rhyme cleverly put together with lovely language. The inter dependence of the berries with brook and sun are conveyed with wonderful poetic panache. I love the element of appreciation and thankfulness for God's Creation that you see as personal. Great work brilliantly presented!

Enrique


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    Enrique, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
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don't you just love harvest time, when all the blackberries stand proud and ripe, we make a vinegar from them, now that is my picture of bliss!


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    The Stranger, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review : -) Brooke
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And I thank you my friend for the mesmerizing poetry that you share with us and believe you me, it's sweeter than any berry and ofcourse I thank God for writers/poets like you.


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    ameen, thanks so very much for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
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I love the photo. The woods we used to live nearby had cherries like this and they were lovely. You really did a lot: two Octets and this lovely meter. Nice read the day after Sunday.


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    Ine, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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That was delightful.The picking of the blueberries and nature.Loved the pic and great rhyme.Enjoyed it very much.Well written Adew.beth fairy77.


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    Beth, thank you so much for this generous exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
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This is a lovely poem about the pleasure you experience picking blackberries straight from the bush.
Great alliteration with berries burst and brook that burbles...burbles is a cool word.
Nice abcb rhymes too, I especially liked dining and designing.


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    Melspoems, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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Thanks you, Brroke, for this lovely poem! As a very good chef, myself, there is truth to the taste of perfectly juicy, ripe berries. My Dad found a stand of wild blackberry bushes by the railroad tracks and we would go gather them up in summer, eating half of what we would gather:)
To dine al fresco on some ripe berries, now that is really somethin'

Great job--Tede


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    You're a chef, too? Is there no end to your talents? A musician/poet/chef - I can't cook to save my life. LOL Thanks so much, Ted :-) Brooke

reply by Tonulak on 20-Feb-2012
    Yes, I think my talents end with typing:)
    My Mom was a good cook, even worked professionally and my three best friends in high school (says a lot about my friends) opted for culinary school. As a young musician in New York, I could pick up some brunch and lunch work to supplement my income with them. A professional kitchen is nuts, you could be peeling potatoes one minute then being taught how to make a gallon of Bordalais sauce the next:) Even though I'm blind now, I do all the cooking. My friends are amazed and actually shudder at how fast I can slice an onion; they think they're going to witness an amputation!

    I'd tell you more about myself, but to a great extent, I try to downplay my wonderfulness:)
    Thanks for the kind words, my dearBrooke--Ted
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