As Berries Burst With Juice
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Comment from poetbear
This chef says Yum!!!!
Great work bursting with creativity and originality.
I would send it to the people that grow them and you might see this on the carton.
Indescribably delicious.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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This chef says Yum!!!!
Great work bursting with creativity and originality.
I would send it to the people that grow them and you might see this on the carton.
Indescribably delicious.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Maddy, thank you so much - so glad you enjoyed this one :-) brooke
Comment from Lena Borghi
This is so beautiful. You always express such appreciation for nature in all your work, Brooke. It's inspiring. I know that hymn and I just sang your poem to its melody and, alas, it works!! I love your last line.
Best wishes,
Lena
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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This is so beautiful. You always express such appreciation for nature in all your work, Brooke. It's inspiring. I know that hymn and I just sang your poem to its melody and, alas, it works!! I love your last line.
Best wishes,
Lena
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Lena, thank you so very much for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Hi Brooke, great artwork. This poem allows for me to take that trip down memory lane. Your words with their imagery placed me in the spot where I was picking berries as a youngster.
Thanks for sharing this really good piece of poetry,,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Hi Brooke, great artwork. This poem allows for me to take that trip down memory lane. Your words with their imagery placed me in the spot where I was picking berries as a youngster.
Thanks for sharing this really good piece of poetry,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Jim, thanks so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
What a brilliant idea, to use the meter of a hymn as the template for a poem. They certainly knew how to write a song, those old hymn writers, didn't they? Despite my many years of non attendance at church, I can still remember huge chunks of words from school assembly hymns, and what splendid, rousing words they were. Very few new hymns I have ever heard come near to their magnificence.
Your poem/song has a lovely simplicity to it, which fits beautifully with the theme, the joy to be found in small gifts.
I also like the way you have turned this into a hymn of your own thanks.
Wonderful artwork. Is it really a photo?
Lovely writing, Brooke, and with a flavour all of its own. (I didn't mean that to be a pun...)
Sally
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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What a brilliant idea, to use the meter of a hymn as the template for a poem. They certainly knew how to write a song, those old hymn writers, didn't they? Despite my many years of non attendance at church, I can still remember huge chunks of words from school assembly hymns, and what splendid, rousing words they were. Very few new hymns I have ever heard come near to their magnificence.
Your poem/song has a lovely simplicity to it, which fits beautifully with the theme, the joy to be found in small gifts.
I also like the way you have turned this into a hymn of your own thanks.
Wonderful artwork. Is it really a photo?
Lovely writing, Brooke, and with a flavour all of its own. (I didn't mean that to be a pun...)
Sally
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Sally, yeah, the new hymns all sound like they're trying to be pop hits sung by boy bands. LOL Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
Comment from Matoshka
Your picture so fit your words, just beautiful. It made my mouth water for the taste of a wild berry, thanking God for all his creations. I enjoyed this very much. Blessings
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Your picture so fit your words, just beautiful. It made my mouth water for the taste of a wild berry, thanking God for all his creations. I enjoyed this very much. Blessings
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Matoshka, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome Brooke, now I can hardly wait for spring and summer. Blessings
Comment from Maxine Kendall
What a lovely presentation of a lovely poem, Brooke.
After reading your notes below, I read the poem again, or should I say, sang, and enjoyed it even more.
Well done.
Maxine x
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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What a lovely presentation of a lovely poem, Brooke.
After reading your notes below, I read the poem again, or should I say, sang, and enjoyed it even more.
Well done.
Maxine x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Maxine, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from barkingdog
Nice and bouncy with great 'b' alliterations in the first stanza(berries burst; brook that burbles by)
The second stanza's 'I thank you' repetition is a nice prayerful alliterative addition to perfect rhyme and meter.
Yummy, mouthwatering descriptives in the first stanza, Brooke.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Nice and bouncy with great 'b' alliterations in the first stanza(berries burst; brook that burbles by)
The second stanza's 'I thank you' repetition is a nice prayerful alliterative addition to perfect rhyme and meter.
Yummy, mouthwatering descriptives in the first stanza, Brooke.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Ellen, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke.:) ellen xxx
Comment from Gabriella 2
This is so beautiful and simple, describing the exquisiteness of nature and the truth and wonder that can only come from God's beautiful world.
Thank you!
Gabriella 2
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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This is so beautiful and simple, describing the exquisiteness of nature and the truth and wonder that can only come from God's beautiful world.
Thank you!
Gabriella 2
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Gabriella, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from gramalot8
Brooke, yes, how grateful we should be for our Lord and all he has blessed us with. I, too, love the picture. Your words inspire me to be more grateful each day. Jerri
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Brooke, yes, how grateful we should be for our Lord and all he has blessed us with. I, too, love the picture. Your words inspire me to be more grateful each day. Jerri
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Jerri, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Herb
A nice little poem in your more familiar ans simple reflective style. A nice job and one that made my mouth water.
Another nice piece.
Easy, Peter
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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A nice little poem in your more familiar ans simple reflective style. A nice job and one that made my mouth water.
Another nice piece.
Easy, Peter
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Peter, thanks so much for your thoughtful review. :-) Brooke
