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Hello, Joyce.
This is a huge undertaking. As you may remember I once wrote one of these, and so I know first hand how hard these things are to write. Your subject matter must have presented its own difficulties. This is a truly outstanding work, and you have always been, and remain, one of my heroines. You have followed the rules to the letter, and I am giving you a standing ovation (from my desk) for each perfect sonnet that so smoothly goes from the first to the final resolution in VII. I feel, and hope I'm right, a winner here. I wish you all the best dear friend.
Warmly, Rebecca
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2012 |
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
Thanks, Rebecca, once again for the dazzling stars and wonderful words. Joycexxxx
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This was painful to read. I know too much, perhaps. However, with that being said, you did a brilliant job with this challenge and I hope you win, Joyce.
"In rush of optimism 'gainst all odds
I move toward a rumbling mountain crest
With mobs of Satan's cells in fearsome squads
In preparation to dissolve my zest.
I grasp for deepest strength from drying well
In hope my smiles and laughter show and tell." Superb!
"I've lived to see my children's children rise
And none have had to bear the threat of time.
All senses are now melodies that sing
For cures of certainty from evil's sting." I must stop quoting, dry my tears and just say, 'Power to you, my dear friend' Perfectly wrought with a miraculous message throughout. Bravo Joyce. You did a fabulous job with this.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2012 |
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
Thanks again, Jude, for your honesty, and always uplifting and encouraging words. Hope you are seeing some signs of spring. We are seeing more towards summer and it is March. Creepy. Joycexxxx
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reply by Judian James on 16-Mar-2012
Hi Joyce. Same with us. The weathermen predict each day a bit warmer until we hit the 80's on Weds.! In MAINE in MARCH!! scary stuff (but, there's no such thing as global warming, right?)
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Well that must of been a hell of a task. and one I think you did well in. nice rhythm and some good poetic verse. all in all a deserved five. :)
I thought I would come back and add a bit more as I didn't read the notes last time, and was rushing through. I admire any one who can right a single sonnet, never mind a crown. (rhythm is not something I've done much on, and the few sonnets/triolets I have attempted still have iambic issues.) Your rhythm seems to all march from short to long in the proper fashion. I also thought the rhyme not forced, as is humanly possible in this age of the rhyme-less.
The words, what can I say, just breathtakingly beautiful and so very honest. They sing to me of acceptance yet still fear (so human) of the joy of a life well lived (but not not long enough, so human)
And the last sonnet rounds it up and ends with the rhyming couplet that is more honest still. Still of fear and questions. It makes me wonder why?? What's the point of life?? And in such a question I can only see God.
Now let me just reiterate on that final remark, I'm not religious and never have been. But have had my own demons along the way, mostly drugs ... I think I'm over the worst of it, and have never seen even a hint of God in any of the ups and downs along that long long way.
But through your work I caught a glimpse.
FS won't allow me to change my five to a six, but such a thing seems mediocre now.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
I must say, Herb, this is probably one of the most touching and meaningful reviews I have ever received from my writing. I so appreciate the fact that you came back and read my crown of sonnets in more depth and, for me, the fact your a caught a glimpse of God has reaffirmed that the things we go through in our life, whether under our control or not, there is a purpose sometimes beyond our understanding. You truly felt the emotions I was trying to bring forth in this write, and I appreciate deeply your sharing your personal thoughts with me. I pray you keep your demons at bay, and maybe you will continue to have those glimpses. :) thank you for for touching me with your words. Joycex
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