~Just a Particle of Love~
Dedicated for my FanStory and Facebook Friends.11 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hey Mike! I enjoyed your poem and agree with your final lines. The stunning picture drew me to your poem, and it read so sweet and easy. I'm such a firm believer in finding the positivity in any situation and it thrill me so much to pass it on and see negativity dissolve in the presence of a positive outlook and words.
Happy valentine's every day, Mike.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
Hey Mike! I enjoyed your poem and agree with your final lines. The stunning picture drew me to your poem, and it read so sweet and easy. I'm such a firm believer in finding the positivity in any situation and it thrill me so much to pass it on and see negativity dissolve in the presence of a positive outlook and words.
Happy valentine's every day, Mike.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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It pays to get search engine skills for FanArt review and would recomend to do what I do and create one's own image of the artwork and simply treat the search engine like a phrasial thesuarus. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review, as well the everyday wishes too. :)
It has been a bit difficult for me, as there is much work and a bit of frustration, so I am a bit too burnt out to write as much as I would like. Do plan to catch up. Mike
Comment from Flowerangel71
Wow this was an outstanding poem. Beautifully written. I love the words flow. Such a treat to read and review it. Your skills are amazing. When I grow up I want to be like you. :0)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
Wow this was an outstanding poem. Beautifully written. I love the words flow. Such a treat to read and review it. Your skills are amazing. When I grow up I want to be like you. :0)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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I think this is the first poem that scared me! I love the compliments and in regards to the skills, I know my capabilites and still try to figure out where they are coming from. To be honest, I think the trick to life and writing endeavors as well is to work towards maturing, but never allow one's self to, "Grow up." I thank you for this amazing and flattering review, the compliments as well the generous rating. Mike
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You are very welcome :o)
Comment from adewpearl
good consonance of L sounds in lonely dullard/love
good consonance of F sounds in finding/ halfway/faintest
strong rhymes
good imagery and alliteration in scorpion-like stings
A thoughtful look at love as it exists every day of the year Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
good consonance of L sounds in lonely dullard/love
good consonance of F sounds in finding/ halfway/faintest
strong rhymes
good imagery and alliteration in scorpion-like stings
A thoughtful look at love as it exists every day of the year Brooke :-)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Wow! This is an unexpected review from you and creates an air of, "Oh gosh, oh gee." modesty from me. I am not really versed with the mechanics of poetry, and while I would love to put in far more study in that area, I have to work too hard to get the bills paid. I simply let the poem work itself out until I get my ideas communicated and I think it sounds good. I was dissapointed with myself as I wanted to post this for Valentine's day, but that day was ruined between me crashing and burning and losing four hours of overtime at work, then midnight's oil was snuffed out with an anti-virus program who's effects I had to exorcise from my computer the following day. Then it stuck me the posting help emphasize the poem's theme.
To me this poem was like tinkering with a rubik's cube, but with ink blots instead of colors. Love for me is exactly like the love that reside's within me and very elemental. It saddens me very greatly when people just don't get that which I consider the basics. Baltimore streets can be very bleak at times, yet I have to laud what I love.
I thank you very much for this review and the compliments as I know you are a very strident reviewer and one like this for me is rare. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
This is an ambitious poem and one I enjoyed. Also you author's notes are splendid. Have you posted this on facebook, if not I think you should. So nice of you to write this to a gaggle of woman! The contents of this piece and the gentle flow makes this poem a joy to read.....chey
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Hi Mike,
This is an ambitious poem and one I enjoyed. Also you author's notes are splendid. Have you posted this on facebook, if not I think you should. So nice of you to write this to a gaggle of woman! The contents of this piece and the gentle flow makes this poem a joy to read.....chey
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I did put up the link, but didn't recieve comment as yet. I wanted a poem, that was a Valentine's day gift, yet proved the importance that everyone has to each other. I thank you so much for your compliments and this review. Mike
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You are welcome!
Comment from magicpotwhat
Love this brilliant and so spiritual. Your words and the way you have expressed them is brilliant.The picture is beautiful.I believe love conquers all and to spread love peace and joy to the world will bring peace love and light. Thank you so much really enjoyable would recommend this love and blessings to you
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Love this brilliant and so spiritual. Your words and the way you have expressed them is brilliant.The picture is beautiful.I believe love conquers all and to spread love peace and joy to the world will bring peace love and light. Thank you so much really enjoyable would recommend this love and blessings to you
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Wow! I sort of seperate notions of love and peace, but if one believes in love, then they have an understanding of what peace is all about or should be. I thank you for this review and love the recomendation, which is an honor all to itself. Mike
Comment from strandloper
Well chosen title, very suitable to the subject of the poem. Good images , lovely desrcriptives.Well matched, beautiful artwork. Great use of metaphors i.e desert of loving intentions; love presented as a yearly gift. Great poem, deep thoughts, very philosophical, makes one think. As far as flow and rhythm is concerned, the flow was smooth and natural and the breaks well done. Absolutely loved the last stanza, you did well, good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Well chosen title, very suitable to the subject of the poem. Good images , lovely desrcriptives.Well matched, beautiful artwork. Great use of metaphors i.e desert of loving intentions; love presented as a yearly gift. Great poem, deep thoughts, very philosophical, makes one think. As far as flow and rhythm is concerned, the flow was smooth and natural and the breaks well done. Absolutely loved the last stanza, you did well, good luck!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I think it was meant to be written as it came easier then laying out the text and formating it with the editor. I see so many restrictions and limits that people place on the concept of love that I felt obliged to illustrate not only is it limitless, it has so many shades to accomindate all. I thank your very much for the compliments, comments and this review. Mike
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
Good job. I would like to hear more from you. Nicely done. Good luck with your days
A lot of efforts and emotions inserted. Good vocabulary and i adore the way you write.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Good job. I would like to hear more from you. Nicely done. Good luck with your days
A lot of efforts and emotions inserted. Good vocabulary and i adore the way you write.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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With my projects and working as hard as I do to pay the bills, I am not doing as much poetry as I would like. Feel free to thumb through my portfolio or become a fan. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from LilHippie
Wow! You are saying so very much here. And your piece keeps surprising the reader also. You speak of love, and society's "rules" or "biases" about relationships. (which are no one's business but the two in love). You speak of unrequited love, which sets a sad tone, but then the piece always shifts, giving yet another feeling or thought. This is very well written and really says an awful lot, it is not, in my opinion, an average Valentine's poem, or average love poem, but has much more under it's surface. Thank you so much for allowing my comments.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Wow! You are saying so very much here. And your piece keeps surprising the reader also. You speak of love, and society's "rules" or "biases" about relationships. (which are no one's business but the two in love). You speak of unrequited love, which sets a sad tone, but then the piece always shifts, giving yet another feeling or thought. This is very well written and really says an awful lot, it is not, in my opinion, an average Valentine's poem, or average love poem, but has much more under it's surface. Thank you so much for allowing my comments.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Well, I hate the word, "unrequited," as I had received the ultimate definition though experience. Most people's use of the term is a mere irritation, but one time, I let a woman know that I wanted her in my life and I was there for her should she want me. The next day, she was struck and killed by a drunk driver and I will never know if my desires and words had any meaning or desire from her part. That's the bad, but the good is in it creating the desire to show to people, whether I remain alone or not, there is a much better existance out there. I love this review and thank you for it and the flattering compliments. Mike
In a sense, this poem has humbled me as I feel it wanted to write itself.
Comment from Jean Lutz
I feel the same about my friends and fans here on this site. They are my family and I love them for both their perfections and non-perfections. True love poured out in words.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
I feel the same about my friends and fans here on this site. They are my family and I love them for both their perfections and non-perfections. True love poured out in words.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Flaws as well. LOL What I love the most is despite misunderstood restrictions, and differences in experiences and climes; we support and love each other. Most of the poetic society is not like this, though it should be. I thank you very much for reviewing and identifying with my work. Mike
Comment from rightforyou
Sweet
I loved this poem and the words that you have included making this a wonderful poem to read and review..I would also recommend this poem for others to read and review as well ...Wonderful job and a pleasure to read...Ron
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
Sweet
I loved this poem and the words that you have included making this a wonderful poem to read and review..I would also recommend this poem for others to read and review as well ...Wonderful job and a pleasure to read...Ron
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Not to mention the recomendation. Mike