Snake's Pit
A dark poem in Pantoum Form.26 total reviews
Comment from rchitwood
I can't think of no better way to describe the seven deadly sins. Snakes are often betrayed as the host of sinners. Your poem is creative with good description of the evilness of sins. Your photo goes well with your poem. Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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I can't think of no better way to describe the seven deadly sins. Snakes are often betrayed as the host of sinners. Your poem is creative with good description of the evilness of sins. Your photo goes well with your poem. Blessings Rita
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for this very uplifting review to my work.
Comment from cthomsen
I love this poem. The structure is so interesting and the language is captivating. I especially like the phrase '...dim collectors of mundane gains." This is well done and fun to read over and over.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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I love this poem. The structure is so interesting and the language is captivating. I especially like the phrase '...dim collectors of mundane gains." This is well done and fun to read over and over.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for this very kind and supportive review.
Comment from Gungalo
Your whacked idea is pretty good. Don't ever apologize for anything you write for it is yours and yours alone. No one can be offended by it for they don't have to read it. So there! It is one helluva right/write.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Your whacked idea is pretty good. Don't ever apologize for anything you write for it is yours and yours alone. No one can be offended by it for they don't have to read it. So there! It is one helluva right/write.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thank you dear friend. I will remember your kind and very supportive review.
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Amazing!!
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This is a very good poem, and I loved the wording you used to make it so effective. You did a wonderful job of writing
this and it was an enjoyable read. I see why it sports the recognized ribbon at the bottom, and will probably also have an all time best ribbon as well.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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This is a very good poem, and I loved the wording you used to make it so effective. You did a wonderful job of writing
this and it was an enjoyable read. I see why it sports the recognized ribbon at the bottom, and will probably also have an all time best ribbon as well.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thank you Linda for this very kind and supportive review. It's so true what you say! This means a lot to me.
Comment from Herb
Cool. Can't see why any one would be offended. It is quite dark but in a stylish way. That my friend is good poetry and I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Cool. Can't see why any one would be offended. It is quite dark but in a stylish way. That my friend is good poetry and I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your very supportive review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi amada,
I am a fan of dark poetry and for some strange reason it is easy for me to write. You have done an excellent job of using expressive words and the rhyme is effective. I like the darkness of this piece as it speaks to me. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Hi amada,
I am a fan of dark poetry and for some strange reason it is easy for me to write. You have done an excellent job of using expressive words and the rhyme is effective. I like the darkness of this piece as it speaks to me. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thanks yes for your generous comments on my work.
Comment from manjuneelam
A wonderful description of most harmful enemies of humankind. When a person meets this evil his or her progress stops. Well written poem, in fact a meaningful one.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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A wonderful description of most harmful enemies of humankind. When a person meets this evil his or her progress stops. Well written poem, in fact a meaningful one.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Thank you manjuneelam!
Comment from Doc Holiday
I like your poem ssss... deranged mind or not! After reading your author notes, your poem becomes more compelling with the seven snakes representing the seven deadly sins, Ohhhh! very cool..
Excellent poem with tight rhyme and smooth rhythm present.
Dark message provides the reader with a bit of heightened anticipation!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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I like your poem ssss... deranged mind or not! After reading your author notes, your poem becomes more compelling with the seven snakes representing the seven deadly sins, Ohhhh! very cool..
Excellent poem with tight rhyme and smooth rhythm present.
Dark message provides the reader with a bit of heightened anticipation!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you Doc for your very inspiring review to my work and for the ssss that I almost deleted at the last minute. Too gross, I thought.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Amada, this is definitely one of your better poems. I wish I had a sixer for this one. This poem incorporates the seven deadly sins quite well. I was drawn to this poem from the first line. Incredible!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Amada, this is definitely one of your better poems. I wish I had a sixer for this one. This poem incorporates the seven deadly sins quite well. I was drawn to this poem from the first line. Incredible!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Oh wow! Thank you for this so inspiring review. This makes my day for sure, considering that rhyming is difficult for me. Thank you so much!!!
Comment from QuicknDirty
I fuckin love this! (oops... Language) speak your mind absolutely, it's yours to do with as you please. It's not easy speaking the contrary, but don't let that squelch the creative flow, nice work :) I especially like how you started the next verse with the second line of the previous.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I fuckin love this! (oops... Language) speak your mind absolutely, it's yours to do with as you please. It's not easy speaking the contrary, but don't let that squelch the creative flow, nice work :) I especially like how you started the next verse with the second line of the previous.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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WOW! thank you so much for reading this work and think that it deserves all this stars. It means so much to me.
