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A ROUGH BEGINNING

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Irish immigrants seeking a new life in the USA.

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Comment from stauros777
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You write very well about this period. Your dialect is very authentic and the interplay between the characters seems very real. I really liked the line where the little girl asked if she would ever be as strong and old as her aunt and grandma. Nice work.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Stauros. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I think you are doing a good job with the Irish brogue. I found your chapter to be very realistic. You are doing a great job. I think this is your best novel to date.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from despiser
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Good story Charlie. Dialog is creative, believable (at least for the era), and easy to follow.
I think five-year old should have a hyphen like this.
Also, Not sure what the ' is for in:
"Yeh know what I be sayin'?"

-D

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, D. Charlie
Comment from James McCorkle
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Yes Sir. That is the old fashioned way of bringing up a child, and teaching all the valuable lessons at the same time. How to mind your manners. How to be polite, and how to grow up into a mature and sensible adult. Given love and carefull attention throughout the youngest most appreciative days where lessons are learned and remembered. Parents nowadays leave the television and other electronic gizmo's to do the teaching about life as seen nowadays, and it fails miserably. James McCorkle.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review, comments and stars, James. Charlie
reply by James McCorkle on 29-Jan-2012
    O.K. Charlie. You did the job correctly. james
Comment from Gungalo
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Wow Charlie, this is a lesson in proper behavior!!Though Caitlyn be small she has already learned the basics. That's something that our mothers of today have trouble with. Manners.

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Gungalo. Charlie
reply by Gungalo on 29-Jan-2012
    Smiles.