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A ROUGH BEGINNING

Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter Five - Part One"
Irish immigrants seeking a new life in the USA.

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Comment from Cumbrianlass
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Caitlin's a sweetie! You're creating some lovely characters. The dialogue and interaction is wonderful, Charlie.

In Ireland, though, little kids say 'mammy' not mum. Especially back then. They do in Wales and northern England too. I did!

"Help! It be wantin' t' be eatin' me alive()!"

Av

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Avril. I will check it out, but I have one problem. "Mammy is a term of endurment with the blacks." Charlie
Comment from rheabug
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I really can't say enough good things about your ongoing book. When are you going to publish or have you already? Thank you so much for sharing, Linda

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review, comments and stars Linda. I am still writing the book. Charlie
Comment from pickthorn
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I've been away for awhile, Charlie, I've missed your last few chapters. Tell me, is Caitlin Anna Wiley and Jo Ann Wiley the same person? Not much killin' going on in this chapter but you have that Irish brogue down pat. Great story.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Pick. Yes, Caitlin will assumme the name Jo Ann Wiley when she becomes an orphan. Charlie
Comment from humpwhistle
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Charlies, this is a nice little domestic slice of life in the Irish slums of NYC. Your dialogue is
believable, and appears to be authentic.
You share many details of child rearing in the
19th century. I won't you ask if you were there.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Lee. Research. Charlie
Comment from peggles
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This was another engaging and interesting chapter to your fine story
I know that it is heading towards it's close to end
I shall be sorry to see this but I am sure you will give us some more pleasurable reading before then
Looking forward to the next chapter

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Peggles. Charlie
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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A most enjoyable chapter..
very descriptive and true
to life - and I love
the picture..

Well penned, Charlie.

Margaret

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Margaret. Charlie
Comment from keimosobie
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Sorry bieng a yank this irish brog thing is not my specialty. I did enjoy your chapter. I like the way you correct the little girls manners frequently. You don't see that much any more. I didnt see any errors. Thanks for the write.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Keimosobie. Charlie
Comment from dhee khaye
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I think this is the first time that i meet your story, although I have not read your first chapter, this one gave me some clue on what message your story want to emphasize, I love the smooth flow of some scenes, the picture that you put in heart struct and caught my heart and eyes. Thank you for sharing.

dhee

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Dhee. Charlie
Comment from irishauthorme
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This is a great picture of a typical morning for your characters, the porridge, Caitlin woofing her breakfast dwon and being in such a hurry that she dropped her glass and broke it. It is an Irish thing to pick up the kids and turn them upside down or swing them around, I remember.
Great dialogue, emotional and right to the point.
Good chapter, irish

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Irish. Charlie
Comment from MumEsGirl
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Begorrah Charlie shure you yeh be doing mighty work on this one.

Love the image, sort of brings the story to life a bit more.

I have one comment though. This is not a correction though. Caitlin is a relatively new name. It is actually a mis pronounciation of the gaelic for Kathleen. Caithlin. It is just one of my picky points lol

kate

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your review and comments, Kate. I found it under gaelic girl's namer.
reply by MumEsGirl on 30-Jan-2012
    Fascinating Charlie maybe I am wrong,must take a look.
reply by MumEsGirl on 30-Jan-2012
    As I say Charlie it is just my gripe. lol
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    I'm going to double check it tonight.