The End is Near
A Vietnam War story from the other side.40 total reviews
Comment from alexisleech
The sad thing, in any war, is that there are really no enemies except the feelings between the governments running the countries involved. That is why it is so sad when you hear about young men and women who end up being suicide bombers because they have been indoctrinated from an early age. Your story has been written exceptionally well, and was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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The sad thing, in any war, is that there are really no enemies except the feelings between the governments running the countries involved. That is why it is so sad when you hear about young men and women who end up being suicide bombers because they have been indoctrinated from an early age. Your story has been written exceptionally well, and was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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Thank you -- first for reading and then for your kind comments. Regards, Bill
Comment from bob cullen
What a good read this is.
It provides detail that appears most knowledgable.
Your two characters, Tran and Luc come across as real and your dialogue is top class
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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What a good read this is.
It provides detail that appears most knowledgable.
Your two characters, Tran and Luc come across as real and your dialogue is top class
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Thank's Bob - I appreciate you reading and for your kind comments. Regards, Bill
Comment from mumsyone
An interesting look at "the other side" of the war. It's hard to understand why war has to go on in the first place. Your story is well written and well edited.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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An interesting look at "the other side" of the war. It's hard to understand why war has to go on in the first place. Your story is well written and well edited.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you very much for reading and your comments. Certainly can't argue with your question of why war. Regards, Bill
Comment from Crystal Carey
Very nice writing. There is always hope even in war. The fact that a soldier let someone who was obviously not a threat get away was no big surprise to me. It happens all the time!!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Very nice writing. There is always hope even in war. The fact that a soldier let someone who was obviously not a threat get away was no big surprise to me. It happens all the time!!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thanks Crystal! If you get a minute, please read the associatec post called Fung-one. Still some points on it and it will explain a bit more. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from HPicasso
This was a stunning story.. It was well written and expressed, very interesing you kept my full attention from beginning to end. Very good dialogue and characters very believable and I would recommend this to others friends. It is nice to know how the other side felt during this horrible war.
Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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This was a stunning story.. It was well written and expressed, very interesing you kept my full attention from beginning to end. Very good dialogue and characters very believable and I would recommend this to others friends. It is nice to know how the other side felt during this horrible war.
Well done!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you very much. If you could only look across the internet, you would see that your kind words brought a smile to my face. Regards, Bill
Comment from Larrypic11
Nicely written piece, and if you are talking about the last phases of the "action", it sounds quite plausible. I am always amazed at stories of who lives and who dies in situations where all should be dead. Good job. Be well. Larry
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Nicely written piece, and if you are talking about the last phases of the "action", it sounds quite plausible. I am always amazed at stories of who lives and who dies in situations where all should be dead. Good job. Be well. Larry
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you Larry - I hope you have time to read the other post called Fung-one. Still has some points on it. It will make this story come more alive. Thanks and regards, Billl
Comment from missy98writer
Bill,
this is a magnificent war story from the view point of VK Soldier. Your characterization is spot on. Your descriptive writing is excellent in your story. I was riveted all the way through. You show and don't tell. Splendid imagery because the story came to live in my head as I read. You realistically portrays the hells of war in your story. In your story you used many good lines; "That way, they could move out of the tunnels and relieve themselves in the jungle. While that had dangers of its own, it was infinitely better than spending time at the indoor latrine." It's funny all soldiers, regardless of the army are in a world of shit, pardon my French. How funny Fung-one aka Eddie Mable waved at Tran. I love your story because you've effect established a setting, conflict, and a resolution. I'd recommend your war story about nasty war duties to reviewers as a must read for the shit on latrines, pun intended. Thanks for sharing your terrific story and have a wonderful day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Bill,
this is a magnificent war story from the view point of VK Soldier. Your characterization is spot on. Your descriptive writing is excellent in your story. I was riveted all the way through. You show and don't tell. Splendid imagery because the story came to live in my head as I read. You realistically portrays the hells of war in your story. In your story you used many good lines; "That way, they could move out of the tunnels and relieve themselves in the jungle. While that had dangers of its own, it was infinitely better than spending time at the indoor latrine." It's funny all soldiers, regardless of the army are in a world of shit, pardon my French. How funny Fung-one aka Eddie Mable waved at Tran. I love your story because you've effect established a setting, conflict, and a resolution. I'd recommend your war story about nasty war duties to reviewers as a must read for the shit on latrines, pun intended. Thanks for sharing your terrific story and have a wonderful day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thanks Melissa - especially for reading both stories. I would have loved to write as one post, but most people on FS will only stay with you for about 2000 words or less. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment from Newsome
Excellent work and an easy read. You kept me interested throughout the entire story. I especially liked the way the story ended. Again, great work!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Excellent work and an easy read. You kept me interested throughout the entire story. I especially liked the way the story ended. Again, great work!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you very much! First for reading and then for your kind comments. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from RazberryBullet
LOL!!! "I suppose you were a pretty good pig farmer, but at the end of the day, you were still a pig farmer."
I wasn't expecting the ending here, with the American waving them on. This Eddie Mabe, is it similar to the Japanese edemame?
Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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LOL!!! "I suppose you were a pretty good pig farmer, but at the end of the day, you were still a pig farmer."
I wasn't expecting the ending here, with the American waving them on. This Eddie Mabe, is it similar to the Japanese edemame?
Well done!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi RB - thanks for reading. There is another post with points still on it called, Fung-one. It will explain my friend Eddie. Glad we're communicating again. Regards, Bill
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bill,
This is a finely crafted story and a perfect 'brother' piece to your first story. I was totally engaged in it from the beginning to the very end. Your imagery is spectacular and put me right behind Tran and Lac. The American soldier could have easily killed them but chose to let them go, a perfect uplifting end. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi Bill,
This is a finely crafted story and a perfect 'brother' piece to your first story. I was totally engaged in it from the beginning to the very end. Your imagery is spectacular and put me right behind Tran and Lac. The American soldier could have easily killed them but chose to let them go, a perfect uplifting end. Well done, chey
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thank you very much Chey! I'm always glad when you stop by. Warm regards, Bill
