White Lightning
Fantasy stallion/ spirit of thunder and lightning20 total reviews
Comment from G.B. Smith
Sweetheart, this is yet just another feather in your bonnet as to the extent of your superb abilities. It would not let me award a sixth star, but know that I gave you one from my heart. This is magnificent Nancy
Love you always
Bear
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Sweetheart, this is yet just another feather in your bonnet as to the extent of your superb abilities. It would not let me award a sixth star, but know that I gave you one from my heart. This is magnificent Nancy
Love you always
Bear
Comment Written 02-Oct-2011
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of abcb rhyming
Strong verb choices like heed, pulsate, escape, exude...contribute to the power of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like heavy humidity and vivid descriptive detail
Brooke :-)
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Excellent use of abcb rhyming
Strong verb choices like heed, pulsate, escape, exude...contribute to the power of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like heavy humidity and vivid descriptive detail
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
Comment from Mastery
Hi there, Helvi. Sorry I have been away for a bit. I absolutely love this poem rooted in fantasy. I particularly liked this stanza:
"White Lightning's fire shards cut to the bone
Cacophony rattles his sky
Maelstroms of static are hard to squelch out
When this steed is out on the fly"
Bravo! Bob
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Hi there, Helvi. Sorry I have been away for a bit. I absolutely love this poem rooted in fantasy. I particularly liked this stanza:
"White Lightning's fire shards cut to the bone
Cacophony rattles his sky
Maelstroms of static are hard to squelch out
When this steed is out on the fly"
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from honeytree
The art work is so right for these great words.
Lighting and thunder does scare me.
The thunder was the worst growing up
I was told by my aunt that
"God is moving His Furniture around."
These words I remember when the thunder roared its sound.
Honey tree
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The art work is so right for these great words.
Lighting and thunder does scare me.
The thunder was the worst growing up
I was told by my aunt that
"God is moving His Furniture around."
These words I remember when the thunder roared its sound.
Honey tree
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from oNray
Enjoyable, well said, nice flow smooth deliverance with kind of a tune melody bouncing so nicely along. I feel you have done a very nice job.
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Enjoyable, well said, nice flow smooth deliverance with kind of a tune melody bouncing so nicely along. I feel you have done a very nice job.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from bob cullen
This is brilliant. I love the imagery of the storm as a wild stallion, it's so appropriate to the thunderstoms we experience here in Australia.
Your rythym and rhyme were faultless as was the balance. I like to read poems out loud and this one flowed like a summer stream, smooth and constant.
Great work
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This is brilliant. I love the imagery of the storm as a wild stallion, it's so appropriate to the thunderstoms we experience here in Australia.
Your rythym and rhyme were faultless as was the balance. I like to read poems out loud and this one flowed like a summer stream, smooth and constant.
Great work
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought this was passionate . very well written piece, not hard to read. a wonderful take on life. short and with a good message. Enjoyable There were no errors. Alexander QQ...
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I thought this was passionate . very well written piece, not hard to read. a wonderful take on life. short and with a good message. Enjoyable There were no errors. Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
A very well done and ultra descriptive work.Very good structure, meter and rhyme. The magic of the story you have woven is beautiful.I could picture it all. Very well written.
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A very well done and ultra descriptive work.Very good structure, meter and rhyme. The magic of the story you have woven is beautiful.I could picture it all. Very well written.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and interesting. I enjoyed reading it and it flows and rhymes well with a great artwork selection.
Angel123
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Your poem is well written and interesting. I enjoyed reading it and it flows and rhymes well with a great artwork selection.
Angel123
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
Comment from sunnilicious
beautiful picture and lovely poem. no coffee brewing right now but all that caffeine could energize heaven. you have some nice subtle rhymes. Enjoyable read. Good.
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beautiful picture and lovely poem. no coffee brewing right now but all that caffeine could energize heaven. you have some nice subtle rhymes. Enjoyable read. Good.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
