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Dorothy Hamil should thank you up and down for this one. You've done her a mighty justice. So close you could feel the ice chips eh?

Comment Written 02-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011

Pretty awesome huh? Thanks for reviewing!!! Debbie

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My pleasure.

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I remember when I was little, I loved the Ice Capes. We went to see it every year. There is something so graceful about "dancers on ice." Your story has the "ring" of truth to it. I can picture this little girl, her heart pounding with anticipation as she's about to take to the ice. You follow through with good images of her performance, and end it with her feeling of satisfaction once she is done. All in all an enjoyable read. deb

Comment Written 02-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed!!! Debbie

reply by deb552 on 04-Oct-2011

Just wanted you to know I received all your replies, and I thank you. The one about surgery, makes sense, though I'm hoping it won't take quite that long. I spoke w/my doc. today and instead of having to wait 2 weeks for a bath, he's letting start taking them after 1wk. which is tomorrow...I love a hot bath, so YEAH for that! I'm jealous of your autumn. Today was my 1st day out though, and the sun came thru for me. I'm hoping that in it self, was some kind of a sign. 1st day w/out rain in a week! I know you've posted more writing, and will catch up at some point. You busy poet you! LOL! Hugs, deb

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Debbie, as I have often watched the Winter Olympics and other televised events centered around figure skating, I can appreciate your story. It has excellent and captivating detail of the performance. Excellent action words kept this story moving. Blessings, hector

Comment Written 01-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

Thank you. I had several people say it should be divided into paragraphs, which I just did. I wrote this because I had written one about a year ago, and wanted to see the growth that has occurred and has it ever!!! Thank you so much!!! Debbie

reply by Bellringer on 02-Oct-2011

You're welcome, Debbie. Blessings always, Hector

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I would like to see this divided into about three paragraphs.
I have watched figure skating on television since I was a little girl and have also been to several wonderful shows in person. It is SO beautiful.
You describe the skater's performance and the mood of the competition well. Brooke :-)

Comment Written 01-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

Brooke, you are not the only one to say that so I did it. If you get a chance would you peek and see if you think I divided in the correct places. Thank you so much. I always anxiously await your reviews!!! Debbie

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I enjoy figure skating myself. My men tease me about it, but I enjoy watching it. I enjoyed reading your short story, I could see the image in my mind as I read.

Comment Written 01-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I actually enjoyed writing it too, as I could see it in my mind!!! Debbie

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How luck to have seen Dorothy Hamil. This short piece is a lovely capture of that special moment in time. You have shown the movements and given us the feel for the performers hopes,joy in the perfect presentation and anticipation of scores.
Nicely told, Debbie. I could see the little skater pumping, pushing and sit spinning, the edges of her blades shaving the ice.

Comment Written 01-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

My son and I were roller skaters for 10+ years. He did a bit of ice skating too, but not me (oh. I had two legs then! I miss skating and it seems like it isn't televised often right now. I can't wait for thr winter Olympics when I lock my house, shut of the pnoe and have 10 days of pure enjoyment!!! Thank you! Debbie

reply by barkingdog on 01-Oct-2011

It is a dream to watch. The pairs are usually so beautiful. I love the lifts. :)

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This is such a sweet short story. Your descriptions are wonderful, I could picture both the skater and the performance with no problem. Lovely read, well done :)

Comment Written 30-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

Thank you so much. Glad you enloyed!!! DEbbie

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I love ice skating also. They always make it look so easy to do. I tried it once and skated on my ankles the majority of the time. Great job.

Comment Written 30-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

I roller skated and played roller hocke4y. Somehow, $ wheels seenmed safer than one blade. I think afetre roller skating several years, ice would have come more naturally. but O was happy on wheels!! DEbbie

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this is very well written, debbie, a beautiful job writing this story about figure skating, i love watching that and gymnastics. the only sentence i had trouble with was
:Slowing, the skater slows. the slows are too close together but my mind isn't working right now with any suggestions.

Comment Written 30-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

Thank you, I fixed that right away. Thank s for your suggesto and review!!! DEbbie

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I think thee is a lot more you could do with this , it was just about an ice skater and all she did on the ice , this made it a little dull I think

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Comment Written 30-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011

Yes, I am sure I could have down more, but this day I wanted to see how close I could get to explaining the performance. I could certainly expand on it latr. Right now, i was interested to see how this part would turn out. Thanks!Debbie

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