The dragon Mareng
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Comment from Joan E.
A flying family--what fun! Burning their attackers--what power! And making a variety of flames with dipthongs--how novel! But creating "fireflies"--now, that's imaginative! -Joan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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A flying family--what fun! Burning their attackers--what power! And making a variety of flames with dipthongs--how novel! But creating "fireflies"--now, that's imaginative! -Joan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely weekend, Ine.
Comment from lynnkah
this is way too cool! I love how you lead this into him coming up with the word 'dragonflies" really awsome.
Love the humor in it.
going to read the next few captures
great work
lynnkah
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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this is way too cool! I love how you lead this into him coming up with the word 'dragonflies" really awsome.
Love the humor in it.
going to read the next few captures
great work
lynnkah
Comment Written 02-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings, Ine.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Robina,
I love this story! Your vivid imagination has written excellent imagery and I was able to watch Mareng with my mind's eye. I am so glad he found some friends to play with and hope he doesn't kill too many with his colorful fire. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Hi Robina,
I love this story! Your vivid imagination has written excellent imagery and I was able to watch Mareng with my mind's eye. I am so glad he found some friends to play with and hope he doesn't kill too many with his colorful fire. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a nice Sunday, Ine
Comment from Mariea
Good morning Robina. What a story, kept me fascinated all the way. Well put together and developed without any clutter. Characters and dialogue believeable. Dragonflys huh.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Good morning Robina. What a story, kept me fascinated all the way. Well put together and developed without any clutter. Characters and dialogue believeable. Dragonflys huh.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely weekend, Ine
Comment from Matoshka
What a wonderful story of the dragon and the fly. I loved how it felt so real, his Mum and Dad showing him how to do things, and finally finding the flies. What a story, I loved how the dragonflies came into being. I just loved this very much. Blessings
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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What a wonderful story of the dragon and the fly. I loved how it felt so real, his Mum and Dad showing him how to do things, and finally finding the flies. What a story, I loved how the dragonflies came into being. I just loved this very much. Blessings
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Hve a lovely weekend, Ine
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You are so welcome, it was a fun read. Blessings
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Going to try and make it into a book. Blessings and have a nice weekend.
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You are so welcome, I thought it was wonderful. Blessings
Comment from writerwish
This is a great story about dragons. I like how the parents taught him to make fire. When he "played" with flies, he enjoyed it. But it says some got burnt. It doesn't how the flies felt. Maybe you could add that they liked the warmth and got to know just how far to come without being burnt and only turned different colors and the flames shooting quickly made them stretch longer. So they enjoyed this game too and sent their friends to play. --Dragonflies.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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This is a great story about dragons. I like how the parents taught him to make fire. When he "played" with flies, he enjoyed it. But it says some got burnt. It doesn't how the flies felt. Maybe you could add that they liked the warmth and got to know just how far to come without being burnt and only turned different colors and the flames shooting quickly made them stretch longer. So they enjoyed this game too and sent their friends to play. --Dragonflies.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warm regards, Ine
Comment from Cassie Needham
Super cute essay about how dragon flies came about. We live near some woods, and sometimes in the evening we see a ton of dragon flies flying and sparkling around. This is well written and I like the UK and Scottish english, makes it sound like a legend that was told long ago.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Super cute essay about how dragon flies came about. We live near some woods, and sometimes in the evening we see a ton of dragon flies flying and sparkling around. This is well written and I like the UK and Scottish english, makes it sound like a legend that was told long ago.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warm regards, Ine
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Your welcome!
Comment from DALLAS01
This was an easy to read, and follow, nice little fantasy that I am sure children would enjoy. It had a history of family interaction, the curiosity of a child, his resolution to entertain himself, and a surprise at the end.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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This was an easy to read, and follow, nice little fantasy that I am sure children would enjoy. It had a history of family interaction, the curiosity of a child, his resolution to entertain himself, and a surprise at the end.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review Pix. Warm regards, Ine
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you're welcome.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your story very much robina. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. So that's why dragonflies are so pretty..lol.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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I enjoyed reading your story very much robina. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. So that's why dragonflies are so pretty..lol.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review Pix. Warm regards, Ine
Comment from Cooper Watt
Fun story, Ine. Though, I'm not sure how burning flies turn into dragonflies...? I get the correlation between Mareng being a dragon and playing for flies, but there's nothing similar in reality....
As a story, I really enjoyed its simplicity. It matched well with Mareng naive character. Very good, my friend.
Have a super good day,
Coop.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Fun story, Ine. Though, I'm not sure how burning flies turn into dragonflies...? I get the correlation between Mareng being a dragon and playing for flies, but there's nothing similar in reality....
As a story, I really enjoyed its simplicity. It matched well with Mareng naive character. Very good, my friend.
Have a super good day,
Coop.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review Pix. Warm regards, Ine
