Tecumseh's War
Indiana lore and history25 total reviews
Comment from Carrie Smith
Susan, this is a riveting story of the ways and plight of the American Indian. I thought especially effective beginning it with Tecumseh speaking. Indians believed in coexistence with Mother Earth and your descriptions of nature added much interest. I believe there would be little difference had he lived. We have much to answer for ... the white man annihilated an entire people. Enjoyed this, Suse. Hugs, Susan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Susan, this is a riveting story of the ways and plight of the American Indian. I thought especially effective beginning it with Tecumseh speaking. Indians believed in coexistence with Mother Earth and your descriptions of nature added much interest. I believe there would be little difference had he lived. We have much to answer for ... the white man annihilated an entire people. Enjoyed this, Suse. Hugs, Susan
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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HI Susan, thank you so much! I am thrilled that you liked this one! And honored with this high rating too. Wow! Please get your story on? I will send something PM soon. LOVE, susan
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You are most welcome, Suse. I do have my story on,lol!! xoSusan
Comment from Daylok
Native American as always interested me and this is a nice change to history and I am sure is was fun as well!! Good luck in the contest!! ~Daylok
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Native American as always interested me and this is a nice change to history and I am sure is was fun as well!! Good luck in the contest!! ~Daylok
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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HI Day! Thank you so much! I was beat out, but it's okay. ") Many enjoyed this and I really appreciate it. I am always honored to have your opinions! ")) Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is beautifully written. I love this sentence and find it so true
If you see no reason to give thanks, the fault lies in yourself.
I wish I had a six for this. It looks like a contest winner to me!!! Hugs, Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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This is beautifully written. I love this sentence and find it so true
If you see no reason to give thanks, the fault lies in yourself.
I wish I had a six for this. It looks like a contest winner to me!!! Hugs, Debbie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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HI Deb! Thank you! It's the thought that counts and I appreciate it so much. I worked so hard on this...or tried to. Beat out tho...just so you like it, that is more important! ")) LOVE YOU ...susan
Comment from Bellringer
Susan, Well written story that contains realistic dialogue and narrative. Your story contains acts of heroism in the face of possible extinction. Tecumseh's closing words of wisdom were exceptional. Blessings, Hector
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Susan, Well written story that contains realistic dialogue and narrative. Your story contains acts of heroism in the face of possible extinction. Tecumseh's closing words of wisdom were exceptional. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
Comment from peggles
Your story paints a picture
You have managed shown the setting extremely well
also given a conclusion to your story
I think you have meet the rules for the native american fiction prompt This was a good read
I learned a lot of history
Well done
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Your story paints a picture
You have managed shown the setting extremely well
also given a conclusion to your story
I think you have meet the rules for the native american fiction prompt This was a good read
I learned a lot of history
Well done
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
Comment from sasil
Word count: 886 when I copy/pasted to my word software (no, I didn't keep it, silly).
I liked the creative approach you took in turning history on its head--would have liked a bit more of those details (what life "Might" have been like, etc. Nice work here, Suze. Great illustration chosen too. Best of luck in the contest.
S.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Word count: 886 when I copy/pasted to my word software (no, I didn't keep it, silly).
I liked the creative approach you took in turning history on its head--would have liked a bit more of those details (what life "Might" have been like, etc. Nice work here, Suze. Great illustration chosen too. Best of luck in the contest.
S.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Hi Sasil! Thank you! I haven't learned my pc yet. I tried counting manually, but couldn't do it. HUG. Thanks again!~I'm glad you enjoyed this. love, susan
Comment from Larrypic11
I am enamored with Native stories and enjoyed this one as well. Did Tecumseh really use the word "religion" though? I would doubt this concept or word would be part of his lexicon. In any case I enjoyed the work. Larry
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I am enamored with Native stories and enjoyed this one as well. Did Tecumseh really use the word "religion" though? I would doubt this concept or word would be part of his lexicon. In any case I enjoyed the work. Larry
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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HI Larry! I wondered this same thing. The history buffs say he said it, so who knows. He was a great orator and speaker. I will have to do more research and possible find a professor somewhere who may know for sure. VERY good point. Thank you. Susan
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It was probably a very loose translation, but 'what the hey" it gets the point across. Be well, Susan, Larry
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent "what if" alternate history, without any nits or such that I could find. I enjoyed reading this story, especially its narrative style.
Dave
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Susan,
This is an excellent "what if" alternate history, without any nits or such that I could find. I enjoyed reading this story, especially its narrative style.
Dave
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Hi Dave, thank you very much. I worked hard on it, and enjoyed the research too. Thank you for your kind thoughts. Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
This piece of superb fiction is extremely well writen about the America Indians. It's so sad in our history what our country did to a proud people. Many died on a Trail of Tears. Your descriptive writing is excellent. Great characterization and melacholonic narrative. Your writing gives the reader the one two punch of great emotion. I enjoyed this descriptive that's filled with much passion: "The people who do not belong here, who come to our lands, they bring changes that will take our freedoms away. On the winds blow death and much unhappiness. They seek to destroy us; our way of life, our culture and they will steal our land. We must fight them. This is our home. We will not let them take it." Wow, I bet this story wins. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. You've effectively managed to establish a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I wish you good luck in the Native American Fiction writing prompt. I'd recommend this excellent story to other reviewers as a must read. Keep on writing with heart, my good friend. Love ya...Melissa.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Susan,
This piece of superb fiction is extremely well writen about the America Indians. It's so sad in our history what our country did to a proud people. Many died on a Trail of Tears. Your descriptive writing is excellent. Great characterization and melacholonic narrative. Your writing gives the reader the one two punch of great emotion. I enjoyed this descriptive that's filled with much passion: "The people who do not belong here, who come to our lands, they bring changes that will take our freedoms away. On the winds blow death and much unhappiness. They seek to destroy us; our way of life, our culture and they will steal our land. We must fight them. This is our home. We will not let them take it." Wow, I bet this story wins. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. You've effectively managed to establish a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I wish you good luck in the Native American Fiction writing prompt. I'd recommend this excellent story to other reviewers as a must read. Keep on writing with heart, my good friend. Love ya...Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Hey there! Thank you very much! No, the poem is ahead! ")) It's okay, that's how it is. I just like that you enjoyed this. THAT's what it's all about. Your enthusiasm always makes my work worthwhile Melissa. I really appreciate you. Always. Susan
Comment from WilliamDeen
I have a small part of Creek Indian in me. I wish the white man had not destroyed the Native Americans. Their culture, religion and beliefs are things we should have cherished and saved.. not destroy.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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I have a small part of Creek Indian in me. I wish the white man had not destroyed the Native Americans. Their culture, religion and beliefs are things we should have cherished and saved.. not destroy.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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That's wonderful William. I am extra happy to 'know' you now! I agree, our government tho, continues this behavior, but it more subtle ways these days. Sad. Thank you for a most welcomed review...susan
