haiku (roasted dried chestnut)
A New Year's Haiku15 total reviews
Comment from JeffreyStone
Such great understatement. No one does HAIKU consistently better than you. This short poem contains a poignant message. Well done. JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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Such great understatement. No one does HAIKU consistently better than you. This short poem contains a poignant message. Well done. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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Thanks for a great compliment. I am extremely grateful.
Comment from Joan E.
I liked the visual description of the "chestnut" and the appeal to the reader's taste buds as you developed the conclusion in your satori. The stark simplicity of the illustration is just right. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I liked the visual description of the "chestnut" and the appeal to the reader's taste buds as you developed the conclusion in your satori. The stark simplicity of the illustration is just right. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I was so surprised to find out "chestnut" was a kigo for New Year's. Thanks for a great review.
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I had no idea--thanks for sharing another kernel! -Joan
Comment from R. K. Alan
Delightful Haiku, as always. The Eastern mind will readily identify with this as an omen of bad things to come. Thanks for sharing. Ray aka R. K. Alan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Delightful Haiku, as always. The Eastern mind will readily identify with this as an omen of bad things to come. Thanks for sharing. Ray aka R. K. Alan
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Yes, the future is very important to the Asians. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from ulster3
Hello Alvin...
This is extremely clever and has informed me considerably just in the reading. I wish you well in this contest with this brilliant work.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Hello Alvin...
This is extremely clever and has informed me considerably just in the reading. I wish you well in this contest with this brilliant work.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from vickib
Hey this is just super I love the idea of the bitter taste being an omen of a not so great season in the taste of a chestnut-dried and roasted no less. I hate those. I've tried making them and cooking with them and I don't get all the fuss during holidays. Then the idea of the way they taste as a predictor of the season - aha - that's just wonderfully creative. I love this Teach, it opens my mind to things I haven't tried before. XO Vicki
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Hey this is just super I love the idea of the bitter taste being an omen of a not so great season in the taste of a chestnut-dried and roasted no less. I hate those. I've tried making them and cooking with them and I don't get all the fuss during holidays. Then the idea of the way they taste as a predictor of the season - aha - that's just wonderfully creative. I love this Teach, it opens my mind to things I haven't tried before. XO Vicki
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Yes, dried chesnuts do not often indicate a good year. Thanks for a good review. Thanks for the exceptional review.
Comment from EXMAN. nffc
Well I guess you're not going to impress everyone. I've read through the other comments and they're obviously all a hell of a lot cleverer than I am.
I think I get what you're saying and perhaps it is because I've never had that bitter chestnut that it doesn't do it for me. I wonder at the emperors new clothes.
Mindyou, just cause I'm not stunned by it, doesn't mean it's not good.
I hope I don't sound like I'm chewing on a bitter nut too much. I considered just passing on this one but thought you were quite capable of ignoring me as a raving idiot if you din't like what I had to say. At least you know I was here and I did do your work the honour of a read and spent time considering your words.
Cheers Alvin
Laurence
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Well I guess you're not going to impress everyone. I've read through the other comments and they're obviously all a hell of a lot cleverer than I am.
I think I get what you're saying and perhaps it is because I've never had that bitter chestnut that it doesn't do it for me. I wonder at the emperors new clothes.
Mindyou, just cause I'm not stunned by it, doesn't mean it's not good.
I hope I don't sound like I'm chewing on a bitter nut too much. I considered just passing on this one but thought you were quite capable of ignoring me as a raving idiot if you din't like what I had to say. At least you know I was here and I did do your work the honour of a read and spent time considering your words.
Cheers Alvin
Laurence
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you for your review. Your honesty is appreciated.
Comment from Judian James
This is a sad one Al. Of course, I don't need to tell you this is very well done. What does one say to the master of haiku when reviewing their work other than BRAVO! Oh, and of course I learned something new with your author's notes. I always appreciate that.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This is a sad one Al. Of course, I don't need to tell you this is very well done. What does one say to the master of haiku when reviewing their work other than BRAVO! Oh, and of course I learned something new with your author's notes. I always appreciate that.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from sugardog
Interesting, haiku, Alvin!!! I see your satori is the first line-I like that! You really know how to write powerful, deep poems in the short-long-short form. A bitter tasting chestnut signifies a bad year...sad. Love the use of "portends" and I like the dried chestnut that stands for New Years. Excellent write-makes me think. I hope we learn more about these different haiku with seasons etc... I love them!! Good luck, Alvin. Hope you are well. Dana
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Interesting, haiku, Alvin!!! I see your satori is the first line-I like that! You really know how to write powerful, deep poems in the short-long-short form. A bitter tasting chestnut signifies a bad year...sad. Love the use of "portends" and I like the dried chestnut that stands for New Years. Excellent write-makes me think. I hope we learn more about these different haiku with seasons etc... I love them!! Good luck, Alvin. Hope you are well. Dana
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Oh, Dana, you have reassured me. I was beginning to wonder about this. Thanks for understanding this haiku so wel. I am well, just busy. Thanks again.
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You are welcome!!!! Loved it. Can't wait for the haiku class to start!! Dana
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Yes, I am eager too. I shall post two new classes this week, I hope--one on senryu for September and one on haiga and haibun for October.
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Yay!!! I definitely need more schooling on haiku :( Can you look at my latest one-the one I asked you for help with? It's in my portfolio at the top. Called "nature's universe"-I think I have it right now, but I would love to know what you thought. Dana
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We're corresponding now!
Comment from bbowen6757
I'm glad you explained the seasonal reference, I would have totally missed it. I think it's interesting that you sometimes throw your satori line to the beginning of the haiku.
Bobby
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I'm glad you explained the seasonal reference, I would have totally missed it. I think it's interesting that you sometimes throw your satori line to the beginning of the haiku.
Bobby
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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The "satori" line can be the beginning or the end. What is more important is to juxtapose two concrete images. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from DALLAS01
Glad I have no taste for roasted chestnuts. This was a Haiku that spawns reflection. It was actually rather haunting when coupled with the art work. A lot said in a few lines.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Glad I have no taste for roasted chestnuts. This was a Haiku that spawns reflection. It was actually rather haunting when coupled with the art work. A lot said in a few lines.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thanks. I had no idea "chestnut" was a kigo for New Year's until I looked it up. Thanks for a good review.
