Peddling in Doubt and Gallantry
What I can do for you? Let me explain ...12 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
I guess I should have read Craig's List Ad to understand this one a bit better, you are too canny with words Mike, but you know that! It ain't religious that's for sure...is It? F*ck no! Sounds like one partner allowing the other to take advantage of them? Getting them to fight their battles as well as his own, BUT I could be wrong...
Always a pleasure though mate!
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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I guess I should have read Craig's List Ad to understand this one a bit better, you are too canny with words Mike, but you know that! It ain't religious that's for sure...is It? F*ck no! Sounds like one partner allowing the other to take advantage of them? Getting them to fight their battles as well as his own, BUT I could be wrong...
Always a pleasure though mate!
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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You pretty much got it, mate - you're right about it not being religious! The picture is there for effect. I'm basically advertising a service where i'll come and shoulder your burdens, but then I'll get so worked up about them, you'll end up deciding they're not so bad as I make out and demanding them back!
Mike
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Kinda got there...Kinda.
What's going on with Bran if you don't mind me asking mate? You ready to start the sequel yet?
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Interesting that you ask - I've been writing the prologue and first chapter. I just want to make sure they're right before I post! I've only been writing these poems as reviews to others and posting them to keep my presence on site, as it were.
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F*ck, You've got me all excited now mate :)
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mike:
I like this poem done in three line stanzas
it has a certain song-like quality to it as
one reads the way it is broken up
I must have missed Judian's Craig's List
piece but your piece stands on it own
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Mike:
I like this poem done in three line stanzas
it has a certain song-like quality to it as
one reads the way it is broken up
I must have missed Judian's Craig's List
piece but your piece stands on it own
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you, Jan - I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. If I had the aptitude for musical instruments, I'd probably write songs :-)
Mike
Comment from sheilanewton
Love the title, love the content, love the poem, love the art work.
Brilliant stuff yet again my friend.
You are the best of the best and I LUV YA!
How on earth your mind works to come up with such wonderful themes I will never know.
Brilliant. No sixes to give or I would have done with this great piece.
Love Sheila XX
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Love the title, love the content, love the poem, love the art work.
Brilliant stuff yet again my friend.
You are the best of the best and I LUV YA!
How on earth your mind works to come up with such wonderful themes I will never know.
Brilliant. No sixes to give or I would have done with this great piece.
Love Sheila XX
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you, Shiela :-). I generally take a subject (often from a piece I read and enjoy on here), then sit back with pen in hand and see where my head wants to go!
Mike
Comment from jadapenn
Interesting poem and I liked the way you rhymed this one. Don't know if I understand exactly what you're telling me, but hey, you can have all my problems. lol.
Well written and presented. luv jada
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Interesting poem and I liked the way you rhymed this one. Don't know if I understand exactly what you're telling me, but hey, you can have all my problems. lol.
Well written and presented. luv jada
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thanks, Jada :-). I have a habit of picking up the moods of those around me, which is very occassionally good but usually irritating!
Mike
Comment from Sasha
I will have to read 'Craig's List Ad' by Judian James to better understand this. Even without reading it, I found this fascinating, well written, and most definitely thought provoking. Very, very nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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I will have to read 'Craig's List Ad' by Judian James to better understand this. Even without reading it, I found this fascinating, well written, and most definitely thought provoking. Very, very nice work with this one.
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you, my friend :-) It came out very easily, though it has thown most, but I can live with that. If you're interested, my replies to the first two reviews include my fumbling attempt at an explanation :-)
Mike
Comment from Veekz
Well done, very clever and I love the play on word throughout. I'm going to have to go read 'Craig's List Ad' by Judian James now to see the inspiration behind this piece. No edits needed that I can see
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Well done, very clever and I love the play on word throughout. I'm going to have to go read 'Craig's List Ad' by Judian James now to see the inspiration behind this piece. No edits needed that I can see
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you, my dear! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one - most haven't understood it on first reading, but that's cool.
Mike
Comment from 7thpoet
Loved it! Great poem. I really love the three lined poem, complete with the run on into the next stanza from the previous. Excellent story you tell too! Loved it.just loved it!
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Loved it! Great poem. I really love the three lined poem, complete with the run on into the next stanza from the previous. Excellent story you tell too! Loved it.just loved it!
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you, 7thpoet :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed the read!
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
I really like the aab ccb ddb rhyme scheme and the flow of the lines in your tercets, Mike.
Excellent use of enjambent from one stanza to the next, which adds so much to the flow.
I'm going to be pondering awhile on what the speaker has to say. Brooke
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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I really like the aab ccb ddb rhyme scheme and the flow of the lines in your tercets, Mike.
Excellent use of enjambent from one stanza to the next, which adds so much to the flow.
I'm going to be pondering awhile on what the speaker has to say. Brooke
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you, Brooke :-). I fumbled my way through an explanation for the first couple of reviewers if you want to fill in some gaps - this felt fairly obvious in my head, but nobody has really clicked with the meaning, so it must be more obscure than I thought! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
hi Mike, you certainly pack a lot of punch in a few lines. When I read this one it seemed to make a lot of sense and I read Jude's as well, but I guess in the finish I'm not really sure what you are saying in this one...sometimes these things go completely over my head and I feel so dense...think I'm a plain talker so no mistakes get made kind of girl. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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hi Mike, you certainly pack a lot of punch in a few lines. When I read this one it seemed to make a lot of sense and I read Jude's as well, but I guess in the finish I'm not really sure what you are saying in this one...sometimes these things go completely over my head and I feel so dense...think I'm a plain talker so no mistakes get made kind of girl. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Fear not, my friend, thus far only Judian has understood this with ease, and she had the advantage that it's besically the same poem as hers, just from my own self-deprecating angle and perspective. Read my first two responses to reviews for my fumbling attempts at an explanation! More importantly, thank you for the continued support :-)
Mike
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lol ok now I got it ... lol ... good grief I really can be dense sometimes...lol xoxo d
Comment from Judian James
Thank you my dear, Brit Buddy!! I LOVE this retort to my
Craig's List piece. It is the strangest web site that many, many people swear by, but I've read or heard more horror stories in the newspapers and over the National news attributed to trusting folks using Craig's List. Your piece is better than mine, you show-off. Thanks Mike!!
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you my dear, Brit Buddy!! I LOVE this retort to my
Craig's List piece. It is the strangest web site that many, many people swear by, but I've read or heard more horror stories in the newspapers and over the National news attributed to trusting folks using Craig's List. Your piece is better than mine, you show-off. Thanks Mike!!
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Lol, it's not better, my dear, it's just a Mike-head evolution of your piece. I've effectively written the same poem, just from my own perspective.
I've just had to explain it to the first too reviewers, which was an interesting experience as I think this is a concept explain far more easily in poetry that prose!
Mike :-)
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I just went and had a look-see! Hmm
The review after mine didn't get it either. Delete the photo for the hell of it, and see if that makes a difference. Amazing. Sorry Mike. I think it's great!
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I knew when I picked that photo it would immediately make people think of Jesus, but then I thought, it's an extra dimension! Mayhap it had plenty already :-)
Hey, none of them have marked me down, so I'm happy. I loved your piece - witty, fresh, and sooo clever. Couldn;t resist doing one of my own!
Mike
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Well I'm glad you don't think I led you astray, because I think it's brilliant!
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You never lead me astray, JJ, and I like it so I'm happy it's up there to be muddled over :-)
Mike
