Don't Soldiers Get This?
free verse describing disability20 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
I love your poem. I too have OPTS. A fear a stranger human touch. I have to trust the person who touches me. It is a pain when I am in the hospital. I understand the feelings you are going through. Great Work.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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I love your poem. I too have OPTS. A fear a stranger human touch. I have to trust the person who touches me. It is a pain when I am in the hospital. I understand the feelings you are going through. Great Work.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you so much, elliejean. Your words of understanding are most touching. I wish you good luck with your journey, my friend. Blessings, Bev
Comment from percival86jack
This happens all too often and is not easily understood. This is very sad and I wish you peace, my friend... love and sweet thoughts, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2011
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This happens all too often and is not easily understood. This is very sad and I wish you peace, my friend... love and sweet thoughts, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 03-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much kind man. I really appreciate you taking time to read my poem and offer your encouragement. XX Bev
Comment from gpaine
Well crafted poem regarding a serious condition. I am a disabled vet and can attest to the seriousness of this affliction. Your work provided good imagery and flowed nicely. A pleasure to read. Thank you.
Giles
gpaine
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2011
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Well crafted poem regarding a serious condition. I am a disabled vet and can attest to the seriousness of this affliction. Your work provided good imagery and flowed nicely. A pleasure to read. Thank you.
Giles
gpaine
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much Giles for letting me know you enjoyed the poem and for sending along your thoughtful review. I empathize with your plight; and send only good thoughts your way.
Comment from cheery blossom
The overall picture of this message in this piece is clear. One understand that she feels that the abadonment is her early has left scars she continues to have to deal with--sometimes mot too successully The rhyme scheme could be improved, also the meter. however she did get har point across, My advice is to keep that chin u[ and to keep on writting, Good luck, Cheery.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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The overall picture of this message in this piece is clear. One understand that she feels that the abadonment is her early has left scars she continues to have to deal with--sometimes mot too successully The rhyme scheme could be improved, also the meter. however she did get har point across, My advice is to keep that chin u[ and to keep on writting, Good luck, Cheery.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thanks for kind support and most encouraging review Cheery. After 50 years of this, I have learned some good coping mechanisms. But it is truly one day at a time. Bless you for your supportive comments and review.
Comment from InHisownwrite
It is definitely amazing what the past can do to our every day lives, no matter how far in the future..
My skin crawls when you press, "Why's your life such a mess?" All strangers wear masks.... A very heavy and powerful statement... Fight or flight, The reaction you incite... All of this, right from the heart... Very guttsy, very emotional... A creative piece that "speaks"..
I was sexually abused as a child... I completely understand what you so creatively have written..
Good for you! Bryan
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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It is definitely amazing what the past can do to our every day lives, no matter how far in the future..
My skin crawls when you press, "Why's your life such a mess?" All strangers wear masks.... A very heavy and powerful statement... Fight or flight, The reaction you incite... All of this, right from the heart... Very guttsy, very emotional... A creative piece that "speaks"..
I was sexually abused as a child... I completely understand what you so creatively have written..
Good for you! Bryan
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Wow, thanks so much for your truly wonderful and touching review. I so appreciate your insightful comments and exceptional rating! Blessings.
Comment from RebelRose
This is a sad story, one that is told all too often. Naturally, when you're suffering from PTSD, you think all strangers wear masks and you can't let your guard down. I am sure each day IS a struggle for you and I hope things get better for you.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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This is a sad story, one that is told all too often. Naturally, when you're suffering from PTSD, you think all strangers wear masks and you can't let your guard down. I am sure each day IS a struggle for you and I hope things get better for you.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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I so appreciate your kind words of support both for me personally and the poem. Blessings.
Comment from DrCarter2001
You've done an excellent job on this poem. At first, I thought the title meant: "shouldn't the soldiers understand this?" but as I read, I realized your point was, "I'm not a soldier; why do I have this?" I like how you pulled those military terms into your poem, as in breaching defenses and wearing masks. You might want to look at it again if you didn't do this intentionally and see if you can build up that metaphor even more (maybe with another stanza). Nice job with the slant rhyme in the fourth stanza as well. My one suggestion would be not to capitalize "grip" and "grasp" since these are not proper nouns. Otherwise, best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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You've done an excellent job on this poem. At first, I thought the title meant: "shouldn't the soldiers understand this?" but as I read, I realized your point was, "I'm not a soldier; why do I have this?" I like how you pulled those military terms into your poem, as in breaching defenses and wearing masks. You might want to look at it again if you didn't do this intentionally and see if you can build up that metaphor even more (maybe with another stanza). Nice job with the slant rhyme in the fourth stanza as well. My one suggestion would be not to capitalize "grip" and "grasp" since these are not proper nouns. Otherwise, best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thanks for your wonderful review DC, particularly for the technical aspects. I will certainly look at the areas that you mentioned for possible revision. I really appreciate you taking time to read and review the poem.
Comment from Twomoon
Wow, my friend, this is just lovely! An amazing piece of work! Your descriptive power just blew me away! I would love to hear your passionate read on this, as your intense feelings are so well played. I agree with you on this topic. A moving work, just brilliant! much love twomoon
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Wow, my friend, this is just lovely! An amazing piece of work! Your descriptive power just blew me away! I would love to hear your passionate read on this, as your intense feelings are so well played. I agree with you on this topic. A moving work, just brilliant! much love twomoon
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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I am so very honored by your wonderful words of encouragement Twomoom. Thanks so much for stopping by and for your wonderful, moving rating.
Comment from Tillom Gliss
Holy %$^! This was amazing! This was epic! This is definitely one of your best, for me anyway...I will be bookmarking and I applaud you for sharing! Wow! I've no favourite line because it all stood as one solid piece to pick one part would not be possible! You have my vote!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Holy %$^! This was amazing! This was epic! This is definitely one of your best, for me anyway...I will be bookmarking and I applaud you for sharing! Wow! I've no favourite line because it all stood as one solid piece to pick one part would not be possible! You have my vote!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thanks so much Tillom. I am deeply honored by your wonderful review and encouragement. Thank you for taking time to read and send along your exceptional review. Blessings...
Comment from Morning Mist
I feel for your illness, and I understand this as I was sexually abused young and told no one for 27 years. This left me with PTS manifestating through depression and anxiety. Walls built up quickly and very thick; now through therapy, which I'm still in, I am better in keeping walls at bay...no always though. Thank you for sharing. Blessings,
Morning Mist
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I feel for your illness, and I understand this as I was sexually abused young and told no one for 27 years. This left me with PTS manifestating through depression and anxiety. Walls built up quickly and very thick; now through therapy, which I'm still in, I am better in keeping walls at bay...no always though. Thank you for sharing. Blessings,
Morning Mist
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thanks dear lady for your honesty and your loving words. Therapy does help, doesn't it? But the struggle goes on. As one reviewer mentioned, every new situation can trigger the reactions. I am so very sorry for the suffering your early life has brought upon you. My prayers are with you and all who suffer such monstrosities. I really appreciate you taking time to read and your exceptional rating. You have deeply touched me. Blessings to you!
