The Grape Ape Who Would Be King
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Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Kiwi,
I like it.
It's interesting.
Good descriptions.
Entertaining.
I like that he's purple. That's my favorite color.
Good title.
I can't wait to see what happens..
xoxo,
katie
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Kiwi,
I like it.
It's interesting.
Good descriptions.
Entertaining.
I like that he's purple. That's my favorite color.
Good title.
I can't wait to see what happens..
xoxo,
katie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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You're like me late with getting to everyone and the reading...had over 100 pm to sort ...lol thanks xoxo Kiwi
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yup, trying to catch up.
xoxo,
katie
Comment from Anonymous Member
Hey kiwigirl, can't wait to read this to my grandchildren, such a beautiful story and what a new concept--a purple ape, children would love this crazy. Any publisher in contact, if not, I am sure there is one coming soon. Marvellous. Thanks.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Hey kiwigirl, can't wait to read this to my grandchildren, such a beautiful story and what a new concept--a purple ape, children would love this crazy. Any publisher in contact, if not, I am sure there is one coming soon. Marvellous. Thanks.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and comments. It says I wrote the comment which is strange...how did you do that? things just get stranger and stranger. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment from alexgardiner
Prince Alastair tried a bagpipe and kilt saying purple was a royal color and bag pipes were fun to play.
Jings Bonny Lass loved the fantasy but a gorilla in a skirt????
The Auld Yin.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Prince Alastair tried a bagpipe and kilt saying purple was a royal color and bag pipes were fun to play.
Jings Bonny Lass loved the fantasy but a gorilla in a skirt????
The Auld Yin.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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aye laddie that's what his friends said too...lol xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Ankh
Well I am liking this one. It has a good flow and the dialogue works nicely. Good job with all the imagery. You also have done well with keeping it simple for the kids :-)~
Seth x
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Well I am liking this one. It has a good flow and the dialogue works nicely. Good job with all the imagery. You also have done well with keeping it simple for the kids :-)~
Seth x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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yeah love my purple ape! lol ... thanks Seth for the review and your support. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Bellringer
I enjoyed reading your imaginary tale of this young purple ape. I particularly liked his attempts at disguise. This was well written and entertaining. I look forward to the next installment. Blessings, hector
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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I enjoyed reading your imaginary tale of this young purple ape. I particularly liked his attempts at disguise. This was well written and entertaining. I look forward to the next installment. Blessings, hector
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Awww thanks Hector I like Alastair too ... hope you like the next one as well. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Sasha
This is a delightful and fun children's story. Great descriptions, clever twist (a purple ape) and all the problems the poor little prince is having dealing with being different. I look forward to the next installment. I didn't see any spages (but remember I am the worst proofreader on this sight) and definitely didn't find anything that needed to be changed or improved.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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This is a delightful and fun children's story. Great descriptions, clever twist (a purple ape) and all the problems the poor little prince is having dealing with being different. I look forward to the next installment. I didn't see any spages (but remember I am the worst proofreader on this sight) and definitely didn't find anything that needed to be changed or improved.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Thank you I have now added my name as Spag Princess...I have no idea bout form or punctuation...lol ... just ask EXMAN he catches everything and lets me know it! xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Veekz
There has to be cos I want to know the rest of the story! LOL :) Great first installment for this children's tale, like the theme of 'being different' as it's a huge issue these days to be different in any way and kids need to understand it's ok to not be 'the norm.'
Looking forward to the next installment :)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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There has to be cos I want to know the rest of the story! LOL :) Great first installment for this children's tale, like the theme of 'being different' as it's a huge issue these days to be different in any way and kids need to understand it's ok to not be 'the norm.'
Looking forward to the next installment :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Thank you Veekz...I like the purple prince too...soon I'll get you the next chapter...lol thanks in the meantime for the support and read of my work. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from missy98writer
kiwigirl,
your cute story titled The Grape Ape Who Would Be King is very written an enjoyable read. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. Excellent narrative, great dialogue and very good descriptive writing. You managed to established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I enjoyed your descriptions in this paragraph: "Valley of Trees is a place of fantasy animals, fairies, trolls, butterflies, birds and all manner of dreams; but, the finest thing of all is trees! Big trees, tall trees, little trees, fat trees, skinny trees, new trees, old trees, trees, trees, trees as far as your eyes can see." I look forward to reading more in this story.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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kiwigirl,
your cute story titled The Grape Ape Who Would Be King is very written an enjoyable read. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. Excellent narrative, great dialogue and very good descriptive writing. You managed to established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I enjoyed your descriptions in this paragraph: "Valley of Trees is a place of fantasy animals, fairies, trolls, butterflies, birds and all manner of dreams; but, the finest thing of all is trees! Big trees, tall trees, little trees, fat trees, skinny trees, new trees, old trees, trees, trees, trees as far as your eyes can see." I look forward to reading more in this story.
Melissa.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Yeah I love the apes in the Trees, will have to see how I can make them have some fun in those trees...lol thanks again for the support. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from animatqua
I think this is a good children's story and is well put together. The problem is, it doesn't fit reality. In reality, in an actual lab experiment, the scientists separated a young monkey from his peers. This monkey was not remarkable in any way, and fit into the group in a normal fashion.
The scientists painted the monkey green, and put him back in with his peers. The other monkeys killed him.
There are a lot of `triumph over adversity' stories in this regard. The truth is, green monkeys don't catch a break in society. Their attitude toward themselves is the only thing that lifts them up from the muck and lets them succeed.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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I think this is a good children's story and is well put together. The problem is, it doesn't fit reality. In reality, in an actual lab experiment, the scientists separated a young monkey from his peers. This monkey was not remarkable in any way, and fit into the group in a normal fashion.
The scientists painted the monkey green, and put him back in with his peers. The other monkeys killed him.
There are a lot of `triumph over adversity' stories in this regard. The truth is, green monkeys don't catch a break in society. Their attitude toward themselves is the only thing that lifts them up from the muck and lets them succeed.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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omg animatqua that is just so dang sad! And here I just loved the idea of a purple ape king...hmmm more food for thought ...thanks for taking the time to read and review. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from InterestingRon
This is a great read - one of those stories that adults can read aloud to their kids - and also enjoy themselves.
I'll be intrigued to see where you are taking this? Issac Asimov wrote a book called I Robot, where the robots were actually metaphors for ethnic minorities. His boss, a bigot, didn't realize what he'd done.
Will there be some profound message hidden in this story? Can't wait for the next part!
Ron xox
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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This is a great read - one of those stories that adults can read aloud to their kids - and also enjoy themselves.
I'll be intrigued to see where you are taking this? Issac Asimov wrote a book called I Robot, where the robots were actually metaphors for ethnic minorities. His boss, a bigot, didn't realize what he'd done.
Will there be some profound message hidden in this story? Can't wait for the next part!
Ron xox
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Was so late when I wrote this one Ron, I have several ideas on what might happen and some of the reviews have given me even more avenues of thoughts so who knows...thank you for hanging tough with me my sweetest friend. You are amazing...now I have to go tackle all the muck ups that EXMAN has found for me...I can always depend on him to find every last spag and tense problems and oh lord...lol thanks again xoxo Kiwi
