The Pink Mitten
112 word micro flash30 total reviews
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
The eastcoast, midwest, and south are getting it real bad. My family told me it was 2 below in Atlanta just a few days ago. An icy presentation, my friend. Good read.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2010
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The eastcoast, midwest, and south are getting it real bad. My family told me it was 2 below in Atlanta just a few days ago. An icy presentation, my friend. Good read.
Isaiah
Comment Written 16-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2010
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Hi again! Thank you once more! Yeah, this weather is really getting on my last nerve. I want to move south. But it's cold in Florida even. Good old HAARP...good old .gov playing around with the atmosphere. I hope your family will be okay. And you too. Keep warm!! hug! susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
Short and sweet, well written. I loved the concept.
I've been behind on reviews while polishing my novel for the editor before it goes back to the publisher.
Ted
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Susan :)
Short and sweet, well written. I loved the concept.
I've been behind on reviews while polishing my novel for the editor before it goes back to the publisher.
Ted
Comment Written 15-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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No problem, Ted! Thank you for taking time for me! Good to hear from you. I am behind too! ") Merry Christmas! Susan
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You're welcome, have a great "frozen" holiday. :)
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You too Ted. Actually, I hope you have some decent weather. We will have slush and snow Fri. and Sat. both. My bones won't thaw until May! ") S.
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Hi :)
You only have five months to wait.
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your flash fiction story is very well written. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I wonder too if he made it. What a riveting ending.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Susan,
your flash fiction story is very well written. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I wonder too if he made it. What a riveting ending.
Melissa.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Melissa! Another late reply! SO sorry, I love that you liked this. Thank you very much ... so nice to hear from you! xoxo. Susan
Comment from Judian James
Hi Sue. Good one. You left the reader deciding the final outcome of the pink mittened prisoner of the snow. I think that last paragraph could have more punch though.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Sue. Good one. You left the reader deciding the final outcome of the pink mittened prisoner of the snow. I think that last paragraph could have more punch though.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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HI Judian! Thank you! I will look at this soon...I am behind on everything again! AHhhh!! ") Susan
Comment from gspeak
Excellent work!! You managed to tell a great story in very few words incorporating elements of mystique, excitement, vivid imagery, and even feelings. Well done. Having left Illinois over 30 years ago, I'd forgotten about this kind of weather and the wind chill factors, ice spots, snow days, etc. You even got memory in there--writing doesn't get much better. And congratulations on being recognized for this work--well deserved. Wished I could do that.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Excellent work!! You managed to tell a great story in very few words incorporating elements of mystique, excitement, vivid imagery, and even feelings. Well done. Having left Illinois over 30 years ago, I'd forgotten about this kind of weather and the wind chill factors, ice spots, snow days, etc. You even got memory in there--writing doesn't get much better. And congratulations on being recognized for this work--well deserved. Wished I could do that.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Hi there, thank you so much! I am still trying to learn flash, some said this didn't qualify, but as long as you enjoyed it, I am happy! So smart of you to leave this area. We are in southern Indiana...just awful this year! I hope you have a great holiday and are safe and warm!! ") Susan....ps...you can do it, just keep at it. I have been trying for over a year, I can't remember the first post I made, but all you have to do is want to! ") KEEP WRITING! HUG!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Susan, this is excellent. Your voice is crisp, you've created suspense, you've allowed the reader to participate by creating his own ending. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Susan, this is excellent. Your voice is crisp, you've created suspense, you've allowed the reader to participate by creating his own ending. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Hi Nancy! Thank you! I am thrilled that you liked this. I think we are supposed to have a definate outcome, but couldn't resist doing it this way for this story! Merry Christmas to you and your family! xoxo. Susan
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And Merry Christmas to you, as well. Nancy
Comment from Fireshadow
Susan, great micro flash. I would have ended it like this :
Hoping I had made it on time, suddenly through the frosty windows, I see the smiling faces of two children as they wave at me.
Two other suggestions :
in the sun[,] almost blinding me
highway (delete hyphen in high-way)
Keep writing, my dear friend. Your mind is a wealthy pool of wonderfully creative narratives.
Ama
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Susan, great micro flash. I would have ended it like this :
Hoping I had made it on time, suddenly through the frosty windows, I see the smiling faces of two children as they wave at me.
Two other suggestions :
in the sun[,] almost blinding me
highway (delete hyphen in high-way)
Keep writing, my dear friend. Your mind is a wealthy pool of wonderfully creative narratives.
Ama
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Hi Ama! Thanks! Good idea! You should read Trybucks ending! It was great too! ") And I will fix these too, wonderful help! I have so many stories, a lot unfinished. I love the flash but am having a time getting it right. It does have lots of rules! ") But fun. Happy days to you Ama, I sure wish I had your weather! ") Wow...xoxo. Susan
Comment from Judy Swanson
Good morning Susan. Wow - another flash fiction story, well written, with an open ended question remaining for the reader that opens up aching sigh as your story ends.
One tiny spag...
"the voices on my truck's radio tells me the"
You should change it to read either...
...the voice on my truck's radio tells me.... or
...the voices on my truck's radio tell me.
Well done, my friend. Certainly, winter has arrived!
Judy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2010
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Good morning Susan. Wow - another flash fiction story, well written, with an open ended question remaining for the reader that opens up aching sigh as your story ends.
One tiny spag...
"the voices on my truck's radio tells me the"
You should change it to read either...
...the voice on my truck's radio tells me.... or
...the voices on my truck's radio tell me.
Well done, my friend. Certainly, winter has arrived!
Judy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2010
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Hi Judy! So you didn't get my story about the Blues? It's about the music, not sadness. It is in my portfolio and I did release it. I don't think it's that bad that no one would review it? I guess you never know! ") It's the holidays, people are busy! I am always glad to hear from you Judy. I have a card ready to mail.! Smiles!! susan
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Hey - if it's in your portfolio, I'll go check it out. Judy
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Susan,
This is cool.
Good descriptions.
Great ending leaving us hanging like that..
I like the title.
Good image.
Nice piece of flash fiction.
Can feel the cold and snow from your descriptions.
Katie
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Susan,
This is cool.
Good descriptions.
Great ending leaving us hanging like that..
I like the title.
Good image.
Nice piece of flash fiction.
Can feel the cold and snow from your descriptions.
Katie
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Hi Katie, thank you very much! I am glad you enjoyed the way it stopped, I had several people offer ideas, it's fun and interesting! ") Good to hear from you...Love, Susan
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Susan, you're welcome.
love,
katie
Comment from Mastery
So, someone is in trouble here, eh, Susan? I-65...traveled It many times. Good highway and a lot of those wind turbines there for at least eleven miles. Just one suggestion if I may:
"The voices on my truck's radio tells me" Make this "The voices on my truck's radio tell me..."
Interesting writing...Bob
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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So, someone is in trouble here, eh, Susan? I-65...traveled It many times. Good highway and a lot of those wind turbines there for at least eleven miles. Just one suggestion if I may:
"The voices on my truck's radio tells me" Make this "The voices on my truck's radio tell me..."
Interesting writing...Bob
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Hi Bob! Thank you! Yes, it's a windy time of year here, that's for sure. From July to November, no rain. No wind. Nothing. NOW, cold subzero windchills, and WIND...I can't stand it. Oh, and I fixed this too, as always I appreciate your valuable help! xoxo, Susan
