Senryu (mid-term elections)
Senryu, 5-7-5, ironic political commentary29 total reviews
Comment from MAMONIA
This is hysterical! I really enjoyed the irony
in this one. What a great job you did and what
a fabulous entry in the contest.
I love senryu and you really know your stuff.
Nothing could have said it all in so few words.
Keep writing. It's fun to read you.
Regards, Marie
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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This is hysterical! I really enjoyed the irony
in this one. What a great job you did and what
a fabulous entry in the contest.
I love senryu and you really know your stuff.
Nothing could have said it all in so few words.
Keep writing. It's fun to read you.
Regards, Marie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Hi Marie - thanks for going back through the archives. It is appreciated. Bill
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Most welcome
Comment from kenzi'spoems
This is so frickin funny! i adore the picture as well!!! ohmigosh! how i love this! cleverly crafted, right requirements for a 5-7-5 and absolutely stunning! two thumbs up!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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This is so frickin funny! i adore the picture as well!!! ohmigosh! how i love this! cleverly crafted, right requirements for a 5-7-5 and absolutely stunning! two thumbs up!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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Thanks for going back through my archives. Much appreciated! Bill
Comment from dmxn2k
This is horribly funny. I believe that's the laymen's term for an incredible haiku, no? Coupled with the title and image, it makes for strong political commentary, especially with the background history of the 2008 midterm elections.
Hillary Clinton, despite her popularity a year out from midterms, took a slide as Barack Obama came onto the seen. Fresh and amiable, he eventually forced the stiffer, less personable Clinton to take a back seat, to falter and fall in the election.
Hillary Clinton in the waning days of her election went to vicious attack ads (as all politicians in their death throes do), but she couldn't tarnish the clean-cut Obama.
After such tactics, when the metaphorical time for Obama to approach the fallen Clinton arrived, he certainly wouldn't consider himself 'friends' with Clinton. The ironic statement, "I'll find one for you." completely and utterly slaps the funny bone as one would expect a friend to extend the comment in the first line, and the final line notes that it may be difficult to even find a friend.
This is senryu at its finest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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This is horribly funny. I believe that's the laymen's term for an incredible haiku, no? Coupled with the title and image, it makes for strong political commentary, especially with the background history of the 2008 midterm elections.
Hillary Clinton, despite her popularity a year out from midterms, took a slide as Barack Obama came onto the seen. Fresh and amiable, he eventually forced the stiffer, less personable Clinton to take a back seat, to falter and fall in the election.
Hillary Clinton in the waning days of her election went to vicious attack ads (as all politicians in their death throes do), but she couldn't tarnish the clean-cut Obama.
After such tactics, when the metaphorical time for Obama to approach the fallen Clinton arrived, he certainly wouldn't consider himself 'friends' with Clinton. The ironic statement, "I'll find one for you." completely and utterly slaps the funny bone as one would expect a friend to extend the comment in the first line, and the final line notes that it may be difficult to even find a friend.
This is senryu at its finest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thanks for your kind words. I did have fun with this one!
Comment from writer c
Congratulations on your third place win in the senryu contest! We are co third prizers...I love the satire in your senryu, and the picture to accompany it. Life is tough in politics..lol
Carol
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Congratulations on your third place win in the senryu contest! We are co third prizers...I love the satire in your senryu, and the picture to accompany it. Life is tough in politics..lol
Carol
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thanks for the well wishes! Oddly enough, I voted for your work. I thought that it was incredibly ironic and so much in tune with the season.
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We didn't vote for this one, did we? This was the contest committee pick. Now, my senryu yesterday won in the daily prompt thang..lol Anyway, chance to say congrats again, a nod from the committee in the ethers!
Carol
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Congratulations on your post yesterday! Had to chuckle at that one. I leave my flannel p.j.'s on and don't care if the light is on or off!
Comment from rama devi
Congratulations on placing in the contest. This one has very clever satire, well enhanced by your choice of artwork! Bravo and kudos. Love, rd
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Congratulations on placing in the contest. This one has very clever satire, well enhanced by your choice of artwork! Bravo and kudos. Love, rd
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thanks rd - I always love hearing from you. I did have fun with this one. Politics in US can be very entertaining. What's it like in India? Regards, Bill
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Crazy! And changing swiftly. :) Warm Regards, rd
Comment from Julia Yampolsky
Bravo! Boy,I loved it! Sometimes I find that limitation in syllables and lines helps to produce sharper and more precise wording. Very funny, too! -Julia
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Bravo! Boy,I loved it! Sometimes I find that limitation in syllables and lines helps to produce sharper and more precise wording. Very funny, too! -Julia
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thanks Julia! You are allowing me to start my day with a smile on my face. It was a strange event. I first saw the picture and then saw the contest. Serendipity in motion. Regards, Bill
Comment from InHisownwrite
A great senryu...
With a great message...
Especially love the last two lines....
And also, so you had a fall...
Like it's no big deal...(in politics)..
Bryan
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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A great senryu...
With a great message...
Especially love the last two lines....
And also, so you had a fall...
Like it's no big deal...(in politics)..
Bryan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thanks Bryan. I saw that picture and knew I had to do something with it! Regards, Bill
Comment from R. K. Alan
The usual roller coaster cycle of elections in the states... no one is ever satisfied and expect instant gratifications as if they are watching Saturday morning cartoons. Ray aka krylon
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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The usual roller coaster cycle of elections in the states... no one is ever satisfied and expect instant gratifications as if they are watching Saturday morning cartoons. Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Ray - I love the analogy of cartoons. Sometimes I think I would like to resort to the old time violence in some of the oldies! Regards, Bill
Comment from mbarkersimpson
Very clever - the irony and the good use of this type of poem. It looks like you are learning a great deal about poetry. I haven't branched out yet, but you set a good example.
Kind regards
Mel
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Very clever - the irony and the good use of this type of poem. It looks like you are learning a great deal about poetry. I haven't branched out yet, but you set a good example.
Kind regards
Mel
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Thank you very much Mel. Oddly enough, I enjoy the short poems like this because they force you to focus on words, the placement of words and nuance. I'll never be a poet, but do enjoy. If you are ever bored and have two minutes to spare, my favorite post was about my daughter is called "The Sounds of Time". Warm regards, Bill
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Hi, Bill. I think you're selling yourself short. The very fact that you can produce a great peom makes you a poet in my eyes. I'll read the one about your daughter. Best Wishes, Mel
Comment from Ann Smith
As I look at your picture I can almost spot the tongue in cheek. I love it. It's too bad we have come to this but as they say we are only human. I read some of the comments and especially liked Barbara's about voting for her cat. I think she was the one that voted for her cat.
I didn't know you could vote for yourself. So, you only came in third. Too bad. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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As I look at your picture I can almost spot the tongue in cheek. I love it. It's too bad we have come to this but as they say we are only human. I read some of the comments and especially liked Barbara's about voting for her cat. I think she was the one that voted for her cat.
I didn't know you could vote for yourself. So, you only came in third. Too bad. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Thanks Ann - I have to admit that my muse for this was the picture itself, so was just serindipitious with the mid terms. Regards, Bill
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There's nothing like Southern humor. :) ann
