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Shela Francis

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

That is simply beautiful Miss Cookie, and very heart felt and loving. Most people are Bless to know when they are leaving this ole world, and know where they are going when they leave this place. She is a beautiful lady Miss Cookie thank you for sharing her with us! God Bless you for that...!!!

Comment Written 14-May-2013

reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my write, for your thoughtful comments and kind words and the star.

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Rating of Chapter 130 - Beneath the sea

Miss Cookie,

Poor Hazel. She cannot live without love. Now that she has lost both her loves in one night, drowning in the sea seems the best option for her.

I like the way you picked up on the fish skeleton and the realization that she might be the next one to be eaten. Perhaps her plan wasn't perfect.

Yet, it turned out okay for her, and she was ready to begin her new life.

Three stars were only because of the many edits needed.

hers (her) eyes matched the rising sun

giving her heart and soul to Gods (God's)

Especially her dog diamond (Diamond)

cuddle (cuddled) on her tender feet.

his body weight had change (changed)

She ignored the loud thunder and lighten (lightening)

warning of a (an) awful storm

Tall tree crumble (crumbled) like match sticks, beautiful flower drown (drowned)

She knew their time has (had) come

y to endured (endure) it all in one night

Tear (Tears) stream (streamed) down her face like falling rain
She live (lived) her life in vain.

They no longer put you on (in) a trance

Her beautiful slim smooth neck that resemble (resembled) a swan

Those golden curl's (curls) turned milky grey

She never struggle (struggled) feeling no sand under her feet

Hazel smile (smiled) thinking all the
sea creature will (would) be her new friends and pets.

To hazel it (had) just begun.

Patricia

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Comment Written 14-May-2013

reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my write, for your thoughtful comments and kind words and for all the help..

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

This is a lovely poem, reminiscing about your mother on Mothers Day.When she was sick at the hospital you sang to her. This is proof of your love for her. Your picture is perfect for your poem.You imagery is spot on.

Comment Written 14-May-2013

reply by the author on 14-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my poem, for yiour thoughtful comments and kind words.
Thank you for the star.

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

Plain down daughterly love - come thru the stages of real living until acceptance which gives her the wisdom to tell this loving story so winsome. Thank you Misscookie for teaching us about the letting go precisely because of love.

Comment Written 13-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you for reading my poem, for your comments and kind words.

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

A truly touching and heart and soul stirring reflection
on your precious mother. There is love pouring out of
every word and memory, like an endlessly flowing fountain.
This is a most beloved and cherishing tribute and memoir
for your Mother...and bless your for loving her and
sharing those delicate and unforgettable memories...
Love and blessings always....Ronni

Comment Written 13-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you for reading my poem, for your comments and kind words.

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

Cookie, I thoroughly enjoyed this expression of the love for your mom. She must have been a very special person-the first verse makes that very clear. Nice, the way you gave images of that love, describing the interaction with her when it was time to 'let her go'. Nicely done free verse written in good form. Thank you for sharing. xxCarrie

Comment Written 13-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you for reading my poem, for your comments and kind words.

reply by Carrie Smith on 13-May-2013

Always welcome, my friend! xxSusan

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Until next time, my friend.

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Until next time, my friend.

reply by Carrie Smith on 13-May-2013

You are special, cookie! :) LOL

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

You say the sweetest thins LOL
Until next time.

reply by Carrie Smith on 13-May-2013

If anyone does, you deserve them, my friend.:) Yes, until next time...LOL Susan

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

What a beautiful poem in honor of your mom! The space is missing after the comma in line 3, stanza two. Did you mean "soul" in the last line of stanza 4? Capitalize "Lord" in the third line of stanza 5. I could feel the love.

Comment Written 13-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you very much for your comments and kind words.Thank you for your help.

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

A visual six your way for this one, misscookie... A beautiful, loving, & touching poem about your Mommy, or Mama, (like I used to call mine), & uplifting that her Faith remained strong until her dying day, continuing her journey to be with the Lord, as her soul needed a rest...Thanks for taking time to write it, & letting us know, on this Mother's Day 2013....And, Happy Mother's Day to you, Dear, misscookie.

Comment Written 12-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my poem, for your thoughtful comments and kind words. I pray you had a blessed Mother's Day

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

I enjoyed reading this wonderful poem about your mother, Miss Cookie. I feel she lived a long and fulfilling life. I like the artwork you chose too. Thanks so much for sharing :) Lise

Comment Written 12-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my poem, for your thoughtful comments and kind words. I pray you had a blessed Mother's Day

reply by Lise Deangelo on 13-May-2013

I had a lovely day, thank you Miss cookie :)

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

I'm glad to hear that.
Until next time.

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Rating of Chapter 132 - Her soul needed a rest

Hi misscookie

This is so very sweet. A beautiful memoire about your dear mother. I love the lines where you mention how much you "loved her and her unconditional love" - she was a precious mom. It's wonderful that you sang songs to her in hospital and I love the way she was at least able to tap the beat! (She had music in her heart)

Thanks for sharing this lovely piece for Mother's Day.

God bless you,
Christine

Comment Written 12-May-2013

reply by the author on 13-May-2013

Thank you very much for taking time to read my poem, for your thoughtful comments and kind words. I pray you had a blessed Mother's Day

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