The Impudence of Oranges
Reflective Autobiographical Poetry5 total reviews
Comment from more2write
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
Wow, the honesty of this poem blew me away. My heart is aching right now. What a sad story but brilliant work. I hope to read more of your writing in the future.
Happy writing, more2write
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Wow, the honesty of this poem blew me away. My heart is aching right now. What a sad story but brilliant work. I hope to read more of your writing in the future.
Happy writing, more2write
Comment Written 23-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thanks, and welcome M:)
Comment from Keronica
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
Wow! This is an incredibly deep piece of poetry. I especially enjoyed your choice of a title. Excellent! This is a very sad story. I liked the way you suck the reader in and do not let them know what's going on until the very end. Best of luck to you!
~Keronica
reply by the author on 21-May-2011
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Wow! This is an incredibly deep piece of poetry. I especially enjoyed your choice of a title. Excellent! This is a very sad story. I liked the way you suck the reader in and do not let them know what's going on until the very end. Best of luck to you!
~Keronica
Comment Written 20-May-2011
reply by the author on 21-May-2011
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Thank you M:)
Comment from Aletheia
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
This poem is so well written and highly emotive. Fantastic imagery with "thrown down thrown down" and I love the way that we see the scene through the child's eyes. So sad. Your story brought tears to my eyes. Congratulations on your nomination. You deserve it!
reply by the author on 20-May-2011
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This poem is so well written and highly emotive. Fantastic imagery with "thrown down thrown down" and I love the way that we see the scene through the child's eyes. So sad. Your story brought tears to my eyes. Congratulations on your nomination. You deserve it!
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 20-May-2011
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thank you for your kind words, begonia... M:)
Comment from Herb
Rating of Prologue - The Last Summer
My my what a sad little melancholic memory. A great moral message in here, which is what I take from this story. You have always gotta be careful around those we influence and especially children. The story it self was written brilliantly. i knew that little girl even though you only described her through your childhood eyes. Excellent. By the way why have you called the book 'Impudence of oranges.'
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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My my what a sad little melancholic memory. A great moral message in here, which is what I take from this story. You have always gotta be careful around those we influence and especially children. The story it self was written brilliantly. i knew that little girl even though you only described her through your childhood eyes. Excellent. By the way why have you called the book 'Impudence of oranges.'
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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The book is named for the first poem in it. I am currently working on the prologue which will hopefully explain the title in more detail. Thanks again :)
Comment from Herb
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
This is lovely and sad. My favorite conflicting emotions. Maybe melancholy would be a better way to describe it. I like the rhythm like a 'dance'.
It's good to be back.
xxx
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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This is lovely and sad. My favorite conflicting emotions. Maybe melancholy would be a better way to describe it. I like the rhythm like a 'dance'.
It's good to be back.
xxx
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you again :)
Comment from Veekz
Rating of Prologue - The Last Summer
It's true that it can take only one little word to undo a whole friendship or relationship. It's hugely unfair circumstances in this case though with an innocent child being taught that word without being told of it's meaning and the implications it has on other people. I recommend 'Undone' by Janilou - it's only a little haiku and I think you will be able to relate to a lot after reading this piece of yours :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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It's true that it can take only one little word to undo a whole friendship or relationship. It's hugely unfair circumstances in this case though with an innocent child being taught that word without being told of it's meaning and the implications it has on other people. I recommend 'Undone' by Janilou - it's only a little haiku and I think you will be able to relate to a lot after reading this piece of yours :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thanks again, Veekz. I checked out Janilou's poem and it's spot on. She managed to say in a few words what took me 1300 to say. Quite beautiful. Thank you for your kind comments. Take care... M:)
Comment from Veekz
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
This is an exceptionally sad tale yet told so lightly and innocently through a child's eyes as the mother dances out of their life. If it's biographical, I am sorry for how confusing that must have been for you as a child. No edits needed that I could spot, this is quite a powerful piece.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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This is an exceptionally sad tale yet told so lightly and innocently through a child's eyes as the mother dances out of their life. If it's biographical, I am sorry for how confusing that must have been for you as a child. No edits needed that I could spot, this is quite a powerful piece.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thanks again, girl:)
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
You have painted a scene with so much insight and impact, in such a personal way that I can't fail to be moved. This poem is the epitome of 'showing' the reader exactly what 'you' feel/felt and saw in such as way as to involve them completely. The repeat line "thrown down" is astonishing - an inspired touch that somehow says something more than if it was only said once. I'd give a 6 if I had one to to give! This is one of the best poems I've read on this site.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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You have painted a scene with so much insight and impact, in such a personal way that I can't fail to be moved. This poem is the epitome of 'showing' the reader exactly what 'you' feel/felt and saw in such as way as to involve them completely. The repeat line "thrown down" is astonishing - an inspired touch that somehow says something more than if it was only said once. I'd give a 6 if I had one to to give! This is one of the best poems I've read on this site.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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I'm thrilled you liked it, Inge. Thanks again :)
Comment from ameen786
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
Wow! What a story--sad indeed, you have great talent poet, the way you delivered the tragedy of a broken family with a little girl in her own world, great presentation, awesome job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Wow! What a story--sad indeed, you have great talent poet, the way you delivered the tragedy of a broken family with a little girl in her own world, great presentation, awesome job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind words, my dear. Cheers and happy writing!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
Rating of Chapter 3 - Leaving
this is very well written iwth good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about a mother leaving and leaving the child behind and the memories.......
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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this is very well written iwth good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about a mother leaving and leaving the child behind and the memories.......
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you! M:)
