The Spirit of the Night Sea.
The sea changes after dark.27 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
You are an artist that paints with beautiful words and weaves them into a tapestry of delight for all who enjoy your work.
This captured me and now I want to run to Australia.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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You are an artist that paints with beautiful words and weaves them into a tapestry of delight for all who enjoy your work.
This captured me and now I want to run to Australia.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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You would get very wet feet at present, we are in floods! Thank you for reading one of my oldies. Blessings, Kay.
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Thought s and prayers are with you all from New York City!
PB
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Thank you PB, we have been blessed by Oprah's stay, she has brought 1.5 million dollars in and is directing Americans to her web site to donate. Bless you, Kay.
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I shall and others will. We do care about you!
PB
Comment from Ailo
Wow, I can see how you are a published poet...this really painted a picture as I read it. You have a very powerful first stanza...that one is my favorite. I love your way with words...everything I have read is really good.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Wow, I can see how you are a published poet...this really painted a picture as I read it. You have a very powerful first stanza...that one is my favorite. I love your way with words...everything I have read is really good.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Ailo, Thanks so much for your kind review; glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from bard owl
This is breath-taking. The power of words is shown by the vivid imagery in your poem. The ending line is so appropriate - night surrendering to the light of day. Excellent read, Aussie. It was a pleasure. Blessings to you, Linda
PS Is that your kitty? What a beautiful feline. Cats have always fascinated me. We have 5 of them and all are mesmerizing examples of nature's beauty.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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This is breath-taking. The power of words is shown by the vivid imagery in your poem. The ending line is so appropriate - night surrendering to the light of day. Excellent read, Aussie. It was a pleasure. Blessings to you, Linda
PS Is that your kitty? What a beautiful feline. Cats have always fascinated me. We have 5 of them and all are mesmerizing examples of nature's beauty.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank yoo my friend; glad you liked the poem. No, wish it was my cat - I love felines and only have one dog now. Blessings, Kai.
Comment from Border Reiver
Hi Kai,
I'm not sure about the line "the skies' crimson colours" because I'd assume that there is only one sky so would write " the sky's crimson colours" Of course that is just my opinion.
I love the second verse! Actually I love it all. As I was reading I could almost here the sound of the sea. Good job!
Katrina
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Hi Kai,
I'm not sure about the line "the skies' crimson colours" because I'd assume that there is only one sky so would write " the sky's crimson colours" Of course that is just my opinion.
I love the second verse! Actually I love it all. As I was reading I could almost here the sound of the sea. Good job!
Katrina
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Katrina, Thanks so much for reading and glad you liked the poem.Blessings, Kai.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You wrote a beautiful poem. I can see the imagines, feel the wind blowing in my face, and smell the salty sea. Your poem flows smoothly and was fun to read.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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You wrote a beautiful poem. I can see the imagines, feel the wind blowing in my face, and smell the salty sea. Your poem flows smoothly and was fun to read.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Barbara, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, Kai.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Aussie ...
In this poem, you have good rhyming and, in such poetic phrases, describe that something which is particular to the sea at night - which you appropriately call "The Spirit of the Night Sea." You also have a lovely photograph at the top, taken at the twilight hour between day and night, with the setting of the sun in all its glory and the presence of the night with its magnificent skies ... and the silence of the deep.
I really enjoyed reading what you have written and thank you for sharing it with us. There is nothing to suggest changing. Because of the beauty of your words, I am happy to award the 6th star.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Hullo Aussie ...
In this poem, you have good rhyming and, in such poetic phrases, describe that something which is particular to the sea at night - which you appropriately call "The Spirit of the Night Sea." You also have a lovely photograph at the top, taken at the twilight hour between day and night, with the setting of the sun in all its glory and the presence of the night with its magnificent skies ... and the silence of the deep.
I really enjoyed reading what you have written and thank you for sharing it with us. There is nothing to suggest changing. Because of the beauty of your words, I am happy to award the 6th star.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Wow! Thank you so much Nanette Mary; so glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, Kai.
Comment from Mastery
It is indeed obvious that you do in fact love the sea, Aussie. This poem is very well written and expressive of a poet taking note of his wonderful surroundings.. love these lines:
"As the shimmering sun surrenders
to the enchantment of the night,
the skies' crimson colours
end their mystical fight."
Bob
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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It is indeed obvious that you do in fact love the sea, Aussie. This poem is very well written and expressive of a poet taking note of his wonderful surroundings.. love these lines:
"As the shimmering sun surrenders
to the enchantment of the night,
the skies' crimson colours
end their mystical fight."
Bob
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Bob, Thank you so much for your kind review; yes, the sea is a major part of Australian's lives. Blessings, Kai.
Comment from joemass
G'day Aussie
Lovely change of image after the second verse. I am constantly amazed by the foolhardiness of rock fisherman off the NSW coast who seem almost wilfully to endanger their own and other people's lives by ignoring the obvious threat of an unsettled sea.
Good job!
Joemass (far enough from the sea in Canberra)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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G'day Aussie
Lovely change of image after the second verse. I am constantly amazed by the foolhardiness of rock fisherman off the NSW coast who seem almost wilfully to endanger their own and other people's lives by ignoring the obvious threat of an unsettled sea.
Good job!
Joemass (far enough from the sea in Canberra)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Hi there Joe, Thanks so much for reading, glad you liked the poem. Getting cold in Canberra I bet. Cheers, Kai.
Comment from mermaids
As an ocean lover, I enjoyed reading this. I have never thought of the sea at night, this is a great theme. You paint a clear picture of the sea and I see no need for any revisions.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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As an ocean lover, I enjoyed reading this. I have never thought of the sea at night, this is a great theme. You paint a clear picture of the sea and I see no need for any revisions.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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From one mermaid to another - thank you for swimming by and glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kai.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Aussie,
This is an extremely well composed poem! I see why it is
rated as exceptional. It has a very smooth flow to it as
well as having unforced rhymes as you create a beautiful
picture in our minds eye.
I especially liked these lines:
'Echoes from howling winds
stretch far beyond the sea,
whilst voices murmuring in the waves,
set the spirit of the night sea free.'
I very much enjoyed reading this poem,
Linda
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Aussie,
This is an extremely well composed poem! I see why it is
rated as exceptional. It has a very smooth flow to it as
well as having unforced rhymes as you create a beautiful
picture in our minds eye.
I especially liked these lines:
'Echoes from howling winds
stretch far beyond the sea,
whilst voices murmuring in the waves,
set the spirit of the night sea free.'
I very much enjoyed reading this poem,
Linda
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Hello Linda, Thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed the poem. Cheers, Kai.
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You are welcome!
