My Heart Feels You
Inspired by a Josh Groban song26 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
Helvi2,
Very descriptive and created impressions are very vivid and understandable. Understandable and thought provoking but especially insightful comments.
This stanza does not rhyme. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
I know some have uncertainty
About love living (on),
Yet you're still here within my heart,
So can it be they're (wrong)?
Everything else looks terrific!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Helvi2,
Very descriptive and created impressions are very vivid and understandable. Understandable and thought provoking but especially insightful comments.
This stanza does not rhyme. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
I know some have uncertainty
About love living (on),
Yet you're still here within my heart,
So can it be they're (wrong)?
Everything else looks terrific!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 11-Dec-2009
Comment from Miska
HI
This so poignant. The fact that someone has passed away does not mean they are no longer loved.
For me, you have expressed that sentiment in a beautiful manner. Well done. best regards Miska
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HI
This so poignant. The fact that someone has passed away does not mean they are no longer loved.
For me, you have expressed that sentiment in a beautiful manner. Well done. best regards Miska
Comment Written 11-Dec-2009
Comment from missy98writer
Helvi2,
I enjoyed your love of music poem "My Heart Feels you". Your writing is well crafted. The poem evokes great emotion. I wish I had six stars but I'm out so I'm giving you five stars. I like the line:
You're still a vision in my mind
That haunts me every day,
A cherished loved reflection found,
I'd never wish away.
Your poem is an excellent entry for the contest my love of music.
missy98writer.
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Helvi2,
I enjoyed your love of music poem "My Heart Feels you". Your writing is well crafted. The poem evokes great emotion. I wish I had six stars but I'm out so I'm giving you five stars. I like the line:
You're still a vision in my mind
That haunts me every day,
A cherished loved reflection found,
I'd never wish away.
Your poem is an excellent entry for the contest my love of music.
missy98writer.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2009
Comment from joemass
G'day Helvi2
Lovely, quiet, tender, loving poem! There are one or two words ('amour' for example) that I found a bit outside the language of the rest of the poem but that'sa not a fatal thing. The one thing that does another look, I suggest, is 'how can' in stanza 7. I think it shoud be more like 'why should' or 'why would'. I could tell you how to do it but I couldn't tell y9u why you should.
Hope this helps!
Joemass
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G'day Helvi2
Lovely, quiet, tender, loving poem! There are one or two words ('amour' for example) that I found a bit outside the language of the rest of the poem but that'sa not a fatal thing. The one thing that does another look, I suggest, is 'how can' in stanza 7. I think it shoud be more like 'why should' or 'why would'. I could tell you how to do it but I couldn't tell y9u why you should.
Hope this helps!
Joemass
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from words
Beautiful.
I love the symmetry of the opening and closing:
When your amour is heaven bound
You pray for wings to fly,
To hold the warmth of love's embrace
And never let it die.
You ending line was perfect:My heart feels you , with every beat it takes.
Good luck in the contest.
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Beautiful.
I love the symmetry of the opening and closing:
When your amour is heaven bound
You pray for wings to fly,
To hold the warmth of love's embrace
And never let it die.
You ending line was perfect:My heart feels you , with every beat it takes.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from Trybuck
The competition is tough on here, but it looks as though you may have another winner with this one, whether it wins the contest or not. Well done, Buck
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The competition is tough on here, but it looks as though you may have another winner with this one, whether it wins the contest or not. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from Deejharrington
I think you did a beautiful job interpreting the music and lyrics. I believe in what the song says, love and love ones never really "die". We feel them and hold them close in our hearts. I have never heard the song, I will download it now. Thanks
dj
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I think you did a beautiful job interpreting the music and lyrics. I believe in what the song says, love and love ones never really "die". We feel them and hold them close in our hearts. I have never heard the song, I will download it now. Thanks
dj
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from fionageorge
Beautiful, and well deserved high ratings all around. Stunning use of simple words, strung together in such a wonderful way, the emotions and poignancy flow off the page.
Warmest regards and seasons greetings to you and yours.
Marijke
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Beautiful, and well deserved high ratings all around. Stunning use of simple words, strung together in such a wonderful way, the emotions and poignancy flow off the page.
Warmest regards and seasons greetings to you and yours.
Marijke
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Helvi....this is a lovely poem. I am a fan of Josh Groban....his voice and music is so beautiful. He was famous when he was still a teen. You have made good word choices to express yourself and the flow is even. Well doe...good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
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Hi Helvi....this is a lovely poem. I am a fan of Josh Groban....his voice and music is so beautiful. He was famous when he was still a teen. You have made good word choices to express yourself and the flow is even. Well doe...good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from mermaids
I am a Josh Groban fan so I enjoed this song, it has teh feel of his music in it. Definately a beautiful song that captures the feeling of love, wonderful verses and use of language.
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I am a Josh Groban fan so I enjoed this song, it has teh feel of his music in it. Definately a beautiful song that captures the feeling of love, wonderful verses and use of language.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
