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Rating of Chapter 44 - A Christmas Wedding (The End)

Absolutely stupendous, I absolutely love the new twist on a Vampire story. Now in one of the past chapters where they first go to father Dennis's church it was spelled as Denise, I should have kept track of which one it is.

I can honestly say most Vampire stories run the same gamut and I am more than tired of them however, this is something completely different and mesmerizing. This story totally captivated me.

Comment Written 12-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012

Thank you so very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this. It is just that, very different and fun. Would you call this story a paranormal romance?

Thanks again!

Steve

reply by rusla on 12-Jan-2012

It would fit more into a paranormal romance than horror, romace, sci fi romance, or fantasy it maybe have parts of those i it but I would consider it Paramormal Romance.
Steve, you should do this as a trilogy if possible.

Randi-Lee

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012

I love the trilogy aspect! Thanks for your suggestions.

Steve

reply by rusla on 12-Jan-2012

There is an online publisher looking for paranormal romance with a gothic feel. I think you should get in touch with Black Lyon and see how it goes. Just reread and correct a few talking heads and I think you can do it.

Randi-Lee

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012

Thank you!

Steve

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Rating of Chapter 4 - Some Needed Rest and Relaxation

Strange my rating system just changed, weird. Anyways, I am riveted to this story, It is totally a unique tale of vampirism.

Comment Written 11-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!!!

Steve

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Rating of Chapter 3 - Near Death

Excellent and very different, a scintillating tale, a very different vampire story, For a bit it seemed you might be falling into the "talking heads syndrome' but it was all fine.

Comment Written 11-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012

Thank you again so much for such a wonderful review!

Steve

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Rating of Chapter 2 - Is This Heaven?

Magnificent, I would love to be at a place like that. You have done an awesome job with this story. I am riveted to this...god work!

Comment Written 11-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012

Thank you, thank you, thank you!!! Yes, the Wishes Resort is a fantasy come true for many. :)

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Positively captivating, you caught the essence of a drunken abuser and woman too afraid to leave. Her cousin has now saved her life for awhile.

Comment Written 11-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012

Thank you SO MUCH for this wonderful review!!! It's been a while since I wrote this first chapter. During the course of writing this book, my skills improved. It is a fantastic ride though. I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it. Thank you for your kind words!

Steve

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ScarletClearwater

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Great lovemaking scenes. I'll be keeping this one on my shelf and following your work. It was very well done and inticing. Great sexy read.

Comment Written 19-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! There area few scenes like that scattered around the book. I hope to turn this into a movie one day. :) Thanks again!!!

Steve

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Hi Steve, I don't understand. I ran across this in the bonus. Are you reposting the whole book? I never read this chapter. Don't quite know when I climbed aboard the wishes plane.
Very nice build up here. You really developed Brookes character well. Now I can understand her background.
Well done. Good dialogue. luv jada

Comment Written 13-Jan-2010

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010

Hi Jada! I'm in the editing phase and when I make a lot of changes I spend $9.95. I don't know what the bonus is, but am glad for it and your review. It is the most violent chapters in the 44 chapters. Editing is a BIG time consumer, LOL. I'm spending days on just one paragraph, but the results are good and it's fun. But I want to set Stan free so I can get to work on a sequel. Thanks for taking a look!

Steve

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Rating of Chapter 4 - Some Needed Rest and Relaxation

Looks like she is not completely rid of Jason after all. She may be in more danger now of the vampire. Really interesting chapter.

Comment Written 13-Jan-2010

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010

So true! Thank you so much for your encouraging comments and wonderful review. :)

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A BLOOD SAFE ESCAPE VAMPIRE TALE!

This is a forcefully narrative, dialogue based; dramatic and panoramic work fantasy based an escape.

Introduction is catchy, interesting, appealing and contributory to the next line.

Dialogues are blocked, packaged, pot-poured, passionately contributory, referral, practical, glossy, deep and light, all purposive flow and catch to the mainstream to follow storyline coverage progression.

Characters are relevant in placement, characterization is diverse, diversified, coherent, and practicable, and inter-woven rounded over the plot links to the maturation and conclusive phase.

Ending is somewhat mystic, curious and spontaneously beckoning to another phase linkage.

It follows an organisation of structure, language, style and setting and locale.

I liked and enjoyed it mostly.

It was a pleasant fantastic haunting throbbing read.

Comment Written 13-Jan-2010

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010

Thank you so much for this most encouraging review! :)

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