The Humor of a Sheltered Life
1000 word mix of non-fiction and fiction18 total reviews
Comment from K-Patrick
This was a nice fun read. I laughed quite a bit, just from the similarities of life. Everyone's parents are "square" one time or another.
Very well written and I did not notice anything that would weaken the piece.
Good job and I am glad you made it out unimpregnated!
:o)
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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This was a nice fun read. I laughed quite a bit, just from the similarities of life. Everyone's parents are "square" one time or another.
Very well written and I did not notice anything that would weaken the piece.
Good job and I am glad you made it out unimpregnated!
:o)
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my little story.
Comment from Cairn Destop
Welcome to prose, or the dark side of the site. Of course that viewpoint is a matter of perspective. You must have been from my generation. Can still remember the scandle when Lucy announced on television she expected a child. Now the F-word is used so often it has become commonplace, without shock value. Thanks for the retrospective view of an earlier and innocent time.
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Welcome to prose, or the dark side of the site. Of course that viewpoint is a matter of perspective. You must have been from my generation. Can still remember the scandle when Lucy announced on television she expected a child. Now the F-word is used so often it has become commonplace, without shock value. Thanks for the retrospective view of an earlier and innocent time.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. Actually, it really isn't generational, but more a personal world view because I still know parents (some of them dear friends) nowadays who are very sheltering and strict.
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Thank you for taking the time to review my story.
Comment from Carol D Parker
Excellent story. You have a remarkable story-telling ability. The words you chose are perfect for this. It was interesting and enjoyable to read. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Delora
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Excellent story. You have a remarkable story-telling ability. The words you chose are perfect for this. It was interesting and enjoyable to read. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Delora
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to read my story and the encouraging comments.
Comment from SoulSong
Very well written. ---and I thought parochial school was bad! Your parents certainly were a unique twosome. Looks like all the reading paid off in another way---your ability to write. Good luck in the contest
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Very well written. ---and I thought parochial school was bad! Your parents certainly were a unique twosome. Looks like all the reading paid off in another way---your ability to write. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-May-2009
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from mermaids
Well written and held my interest. Your parents were a bit over the edge but they did mellow out like most people do. Good luck in the contest.
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Well written and held my interest. Your parents were a bit over the edge but they did mellow out like most people do. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my story.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello fayesh
Good story, you had me wanting to read more about your mom and Dad's notions of how to bring up a girl.
Reminded me of my childhood in the forties and fifties
I wonder if your parents read you entry they would also get a good laugh
Gert
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Hello fayesh
Good story, you had me wanting to read more about your mom and Dad's notions of how to bring up a girl.
Reminded me of my childhood in the forties and fifties
I wonder if your parents read you entry they would also get a good laugh
Gert
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you, Gert, for taking the time to review my story. My Mom still gets a life from my stories not realizing that they are taken from my childhood.
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fayesh
You are so welcome
Gert
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Gert, I just realized that I said "my mother gets (a life from my stories") rather than a "a laugh from my stories." My mother is very much alive.
:)) F_
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Hello fayesh
What I thought you said she get a' lift' form your wrirings
but I like 'laugh' better
smiles
Gert
Comment from OldVet
I remember the "keep one foot on the floor" days. Nice stroll down memory lanes as most of us from that era have endured these trails in one form or another.
Some suggestions:
I decided that the love scenes were just too good to miss and that I would make certain I used a Kleenex when I turned on the TV[, - delete] and that I was going to educate myself just for future reference. No comma is needed when a series is connected by a common conjunction (and).
"coolness". [Periods and commas go inside "]
My girls and I had it all - beauty and brains[--]and we were "cool[,]" weird, but "cool."
"samples,[delete stray space] " if you know what I mean.
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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I remember the "keep one foot on the floor" days. Nice stroll down memory lanes as most of us from that era have endured these trails in one form or another.
Some suggestions:
I decided that the love scenes were just too good to miss and that I would make certain I used a Kleenex when I turned on the TV[, - delete] and that I was going to educate myself just for future reference. No comma is needed when a series is connected by a common conjunction (and).
"coolness". [Periods and commas go inside "]
My girls and I had it all - beauty and brains[--]and we were "cool[,]" weird, but "cool."
"samples,[delete stray space] " if you know what I mean.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to proofread my story and review it. I have revisited my story and made the adjustments.
Comment from Jnetgame
I enjoyed this story about what you had to go through with your parents while you were growing up. Some of the lines were really funny. Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest.
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I enjoyed this story about what you had to go through with your parents while you were growing up. Some of the lines were really funny. Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to read my story.
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Fayesh,
So far, yours sems to be the most polished of the prose. I am quite impressed with how enjoyable this was to read. I laughed several times at the humor used. Great job. I will continue reading, but will surely remember this one.
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Hi Fayesh,
So far, yours sems to be the most polished of the prose. I am quite impressed with how enjoyable this was to read. I laughed several times at the humor used. Great job. I will continue reading, but will surely remember this one.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
LOL, Fayesh, this had me rolling about laughing. How dreadful to ahve such restrictive parents, but you sure 'rebelled' with ever increasing ingenuity. This was a very unusual challenge from Adele wasn't it? I'm pretty comfortable in either poetry or prose, but having to come up with humour - that was MY challenge. You ahve done so, effortlessly. Good luck in this contest.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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LOL, Fayesh, this had me rolling about laughing. How dreadful to ahve such restrictive parents, but you sure 'rebelled' with ever increasing ingenuity. This was a very unusual challenge from Adele wasn't it? I'm pretty comfortable in either poetry or prose, but having to come up with humour - that was MY challenge. You ahve done so, effortlessly. Good luck in this contest.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you, Kat, for the encouraging review. Glad you enjoyed my story.
