A Leaf on the Wind
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Comment from Freeflyer
I have bookcased your novel so that I may fill in the gaps. Although you say you are happy you make me feel so sad. Your life could have been so much different. I am so glad you made peace with your Mum and you were together at the end. Good Bless.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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I have bookcased your novel so that I may fill in the gaps. Although you say you are happy you make me feel so sad. Your life could have been so much different. I am so glad you made peace with your Mum and you were together at the end. Good Bless.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your very kind wors. I sincerely appreite them. In the end, you life is what it is. All I can do now, is look forward and do the best I can.
Comment from tammipratt
Good descriptions and use of words to create some great images. You have got good structure and form in this story.
You're dialogue was very good.
Thansk for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Good descriptions and use of words to create some great images. You have got good structure and form in this story.
You're dialogue was very good.
Thansk for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Tank you. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from laurelp
This is truly my favorite chapter. You sound like you are finally whole. It is a miracle, but one worth waiting for. You book was excellent, very well written and deserving of all the high praise you received.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2009
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This is truly my favorite chapter. You sound like you are finally whole. It is a miracle, but one worth waiting for. You book was excellent, very well written and deserving of all the high praise you received.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2009
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Thank you so very much for you kind review, continued interest and invaluable help throughout this entire process. I could not have done it without the suppor of so many like you.
Comment from penelope
I love the elegant way you described your mother's death, not overdramatizing it. What a lovely way to go. Did you really see her spirit? This is the only way to live a life; you've made your peace with your mother at least, despite all the sadness, there's so much inspiration and enlightenment here, Smurphgirl. So delighted you've found your peace and are doing well with your art. The only thing that struck me as I read the last few chapters is that I can't remember the transition when you moved to Mexico. I'm wondering if I missed something, so I'll take a peek. That would have to be addressed when you publish the book. Penelope
epitomy (As far as I know, this is the correct spelling, but I could be wrong. Sometimes I think I've been in Germany too long).
I live a solitry life, (solitary)
Without [out] you I would never,
You are truly in my debt.(I think you meant 'I am truly in your debt.'). No problem though. We are probably in your debt. You've probably opened many eyes and hearts with your most excellent story.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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I love the elegant way you described your mother's death, not overdramatizing it. What a lovely way to go. Did you really see her spirit? This is the only way to live a life; you've made your peace with your mother at least, despite all the sadness, there's so much inspiration and enlightenment here, Smurphgirl. So delighted you've found your peace and are doing well with your art. The only thing that struck me as I read the last few chapters is that I can't remember the transition when you moved to Mexico. I'm wondering if I missed something, so I'll take a peek. That would have to be addressed when you publish the book. Penelope
epitomy (As far as I know, this is the correct spelling, but I could be wrong. Sometimes I think I've been in Germany too long).
I live a solitry life, (solitary)
Without [out] you I would never,
You are truly in my debt.(I think you meant 'I am truly in your debt.'). No problem though. We are probably in your debt. You've probably opened many eyes and hearts with your most excellent story.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your kind detailed review. I will go back over the last few chapters to check the transision issue. Yes, the would should be "your" not my. AGain, thank you very much for all your help.
Comment from OldVet
Okay, I fess up. I haven't been following this story because the subject matter disturbs me. However, I often read final chapters to see how stories end (I know ... I cheat).
This seems to be a happy ending to a sad story. I found it well written with a few technical glitches.
Suggestions:
The only thing that really caught my eye was missing commas, mainly on compound sentences.
Examples:
The medication was working[,] and she had no more seizures.
I slowly walked up the street[,] and as I turned the corner, I smiled remembering the hundreds of times....
I closed my eyes[,] and with tears streaming down my cheeks[,] I said, "Yes, Mom I know you love me."
"The American lady who isn't afraid of color". [...color." Commas and periods always go inside all quotation marks.]
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Okay, I fess up. I haven't been following this story because the subject matter disturbs me. However, I often read final chapters to see how stories end (I know ... I cheat).
This seems to be a happy ending to a sad story. I found it well written with a few technical glitches.
Suggestions:
The only thing that really caught my eye was missing commas, mainly on compound sentences.
Examples:
The medication was working[,] and she had no more seizures.
I slowly walked up the street[,] and as I turned the corner, I smiled remembering the hundreds of times....
I closed my eyes[,] and with tears streaming down my cheeks[,] I said, "Yes, Mom I know you love me."
"The American lady who isn't afraid of color". [...color." Commas and periods always go inside all quotation marks.]
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thanks. I appreciate your high rating and helpful assistance with ghe grammar.
Comment from jodeecee
/"/Good heavens, Mom, I haven't gone on an official date since 1989.
I very much enjoyed your journey, and I too think you as someone I know, much of your expression shared, is healing and a validation. Those who continue to suffer, we can't heal them anyway. Only our own energy, can we heal.
Great job. if I ever get to walk those beautiful beaches, I'll look for you!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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/"/Good heavens, Mom, I haven't gone on an official date since 1989.
I very much enjoyed your journey, and I too think you as someone I know, much of your expression shared, is healing and a validation. Those who continue to suffer, we can't heal them anyway. Only our own energy, can we heal.
Great job. if I ever get to walk those beautiful beaches, I'll look for you!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thak you for you kind review and all the great assistance you have given me since I posted the first chapter.
Comment from WRITER1
I am so happy for you, you deserve all the good things, I wish you so much luck. I hope you sell this wonderful book, gain recognition and your family see you for who you are. God bless.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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I am so happy for you, you deserve all the good things, I wish you so much luck. I hope you sell this wonderful book, gain recognition and your family see you for who you are. God bless.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your very kind review. I sincerely apprecite it.
Comment from prodigal
This has been a wonderful story,my friend. i am sorry I only picked up on it toward the end. You have lived quite a life. I am so pleased you found peace with your mother. I am glad you found happiness. Yours is a great story and you told it very well. Congratulations on finishing your autobiography. Perhaps there will be a part 2 filled with all the happy things your life will bring. Well done- Sam
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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This has been a wonderful story,my friend. i am sorry I only picked up on it toward the end. You have lived quite a life. I am so pleased you found peace with your mother. I am glad you found happiness. Yours is a great story and you told it very well. Congratulations on finishing your autobiography. Perhaps there will be a part 2 filled with all the happy things your life will bring. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you so very much for your kind words. I sincerely appreciate them. I don't think there is another book in me at this time but who know, in ten years, I may try it again.
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written testimonial to a loved one. It isn't often I hear someone say that they made peace with a parent before death. Your story gives the reader a very good idea of how you felt toward your mother.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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A very well written testimonial to a loved one. It isn't often I hear someone say that they made peace with a parent before death. Your story gives the reader a very good idea of how you felt toward your mother.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. I sincerely appreciate them.
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You're welcome. Charlie
Comment from jojosug
Thank you so much for this wonderful chapter. It brought tears to my eyes. It was so wonderful this final resolution and sharing of love, devoid of anger or bitterness with your mother. You are a rose, talented, beautiful and spirited. The thorns protected you allowing the rose to grow and bloom.
At last, you have found peace and serenity, it is for many an elusive element I'm so glad you've found it. I'm not sure this is your last chapter, but thank you so much for sharing this with us all and taking you on the roller coaster journey of your life. May your days be filled with colour, light and peace.
Jo
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this wonderful chapter. It brought tears to my eyes. It was so wonderful this final resolution and sharing of love, devoid of anger or bitterness with your mother. You are a rose, talented, beautiful and spirited. The thorns protected you allowing the rose to grow and bloom.
At last, you have found peace and serenity, it is for many an elusive element I'm so glad you've found it. I'm not sure this is your last chapter, but thank you so much for sharing this with us all and taking you on the roller coaster journey of your life. May your days be filled with colour, light and peace.
Jo
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for your heart felt review. I could not have done this without the help of so many on FanStoy. I cannot find the words to thank each and every one of your for your support and generous assistance. I am so pleased you liked my book and for the consistantly high ratings.
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It has been nothing, but a pleasure.
Jo
