Taking Census
Free Verse: No Punctuation:39 total reviews
Comment from words
Intersting statement of your life's positions in verse.
My favorite stanzas:
I forfeit
Half-hearted apologies
Veiled friendships
Silent indifference
I have no answers for
The why of loss
The when of pain
The how of regret
The what if of perhaps
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Intersting statement of your life's positions in verse.
My favorite stanzas:
I forfeit
Half-hearted apologies
Veiled friendships
Silent indifference
I have no answers for
The why of loss
The when of pain
The how of regret
The what if of perhaps
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from D. Longo
Once again, dear friend, you tap into being; sharing eloquently those things which drive, haunt, define and delight.
I do so hope you're recognized by your academic peers as an accomplished artist: a gifted soul who's approaching her zenith, gifting readers with heart and soul, joy and reverence.
It's an honor, and a delight, to witness your efforts evolve into accomplishment. Bravo, Diane. Bravo!
Be well, Friend, and most of all, may God continue to bless you and yours.
Dante
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2009
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Once again, dear friend, you tap into being; sharing eloquently those things which drive, haunt, define and delight.
I do so hope you're recognized by your academic peers as an accomplished artist: a gifted soul who's approaching her zenith, gifting readers with heart and soul, joy and reverence.
It's an honor, and a delight, to witness your efforts evolve into accomplishment. Bravo, Diane. Bravo!
Be well, Friend, and most of all, may God continue to bless you and yours.
Dante
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2009
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Hello dear friend!
If you only knew...
I so appreciate your kind words on this rainy, miserable day of spring break; they are far too complimentary...but oh, so appreciated! (with apologies for redundancy!!! :>)p
Be Well, Dante!
And thank you so much again!
diane
Comment from Amicus
Splendid poem, Diane. You manage with succinctness and well chosen words to portray a narrator able to take stock and reveal herself as honest, vulnerable and searching. The flow of the free verse poem was smooth and enhanced the contemplative tone.
I especially admire the I lack and I have no answers to sections.
Terrific job.
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Splendid poem, Diane. You manage with succinctness and well chosen words to portray a narrator able to take stock and reveal herself as honest, vulnerable and searching. The flow of the free verse poem was smooth and enhanced the contemplative tone.
I especially admire the I lack and I have no answers to sections.
Terrific job.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of poetry. The diction is beautiful. I like the deep insights into various aspects of life that are contained in this work. kudos
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry. The diction is beautiful. I like the deep insights into various aspects of life that are contained in this work. kudos
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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So pleased you enjoyed! Thank you! diane
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I liked it. I wanted to shorten it a bit in places, as it might be a LEETLE redundant, but I loved the premise, and I liked the way you drew it to a neat, well-ordered conclusion. Good stuff here.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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I liked it. I wanted to shorten it a bit in places, as it might be a LEETLE redundant, but I loved the premise, and I liked the way you drew it to a neat, well-ordered conclusion. Good stuff here.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Man! You are a tough guy to please! Am glad you enjoyed! Thanks for stopping by! diane
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
Oh, how I wish I had six stars for this one. It is a lovely poem and the art is perfect as the lady seems to be contemplating right along with you. It gives us thought to ponder on our lives as well. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
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Hi Diane,
Oh, how I wish I had six stars for this one. It is a lovely poem and the art is perfect as the lady seems to be contemplating right along with you. It gives us thought to ponder on our lives as well. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from tteach
Wow! Wouldn't it be awesome if some of this was included in the census? I love how you take stock....of what you have and of what you still yearn for.
This is a touching poem.
terry
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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Wow! Wouldn't it be awesome if some of this was included in the census? I love how you take stock....of what you have and of what you still yearn for.
This is a touching poem.
terry
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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Terry!
Thank you so much for this extraordinary review. I am so sorry it has taken me so long to acknowledge your kind words. Take Care! diane
Comment from joan marie
I like the way you wrote this and how you placed the verses. Great presentation. Mentioned a lot of things we should think about in terms of what is really important. Great write. joan marie
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I like the way you wrote this and how you placed the verses. Great presentation. Mentioned a lot of things we should think about in terms of what is really important. Great write. joan marie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from bard owl
This poem is so lovely and it does deserve a six-star rating. You have hit upon what every comtemplating soul thinks about at various times/all the time. And though there is no rhyme, it flows so very smoothly, none is needed. Blessings, Linda
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This poem is so lovely and it does deserve a six-star rating. You have hit upon what every comtemplating soul thinks about at various times/all the time. And though there is no rhyme, it flows so very smoothly, none is needed. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from WRITER1
I thought you did a good job. I liked the way it flowed. I didn't think that the punctuation matters all that much.
A very heartfelt piece.
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I thought you did a good job. I liked the way it flowed. I didn't think that the punctuation matters all that much.
A very heartfelt piece.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
