A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "Como Esta?"Autobiography of abuse
12 total reviews
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
I'm glad that you and your mom have made a good decision. I really enjoy reading your autobiography. You have a lot of potential. Best of luck to you.
Sincerely,
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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I'm glad that you and your mom have made a good decision. I really enjoy reading your autobiography. You have a lot of potential. Best of luck to you.
Sincerely,
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thanks. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from medicnate
Great chapter. It's very descriptive and makes one feel like they are trolling around Mexico. I really like the raw emotion of the story. I still say if it doesn't get published soon, I'll eat my hat, hehe.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2009
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Great chapter. It's very descriptive and makes one feel like they are trolling around Mexico. I really like the raw emotion of the story. I still say if it doesn't get published soon, I'll eat my hat, hehe.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 13-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2009
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We actually were 'trolling'. First vacation my mother and I had in 10 years.
Comment from marion
Hi there
Hi Smurphgirl
I am not sure now, how I am thinking about all this. I am torn that your mother is so torn. That you are torn, that the whole family is torn. Especially, more so for your mother. At this age, life should have been much much better. To me, physical things are okay, but what the elderly need is more than that. The thing that becomes most important to them, is family. And that includes family unity. It makes me feel so sad, that this is missing, let's hope that it comes. I continue to enjoy your book, as heartfelt as I feel sometimes!! Marion.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Hi there
Hi Smurphgirl
I am not sure now, how I am thinking about all this. I am torn that your mother is so torn. That you are torn, that the whole family is torn. Especially, more so for your mother. At this age, life should have been much much better. To me, physical things are okay, but what the elderly need is more than that. The thing that becomes most important to them, is family. And that includes family unity. It makes me feel so sad, that this is missing, let's hope that it comes. I continue to enjoy your book, as heartfelt as I feel sometimes!! Marion.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Take a deep breath, close your eyes, and relax. I feel terribly that you feel terrible. I completely agree that the situation with my family is tragic and should never happen to any family. Sadly, this is the real world and happy endings are not always available. But to make you feel a little better, happiness is just around the corner.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Beautiful writing, Smurphy! This had texture, depth, color and emotions. Great! Only one sentence caught my eye:
The climate is perfect and the roses bloom year-round. This should be in past tense to correspond with the balance of the piece. i.e., The climate WAS perfect and the roses BLOOMED year round.
Other than that, everything was perfectly placed. A great chapter! Seraph
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Beautiful writing, Smurphy! This had texture, depth, color and emotions. Great! Only one sentence caught my eye:
The climate is perfect and the roses bloom year-round. This should be in past tense to correspond with the balance of the piece. i.e., The climate WAS perfect and the roses BLOOMED year round.
Other than that, everything was perfectly placed. A great chapter! Seraph
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words and as always, your keen eye.
Comment from laurelp
For once an up chapter. Wonderful and no errors in the reading. It is good that you two finally could talk and get to know each other.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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For once an up chapter. Wonderful and no errors in the reading. It is good that you two finally could talk and get to know each other.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, it was nice to get away from the chaos.
Comment from Firefly54
Interesting, the different attitude towards the elderly in Mexico, I didn't realise. Here our attitude is not so hot... the respect for experience does not often exist.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Interesting, the different attitude towards the elderly in Mexico, I didn't realise. Here our attitude is not so hot... the respect for experience does not often exist.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Yes, the elderly are well respected her. My mother thought she had died and gone to heaven.
Comment from adewpearl
You are a good daughter that you were able to let your mother open up to you and to have compassion for her after the agony she made of your childhood - you are doing far more than most people ever would have even if "I love you" stuck in your throat. The move sounds like it was a good idea. Brooke
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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You are a good daughter that you were able to let your mother open up to you and to have compassion for her after the agony she made of your childhood - you are doing far more than most people ever would have even if "I love you" stuck in your throat. The move sounds like it was a good idea. Brooke
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. And yes, the move was a very good thing.
Comment from jodeecee
Just a couple small things. Great chapt.
I was not used to driving more than /for/four// our five hours a day
we decided /to/leave the car with Shirley in Phoenix and to fly to Guadalajara.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Just a couple small things. Great chapt.
I was not used to driving more than /for/four// our five hours a day
we decided /to/leave the car with Shirley in Phoenix and to fly to Guadalajara.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you for you kind review and as always, your keen eye. No matter how many times I proof my work I seem to still miss them. Thank you for your continued help and support.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
This bought tears to my eyes you two bounding finally and opening up the lines of communication.But what continues to get me is your raft attention to fairness and the proper thing to do for the situation at hand.Its as if its a part of your DNA,nothing can move it,but you and you have repeatedly refused to allow yourself to do that.You have a heart of the purest of gold and its showing itself plainly now,wow.Very extremely well written.Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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This bought tears to my eyes you two bounding finally and opening up the lines of communication.But what continues to get me is your raft attention to fairness and the proper thing to do for the situation at hand.Its as if its a part of your DNA,nothing can move it,but you and you have repeatedly refused to allow yourself to do that.You have a heart of the purest of gold and its showing itself plainly now,wow.Very extremely well written.Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your very, very kind words. I have a deep sense of fair play...I think I developed it because I knew what it was like to be treated badly and never wanted to do that to anyone nor could I tolerate watching anyone treat someone badly. I got myself into a lot of trouble standing up for people.
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You are very welcome,Smurphgirl.Cranial Thinker
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Brilliant.
Beautifully written. No spag or typos, nothing to detract from your vivid descriptions of both scenery and emotions. Well done!
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Brilliant.
Beautifully written. No spag or typos, nothing to detract from your vivid descriptions of both scenery and emotions. Well done!
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thanks again. Only three chapters left!
